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Twentysomething English Lit. graduate, training to be an accountant while figuring out what she wants to be when she grows up.

4/7/2012 - to keep things reasonably tidy around here, I've decided to group my super-short canon-based stories into one collection, The Lost Scrolls. Anything over 500 words, or that fits specifically into one of my 'verses, will be given its own story link.

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Title: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its Own Light. by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 197]
Summary:
~ Lúthien was not the only offspring of Maia and Elf born in the Elder Days, but Vanimórë's tale was never to be sung in glittering halls.

His mother was Elven.
His father was Sauron.
His birth was accomplished by the blackest sorcery of Morgoth Bauglir.
He was forged as a double-edged sword is forged, as lethal and as beautiful.
And they tested him to breaking-point.


He would not break.

"Until the sky breaks and the mountains fall into the Great Sea, and the End cometh, there is no world for us." ~ Vanimórë Gorthaurion.

The first of the Dark Prince series, the story of Sauron's son, born to be a weapon, a warrior, and a servant of the Dark ~
First Age to the War of the Ring.


Category: Fiction
Characters: Gil-galad, Glorfindel, Legolas, Maglor, Melkor/Morgoth, Mouth of sauron, Nimrodel, OMC, Orc, Sauron
Content: Angst, AU, Character Death, Drama, Dubcon, Incest, Rape/Non-con, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its own Light.
Chapters: 73 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 148154 | Read count: 310995

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Published: June 30, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011


Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ Son of Cruelty ~

*Waves* I'm doing a re-read :) there hasn't been enough Van in my life recently! I'd forgotten how harrowing this is...Van's servile manner, his forced obedience, the childish hoping against hope...love it. Perfect for a miserable grey Scottish evening :)

Author's Response: Hiya, sweetie, how are you doing? Thank-you for the re-read. I am always started getting comments on older stories.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 14, 2012 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ To See Death As A Gift ~

Oh, Vanya :( :( :(

Sibling-based stories have always been a weakness of mine...I do occasionally wonder about an AU of your AU in which Vsnya somehow lived, and how things might be different then, but I don't know how it would be possible. As you say, he had to.

Author's Response: Vanya's story is not yet really told, Narya. It won't be until I can freely write Weapons of the Gods, but it's not quite as clear-cut as it would seem. I didn't forget her, or their mother, but the time has not yet come to explore then.
Thank-you for the review, and I remember your sib-story in Rohan very well! I love it.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 15, 2012 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ Tempering The Steel

Vanim



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Date: April 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 ~ They Would Take Everything ~

Sauron's long fingers shifted and closed, breaking the vertebrae as easily as the child's fingers had crushed the pilfered strawberries. A gout of blood erupted from his mouth, then his head fell to one side. He hung like a small rag from Sauron's hand before the fingers loosed, as if dropping something worthless. The body looked very small as it crumpled on the floor.

:'( :'( :'(

I HAD TOTALLY FORGOTTEN THIS HAPPENED. Poor little kid...

This is going to sound awful, but I mean it in a very complimentary way - I really like the brutality of your work. It's a bit like reading GoT - you know anyone can die, and so the story grips you just that little bit tighter. Before I found your work, back in the early days of my time in fandom, I thought Tolkien fanfics were all Legomances, GIMEs, combinations of the two or MSTs. Reading your work was my fandom equivalent of "wow...this shit just got real." It also introduced me to the concept that AUs could be beautifully detailed and convincing, not an excuse for lazy writing.

Anyway, it was a breath of fresh air, and reading that passage again has made me realise why ;)

They would allow him nothing to love.

Aww...if only he knew...

Author's Response: This is going to sound awful, but I mean it in a very complimentary way - I really like the brutality of your work. It's a bit like reading GoT - you know anyone can die, and so the story grips you just that little bit tighter. Before I found your work, back in the early days of my time in fandom, I thought Tolkien fanfics were all Legomances, GIMEs, combinations of the two or MSTs. Reading your work was my fandom equivalent of "wow...this shit just got real." It also introduced me to the concept that AUs could be beautifully detailed and convincing, not an excuse for lazy writing.

Wow. Thank-you. Maybe it is my age, lol -- or, no, I have always killed people off, in fact.
GRR Martin would have killed Van by now, so I am not quite that brutal. I do take it as a compliment, Narya. I don't arbitrarily top people, there is usually a furtherance of plot involved. Thank-you so very much for commenting again. It always surprises me that this story is still being read. (or re-read.)



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 ~ Son, Or Slave ~

Many of the Wise of the Eldar had descried a darkness in their past, but of this the loremasters of Men would not speak. Only some, like Finrod of Nargothrond, had learned or guessed the Shadow in their past

Funny - in class today we were discussing how Christian theology fitted with Tolkien's mythology, whether the Garden of Eden happened in his version of Earth etc.. I always thought that's what the darkness-in-Man's-past hints in the Silmarillion were about, but my tutor was insistent that we shouldn't make that assumption. I like your explanation, that it's something similar (i.e. thirst for knowledge driving mankind to listen to evil) but not necessarily featuring the apple and the snake and so on. It's less clear cut than "yes it was Eden" or "no it wasn't." I like.

Author's Response: but not necessarily featuring the apple and the snake and so on. It's less clear cut than "yes it was Eden" or "no it wasn't." I like.

It's not really my explanation, Narya. Wish it was really. It's in Morgoth's Ring (I think) about how the first Men were directly spoken to by Eru, then Melkor butted in and promised them all sorts, and they listened, then he demanded sacrifice. Some fled, and ended up in Beleriand, as we know. Mens earliest times are pretty foggy and obscure, but there's definite Christian overtones in some of HoMe, especially when Finrod talks to Andreth, there is an obvious hint of a Messianic prophecy in there, although Tolkien stops short of actually writing it. It would be interesting to write of Mens' very early days. If there is an Eden, I think myself it's Valinor, and F



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 17, 2012 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 ~ Blood In Eregion ~

He felt his father's eyes on him, and in a movement quicker than the eye could follow he drew his dagger from its thigh-sheath and plunged it into Celebrimbor's heart. Then he turned. There was brittle satisfaction in his eyes.
"Is that not what thou didst want, my Lord?"

At times, Sauron's anger with him seemed tinged with amusement.
This time, it was not.


Van trolls Sauron. Narya is amused.

Author's Response: I must expand this one day, or write it as a flashback, perhaps with the reborn Celebrimbor.
Van trolls Sauron. Narya is amused.

*Snort*



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 ~ The Darkness Has Its Own Light ~

Ah, Maglor :) I love this chapter, and the dysfunctional relationship you set up between the two of them.

Author's Response: :) I really like their peculiar love/hate relationship, which just endures. I think Van cares for Maglor a lot more than Maglor realizes.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 ~ Of Blood And Fire ~

A grouse, warm and unaware in the last sun, fell to his first arrow, and he set himself to gut and spit it on a stick of green wood. Hunger was something he rarely felt, but the breath of hot meat made his very bones feel starved. He ate, and found it gave him ballast, tipped the world back into clearer vision. Darkness fell, the last birds piped and he leaned his head on his knees, looking at the fire through the angle of his arms.

This might sound silly but I always love food descriptions in longer stories! Obviously I'm always in favour of the little details that ground the tale and make the secondary world believable, but it's astonishing how many writers seem to forget food. It's such a part of human existence - particularly at moments like this. There's nothing better than emerging at the other end of a busy week (obviously I have no experiences to compare with being held in the Dark Tower!) and unwinding with a bowl of something delicious; the simple act of eating brings you right back to the real world and the fundamentals of existence. I love the way you write Maglor's longing and relish for the food, and the effect it has on him :)

The burning grew greater, deeper, all around him now, within him...perhaps it could destroy the pain in his heart.

''Father.'' His voice throbbed with agony. ''Maglor...'' then, at the last; ''Oh, Fin..!''
His clothes caught alight, his armor glowed red, his hair blazed.


:'(

I always thought Maedhros got the roughest deal. We had a vicious debate in our tutorial a while ago about whether the Noldor were right, whether they should have kept fighting for the Silmarils...so many people were pro-Valar! It astonished me. I feel that we don't really get enough detail in the Silmarillion itself to be able to judge; it's definitely open to interpretation, one way or another, but whether he was right or wrong I think Maedhros suffers the worst fate.

Author's Response: There's nothing better than emerging at the other end of a busy week (obviously I have no experiences to compare with being held in the Dark Tower!) and unwinding with a bowl of something delicious; the simple act of eating brings you right back to the real world and the fundamentals of existence. I love the way you write Maglor's longing and relish for the food, and the effect it has on him :
I was thinking not long ago that I don't write all that much food, lol. At least, I tend toward the simple, because before they could shop for out of season food from around the world, people had to eat what was in season and relatively local. But when I am really hungry, simple and delicious is just as satisfying as something complicated and fiddly. :)

Hah, the Pro/anti Valar argument. Most of the pro-Valar crowd in fanfic are so self-righteous, they're like an offshoot of the Westboro Baptists or something. (I saw a quote from Father Ted that I must quote as my reaction to them: NUNS! NUNS! Reverse! Reverse! Reverse!)

Two things really got under my skin like a splinter when I was young, and first read the Silm.
1) When F



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 ~ What Art Thou? ~

Long ago he had discovered in himself the Elvish ability to concentrate on the beauty of one thing: the curve of a grass blade, the fractured rainbow light of a dewdrop, the delicate shading and veins of a flower. He had found beauty in many unexpected places and had learned to absorb all he saw. And perhaps one had to know dark to appreciate light as passionately as he did.

This is beautiful.

''I promise thee this, whatever, whosoever thou art, I will discover it !''

''Perhaps thou wilt if thou dost use the right means of persuasion...?''


Heeheeehee. Gotta love Van and Glorfindel!

Author's Response: Van has to try d;-)

This is beautiful.
Thank-you! I appreciate it very much.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 18, 2012 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 ~ The Last Star Is Fallen ~

Aww, Gil-galad.

One of the saddest parts of the mythology - the Prof's and your version.

Author's Response: :( . I have to say, after writing all of this, I had the most satisfaction at the end, of bringing back the dead. I had wanted to do it for so long!
Thank-you!



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 19, 2012 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 ~ Sud Sicanna ~ Desert City ~

*Shudders*

Reading this passage always makes me queasy. Uwath is one of those characters that makes me want to claw at the screen, rip him out and shred him...brilliant writing though!

Author's Response: I think that is what Van felt, Narya - and his ending was deserved in Van's eyes.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 19, 2012 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 ~ Prince Of The Greenwood ~

The dark mind squatted in his own like a toad in the bottom of a well

Ooh :) lovely simile...

This was how he imagined an Elven forest to be, filled with birdsong, dappled patches of sunlight, a brightness to the atmosphere, a sweetness in the air.

Whenever he's imagining the Elven life he missed out on, it makes me so sad for what he can't have. Poor Van.

Author's Response: Ooh :) lovely simile...
Thank-you :)

He never does get that life, really, just glimpses of it. It's not his destiny. But that will be greater than he imagines, and more terrible, in a way.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 19, 2012 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 ~ The Years Of Love ~

the trees had seemed to be her unfriends

I like this - unfriends. Not diametrically opposed as in good vs evil, but hostile enough to hinder her passage.

And Van and Elgalad...there aren't words :') too cute, and too sad!

Author's Response: I borrowed 'unfriends' from Tolkien :) it was in Unfinished Tales, I think. He probably meant it in exactly that way, not one thing or the other, but didn't want her there.

And Van and Elgalad...there aren't words :') too cute, and too sad!

Awww, thank-you. I am so pleased you still like reading them.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 ~ A Candle In The Darkness ~

Awww...Elgalad's desperate loyalty to Van always gets me. Poor innocent kid...

*Shakes head*

Van's manipulation of dimwitted henchmen makes me laugh :)

Author's Response: I think that loyalty comes from never having known any-one but Van, who always looked after him so well. It may seem one side, but it's not really, as Van was desperate for some-one to love himself.
Thank-you, Narya.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32 ~ The Embrace Of The Great Wood ~

Is that what evil truly is? To take delight in pain and not be able to imagine how it might feel in one's own flesh? Is it lack of empathy?

I did read somewhere that evil is simply a lack of imagination. I forget where. It seems a fitting sentiment for Elgalad!

Author's Response: I think that's right, Narya. Although in this case, (Sauron's case) it's not so absolute, because Sauron does know, but Van is his long-term 'project'.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 20, 2012 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39 ~ Elgalad Meluion ~

"I am sorry. I will look after you."

Heehee. Cute. Good old Legolas :)

Author's Response: I must, must write a story about Elgalad in Mirkwood. That's a story by itself!



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42 ~ Twisted Images ~

Oh gosh...this scene is so powerful...the apple and the reunion and the embrace by the side of the lake and Sauron breaking through the Van's mental shields...stunning stuff. Hugs.

Author's Response: Thank-you so very much. Whether Sauron would have forced Van to really do anything, I am not sure - he always raises his testing by increments, but I think Van would have gone 'inward' rather than hurt Elgalad, and I believe Sauron knew it. One day, when Van and Sauron have to work together O_o we'll know more about this.
Narya, I want to thank you for these reviews. I appreciate them very much. {{{Hugs}}}



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 47: Chapter 47 ~ A Bitter Winter ~

Legolas is just awesome. I love the way you write him; he's definitely "nice" in a way that Van certainly isn't, or your Maglor, but that scene with Malthador shows just how dangerous he can be.

Author's Response: I am getting more into exploring the Elves of Mirkwood in my latest stuff. :) Legolas is kind, and was Elgalad's mentor in Mirkwood, but he is certainly dangerous.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48 ~ No Haven From Hate ~

''I will not eat thee."

Heehee :)

Poor Elgalad though :( I really wish he could see that he was being manipulated, that only Thranduil and maybe Legolas would have the power to dismiss him, but it just isn't in his nature to suspect others, is it?

On a lighter note - yes please to a fic about Elgalad in Mirkwood!! :D

Author's Response: Elgalad took a long time to feel wanted in Mirkwood, partly because he felt orphaned and bereft. He felt, for a long time, that he was an intrusion
There are certain rituals and practices in Mirkwood that were 'secret', and he tended to believe all he was told.
I want to write that fic; it's been in my mind for a couple of years now. I just need time to concentrate on it :)



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50 ~ Marks Without, Wounds Within ~

Sauron watched impassively, and with boredom as red-dripping organs were ripped from tethered prisoners who became mewling, wretched things, all humanity reft from them before their deaths.

I love the rhythm of this passage; the way you vary the phrase lengths seems to suit both Sauron's languor and the madness of the prisoners. And the description is appropriately gruesome ;)

There was something more intimate in a kiss than in sex; whores sold themselves for their bodies, not for a kiss, which showed tenderness, even love.

So true. Daft comparison, but I remember when I was a kid watching Pretty Woman for the first time, I didn't get why she wouldn't kiss her client on the mouth. I understand now!

Author's Response: I remember Pretty Woman too! :)

I am so glad you liked the way that passage was written, and I do tahnk-you again for the reviews :)



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 54: Chapter 54 ~ The Edge Of Doom ~

Vanim



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 55: Chapter 55 ~ Memories Of Fire ~

He imagined himself diving into the grey sea, striking out to the shore

Ooh, nice little Amroth parallel :)

Ah, Tom Bombadil...one of the first questions I had when I read the books was "Who and what is this loopy old man?" He reminds me of Rumpelstiltskin, a singing, seemingly playful figure who is more than he seems. When me and my siblings discuss LOTR (which is a fairly normal occurrence, since we're all a bit geeky!), my sister's standard reply to the mention of Bombadil is "Folly-rolly-dolly-off-my-trolley." I used to agree, but with every re-reading I've wondered more and more about that opening section of Fellowship - The Old Forest, Bombadil, the Barrow Downs - and now I'm glad they're there. To me they demonstrate that there are plenty of things in Middle-earth that will never be fully explained or understood, that even beyond Tolkien's writings and extensive worldbuilding there is so much more that we can only guess at. I like that you bring in some of these elements - Van's stay in Sud Sicanna adds life and colour to Tolkien's vague hints about what lay to the East of Mordor, for example, and your cheeky but slightly dark Bombadil.

Author's Response: Amroth parallel yes. :)

To me they demonstrate that there are plenty of things in Middle-earth that will never be fully explained or understood, that even beyond Tolkien's writings and extensive worldbuilding there is so much more that we can only guess at.

Yes, that's so true. It's what makes Middle-earth the ideal world to write fanfic in, I think. It's so vast, and there are some mysteries that are never solved.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 57: Chapter 57 ~ Seek Thy Son ~

The man did not look entirely real, and yet somehow was more real and – he sought for a word and found intense – than the tree he stood against. His skin was as white as frost, without a single line or wrinkle in it, as if some-one had sculpted it from a block of salt, and the great eyes held a light which the Hobbit could not understand. His heart suddenly felt both sorrow and awe.

Fantastic description of Maglor. I love the way you write him - so phenomenally powerful, unspeakably sad, and so damn beautiful.

Author's Response: so phenomenally powerful, unspeakably sad, and so damn beautiful.

Thank-you!! That's how I see him, and wanted to portray him, so I am thrilled it comes across.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 60: Chapter 60 ~ The Second Oath ~

''Then thou wilt have to kill me too,'' Elgalad said flatly.

I love how Elgalad loses his stammer to pronounce that :D still so loyal...

Author's Response: Yes, he does lose his stammer sometimes, and there is a kind of psychological reason behind that. Thank-you.



Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: April 21, 2012 Title: Chapter 61: Chapter 61 ~ Hope Under The Shadow ~

Thranduilion, it has been a long time. Bravo, beauty.

But it still only counts as one :P

Author's Response: *Snort* :D