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11/20/20 09:41 am
Happy Friday everyone, take care and keep safe
Spiced Wine
11/13/20 02:00 pm
I don’t know why it glitches, Gabriel, but the software is old. Thank you, you too!
11/13/20 11:09 am
Thank you, Spiced. Yes, I finally figured out I could go back and edit the characters.:D You have a good weekend.
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Spiced Wine
11/13/20 09:52 am
I can add her, Gabriel. There is a glitch with the list, in fact, I have to post then go back and add characters
11/12/20 10:20 pm
Okay, I've figured out how I can get around it.
11/12/20 08:53 pm
And it seems everytime I press on 'fiction' in the category options the character list reduces. Anyway, my dear Spiced, could we add "Anaire" to the list please.
11/12/20 08:49 pm
I don't know why I'm having so many problems with posting. It's not the usual problem. Now it's the character list stops at 'N' for me. I'm sure it went further than that.
11/07/20 10:25 pm
Sending hugs to everyone. Ziggy - I've been thinking of you. I can't begin to imagine how hard your job must be at the moment xxx
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Feeling just a little bit lighter after today's result xxx
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I have been passionate about stories since before I started school. I remember reading chapter books from cover to cover, in one night, when I was nine, and wanting another so badly, I annoyed my mother no end, until she bought me one. I began with fairy tales, then moved onto Mysteries and finally Sci-fi/Fantasy. I didn’t take up writing until I was five. Even tried to write my own book at the age of eight.

In the early naughty’s while finally getting around to writing my own novel, something that had been badgering me for years, I was introduced to Tolkien through the Lord of the Rings movie trilogy and not surprisingly, fell in love with the Elves. It wasn’t until late 2014 that I found a thing called ‘Fandom’ and this place where writer’s could post stories and other fans would read them. It still shocks me to this day that ‘Archives’ existed and I didn't know about them until recently. Anyway, at that stage I was writing ‘The Hobbit Trilogy’ stories or as I call them, ‘The Mirkwood Chronicles’. And then I found the ‘Silmarillion’... And the rest is history.

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Title: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its Own Light. by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 217]
~ Lúthien was not the only offspring of Maia and Elf born in the Elder Days, but Vanimórë's tale was never to be sung in glittering halls.

His mother was Elven.
His father was Sauron.
His birth was accomplished by the blackest sorcery of Morgoth Bauglir.
He was forged as a double-edged sword is forged, as lethal and as beautiful.
And they tested him to breaking-point.

He would not break.

"Until the sky breaks and the mountains fall into the Great Sea, and the End cometh, there is no world for us." ~ Vanimórë Gorthaurion.

The first of the Dark Prince series, the story of Sauron's son, born to be a weapon, a warrior, and a servant of the Dark ~
First Age to the War of the Ring.

Category: Fiction
Characters: Gil-galad, Glorfindel, Legolas, Maglor, Melkor/Morgoth, Mouth of sauron, Nimrodel, OMC, Orc, Sauron
Content: Angst, AU, Character Death, Drama, Dubcon, Incest, Rape/Non-con, Slash
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Series: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its own Light.
Chapters: 73 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 148130 | Read count: 528785

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Published: June 30, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 27, 2018 Title: Chapter 73: Chapter 73 ~ The Beginning ~

Oh! This is really NOT the Valar's day, is it! :)

Having Feanor reborn was a bit of a slap in the face, but with the rest of the Noldor following suit, well, I'd say the Valar's days are numbered.

Poor Maglor just couldn't believe it! His father, his brother's, all those he had known and loved materializing on the beach, its any wonder he wept. He had longed for this reunion for many an age.

If ever there was a time and place for father and son to meet, this would have been it. And wow! Could not have picked a better moment, surrounded by luminaries of legend.

I am so glad Elgalad was brought back. Who knows what Vanimore would have done if he had to live the rest of his life without him. He is probably right. He would have become something like his father without Elgalad's love. That's a heartbreaking and frightening thought.

Great chapter to end the Dark Prince with, Spiced! :)

Should I move onto Starfall or continue with Dark Lands?

Author's Response: Yes, the Valar’s days are numbered. They do retain some power, but it’s fading, as is shown in later stories, but their hate is as strong as ever!

Yes, it was lovely to write them all returning, ever since I first read the Silm in the 80’s I wanted to do that :)

If you wanted to read more, it’s really up to you. I think, to properly understand the rest of the stories, ‘Starfall’ is the best one to read, really. It is from the time Fingolfin comes to Endor, to the Last Alliance. Thank you so much, Gabriel :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 22, 2018 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 ~ Akallab

I still feel a bit strange Spiced Wine, reading many chapters and only reviewing one out of the many. But it makes sense, considering how long your series is and it has taken a bit of pressure off. :)

Your descriptions of Numenor's nobility and their immense wealth is so vivid and vibrant.

*Great houses lay behind marble walls, where birds sang and fountains played. Statues reared against the sky, and roofs were overlaid with gold and silver. Enormous litters carried by a score of burly slaves carried bejeweled noblewomen. The men rode fine horses and dressed as brilliantly as peacocks.*

Their wealth seemed almost sickening. And as you mentioned they became arrogant in their dealings with the Men of Middle earth and jaded and greedy with their wealth. No surprises there.

Everything about Numenor seemed corrupt except Tar-Miriel, Who I felt so much empathy for, kept a prisoner in her own palace with a man who favoured things a bit on the dark side.

It was only a matter of time before Numenor fell. All supposedly great empires do when they start down the road of amoral and as you said Sauron wanted Numenor to pay for coming to the aid of Gil galad and driving him back from his goal. Its just sad that the Numenorean people had to suffer for their Kings desires and actions. :(

Author's Response: Well, I’m glad you feel less pressure, Gabriel. I know when I’ve discovered long fics or series I just read like I am devouring it and don’t think to review every chapter, I just read too fast. :/

Númenor...it started off well, but in time it rotted from the core outward. They enslaved other nations, cut down most of the trees in Enedwaith for their huge fleets, and in the end grew jealous of the Elves where once they had been their allies. Not all, of course, those like Elendil and his people were different and spared in the end, but it must have been fairly easy for Sauron to corrupt the king and those who were ambitious. But as you say, I pity the ‘ordinary’ folk too. If Númenor wer truly so dreadful that nothing less than its destrcution was possible, then it was certainly worse than I’ve depicted it here.! Thank you so much for the comment :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 15, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ I Will Not Break ~

Oh my god! Spiced Wine.

Poor Vanimore!

Morgoth is abhorrent. I doubt Vanya would have survived the first rape let alone any after that. Unless Morgoth did the same to her as he did to her mother-kept her trapped in her own body alive, through his power. :(

And now Vanimore must deal with this on his own. So sad. How lonely is he.

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. It was upsetting writing this, and it’s the one reason, and the biggest reason, why Vanimórë (later) defies his father as much as he can. He begged Sauron to help him, and Sauron didn’t. The betrayal is almost the worse thing.

Not that I suppose Sauron could actually have done anything, really.

And he was forging a weapon, which, as he says long after, requires heat and hammer blows, not gentleness :/

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 16, 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ Tempering The Steel

Great chapter! Getting to see Vanimore outside of Angband and in his role as Captain/warrior :)

Reading about all the time that had passed since Vanya's death and Morgoth's rape. Nargothrond's downfall and then Gondolin's With Glorfindel's heroic end, only serves to remind me how tragic a people the Noldor were. Constantly battling against their ultimate doom. :(

And Earendil! Good to see Melkor worried about that. So he should be. :)

So Vanimore has not completely hardened himself against caring for anyone, as we see in the way he fed and clothed the child he found.

I think he just guards his heart vehemently, afraid of what his father and Morgoth would do to him or others if he showed that vulnerability.

He has told himself he does not care but I cannot imagine Vanimore ever being a cold calculating person. As a warrior, yes! But not the real Vanimore. It is something he uses to deal with the violations, which I can fully understand. :/

Author's Response: I remember how free it felt, to write Vanimórë feeling somewhat free for the first time, seeing part of the world. :)

There will always be a great tenderness in Vanimórë that nothing can really ever quash, which is a good thing, as he could have been something rather dreadful ! Thank you very much for your comments, Gabriel :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 17, 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 ~ They Would Take Everything ~

I loved the beginning as Sauron enters the camp.

*Silence descended upon the encampment. Through it, Vanimore heard the thin wails of children hastily hushed by their elders. He did not move, waiting until the tent flaps were drawn aside by the petrified guards, and Sauron entered. Only then, almost negligently, did he come to his feet and bow.*

What Sauron did to the child Vanimore cared for. Horrible! Crushing him!

But I loved Vanimore's response. *Blood...it hazed Vanimore's vision and pounded in his brain. He moved, one hand drawing the dagger at his belt. He felt it meet something which deflected it, heard the scrape of steel on steel, then a force flung him back as if he were struck in the midriff by a mace. It smashed the air from his lungs, the table splintered as his body impacted against it. A booted foot pressed against his throat.

'Slaves own nothing' Sauron chided.*

I know I've got a lot to read. But I can't wait to see where this goes. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. Yes, Sauron wanted to control Vanimórë in all the days he could; he knew Vanimórë caring for a child was both simply how he was (he had wanted to care for his sister too, and did so as well as he could) and an act of defiance. He did not think of the child at all except something in his long game of ‘forging’ his son.

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 18, 2018 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 ~ The First Taste Of Freedom ~

It is so very easy to forget that Vanimore has never seen beyond Angband and the northern lands that surround it.

To have him in awe of the patterns of frost on grass blades, sunsets cinder red and ice yellow and the dance of yellowing Silver Birches. These are miracles in nature that most people take for granted, but from someone who has seen, smelt and tasted only darkness and the vileness of it, it is a wonder beyond imagining. He is so like a child in this respect. :)

It was just wonderful to see him discovering things for the first time and realizing there is beauty in the world. Beyond all the pain and horror he has endured.

This last part, the light show Vanimore's people woke to watch. Spiced Wine! It's got to be the Valar-the War of the Wrath, right? I love Vanimore's desperate hope that the Valar have come to save them all. Its a little sad. :/

Lovely chapter! Spiced Wine!

Author's Response: Yes, it was sad and amazing to write him seeing the beauty of the world (and ever after it was something that he deeply appreciated, acting like a balm on his soul).

And yes, that was the War of Wrath he saw, from a far distance. It was why Sauron sent Vanimórë away, not believing he would survive it or., if he did, would be taken by the Valar. Sauron had more foresight than Melkor.

At this stage, yes, Vanimórë is still hopeful, it took him a long time to lose hope that one day he might be rescued by the Valar. :(

I’m very grateful for your reviews, Gabriel, but you don’t have to review every chapter, which must be quite a boring task for you! If you see anything you like, I always love a comment, but please don’t feel you have to review every chapter :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ Son of Cruelty ~

Poor Moriel! Forced to watch her husband die and then left alone in a place of darkness where there are the worst kind of monsters that haunt the shadows.
I would think that there would not be many women as slaves in Angband and so when one is captured she is considered a prize above others. Especially since Sauron loves experimenting.

I would have begged for death, but I think Moriel probably would have tried that already, somewhere along the line. So horrible!

The only thing worse than Moriel's experience, would be for children to be taken and enslaved or as in Vanimore's and Vanya's case born into the dark Lord's realm.

And Vanimore is so sweet and still so very innocent. He seems quite protective of his sister and tries to be her pillar of strength even when he doesn't feel it himself.

Sauron is his usual self. No surprises there. I'm almost afraid to think what their lives will be like as they grow. I have already read of Sauron's fatherly affection towards them. :(

A real heartwrenching chapter, Spiced! :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel.

Móriel was mad by the end, and yes, she would have begged for death, but Sauron (And Morgoth kept her alive).

This wasn't, as we'll come to see, the first time Sauron had attempted this, but the other 'experiments' were failures.

Vanimórë adored his sister, which ended up being incredibly important. If he had not loved her, he would have grown into a very different person.

His relationship with Sauron is...complicated. Not now, of course, but when he becomes older. Sauron really never ceased (until much later) to mould his son, to 'test' him, working toward his own goal. Morgoth thought Vanimórë was being trained to be the ultimate warrior and commander, to lead Angband's legions - Sauron, however, had rather different plans....
Thank you again, and I hope you have a good weekend. :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 14, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ To See Death As A Gift ~

I love Vanimore's steel, now that he is more learned in the art of combat. He is going to need it, I fear.

What did they do to Valoron! Its almost as if they are giving Vanimore harsh lessons in hardening his heart and teaching him that he has no control over anything. I guess that's to condition him as Sauron's slave perhaps or maybe its just the way of things in that place.

If that's not enough for one so young to endure, now he has had no choice but to kill his sister, simply to save her from Morgoth's clutches. That is so heartbreaking! Poor Vanimore. Things just keep going from bad to worse, for him. To have to end the life of the very person you love above all else. The only light, the only beauty in that hellish place, that kept him going.

In a sense he is being initiated, by the very fire, the very darkness of Angband.

I'm really enjoying this, Spiced Wine. Sad and harsh, as it is, I find myself looking forward to the next chapter. I can see why people rave about it. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel :) Vanimórë...well, it is in his blood to be a warrior (on his mother’s side anyhow) and he never consciously uses his Ainu powers, because they are Sauron’s he rejects them and instead they show in his warrior skills.

After he killed his sister, he determined nothing and no-one would break him and determined to become virtually unkillable. And Sauron suspected he would, Sauron was playing a very delicate game with his son, and for a long, long time.

Vanimórë never forgave himself for his sister, although he would not have forgiven himself if she had been killed by Melkor, so he has to live with that all his life. It made him very kind, very tender towards women, which, later, is actually to his detriment, since not all are worth it.

I’m glad you’re liking it. Very early days yet. I started writing this in 2006 and still remember it well :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 20, 2018 Title: Chapter 66: Chapter 66 ~ The Enemy Of Mine Enemy Is My Friend ~

Oh! I love Maglor and Vanimore in these chapters.

I love their love hate relationship. Maglor infuriated by Vanimore's control over him and Vanimore fueling the fire by goading him, baiting him. :)

Although in saying that I do feel for Maglor as he is a little tortured by the whole situation. By what happened to him in Mordor. Loathes it but needs it.

I love the battle scenes in this chapter. I'm a bit of a sucker for battle scenes. Loved how surprised Elgalad was that Maglor was the one rescuing him and Maglor shoving the hilt of a dagger into Elgalad's palm, turns and is back in the action. Maglor is just gorgeous!

But what Vanimore does to Hagard! *shudders* I know Hagard had done some pretty foul things in his past and was planning to rape and kill Elgalad, but I can't help but be a bit squeamish reading it. It just reminds me of poor Celebrimbor. Not that I'm the least bit sad for Hagard, but, Vanimore in this, is truly his father's son.

I'm bursting at the seams for Maglor and Tindomion's meeting. Can't wait for that!

Super enjoyable chapter! Spiced Wine!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Gabriel :) Yes, I love Vanimórë and Maglor; there will always be some sort of thread, some burning connection between them, forged out of need and hate and pain.

Maglor is just gorgeous, yes, my favourite of the sons :)

And speaking of sons, and Vanimórë’s cruelty, yes he is is father’s son, and he knows it and hates it, and tries to fight it, but he is, and he can be completely without pity.
Thank you so much for commenting :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 23, 2018 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 72 ~ The Chosen ~

This chapter was such an emotional ride, Spiced!

And I did not realize Vanimore could shape shift! Such a surprise! He's been keeping that one under wraps. But at the same time I can understand why he would want to. He loathes himself enough for being Sauron's son.

I think there is such a sense of poetic justice in Vanimore and Glorfindel becoming powers. Giving the Valar the proverbial finger, so to speak. I mean the Valar have only ever shown contempt and hubris toward the Noldor, leaving them to their fate as if in punishment for daring to leave the protection and sovereignty of Aman.

But this was the part of the chapter that brought tears to my eyes. I know it sounds silly.

*There was green, gold. There was light, after so long, when all he had been was a houseless flame which refused to go out, to be eaten by the Night.

The spirit was aware of weight, of flesh, of solidity forming around the soul. He felt air rush into lungs which began to inflate and deflate, felt his heart begin to beat. He staggered, regained his balance. Long hair fell like water against his back.

He went down on his knees again, just breathing, seeing each mote of sand below him, feeling its granular texture. The wild scent of brine was in the air. With a powerful surge and bunch of sinew, he forced this new body to its feet. For a moment the weight disoriented him, and then his soul forged with it as hand into glove.

Feanor raised his head.*

It still brings a tear just writing it. I really loved this!


Oh! And love the artwork!

Author's Response: Vanim?r? had never shape shifted before. He deliberately tried to do nothing that Sauron could do, although the gift was always inherent in him.

Now the Valar will begin to lose power, as they should, the useless bastards lol.

But oh, I am glad you loved F?anor?s return. I had to write this (and all the other Dark Prince stories) and then all of Magnificat Book I before I could continue from this part. I was determined to bring back the Noldor who had died. So thank you, Gabriel!

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52 ~ And Night Falls Between Us ~

Wow! That Malthador really has become a nasty piece of work. Making Elgalad pay for rebuffing him then throw in antipathy for the Noldor-kinslayers knowing full well Elgalad's Lord is one-you've got one messed up Elf who believes his treatment of Elgalad is just and for the betterment amd protection of the realm. :/

I'm so relieved he's been dealt with.

I love how Tindomion, Glorfindel and Legolas are extremely protective of Elgalad and Tindomion's words to him when he apologised for setting foot in the santuary where Gil galad was buried.

*"He would not mind, Elgalad, he would welcome thee. Thou doth know how to love."*

It brought tears to my eyes. The High King sent into the everlasting dark for that very thing.

Then there's Vanimore who's this steely-eyed veteran warrior who you'd think would easily best the Mouth in anything, which he does to perfection, only to have his father humiliate him, demean him by giving him as some sort of consolation prize to the Mouth. His life is so full of horror of the highest order. I just cringed when he was chained and left for that abhorrent excuse of a Man to do with as he pleased. Poor Vanimore, its any wonder he's sane at all. Being used and abused like that. *Shivers*

Loved this chapter, though Spiced Wine! :)

Author's Response: Yes, Malthador was embittered and hated Elgalad, poor thing. But at least it’s been found out now and taken in hand.

Ah yes, the Mouth, he appears much later too. A ghastly individual. Sauron knows the Mouth could never been Vanimórë, but sometimes he ‘gives’ Vanimórë to the Mouth to keep Vanimórë reminded of who holds the real power :(
Thank you so much, Gabriel. I appreciate it :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 ~ He Walked Alone And Sorrowing ~

This chapter was both beautiful with the promise of everything Elgalad wanted and the most heartwrenching.

With Vanimore's continuing campaign to force Elgalad to hate him purely for his own safety. Well, I mean there really is no other way for Vanimore to keep him out of Sauron's reach. Elgalad will not listen to reason, so what else can he do but sever ties, no matter how harsh.

A very bittersweet reunion. :/

I liked the use of the Lay of Leithien, in part, and how the verses seem to pertain to Vanimore and Elgalad. Really lovely, Spiced. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. It’s an impossible situation, really, Vanimórë loves Elgalad but he cannot have him (and does not think he deserves him, either) so there is little he can do but drive him away. Physically and emotionally. Ahhh! So long ago I wrote this and with what is happening now, and recently in the story, I am just shaking my head at how much has changed :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 01, 2018 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 ~ Child Of Light And Darkness ~

So sorry Spiced Wine for taking so long to review this week. :/

Such a sad story. Amroth and Nimrodel.

Ah! Vanimore! Ever the protector and such a kind soul, a gentlemen, always thinking of everyone else. No matter his feelings for Nimrodel.

I guess that comes from the love he had for his sister. A chance to show that quality again, this time to a stranger.

Ever wanting to love someone of his own or be loved himself. But is always thwarted, either by his father's desires and actions or by life itself.

I love how you have it that Nimrodel is with child when Vanimore finds her and passes away quietly upon the babes birth. Gone to finally join her beloved. Quite a fitting explanation and end to her life, I think.

This was lovely. :)

Author's Response: No worries, Gabriel. I am very grateful you take time to comment at all :)

I always found the story of Amroth and Nimrodel very sad when Legolas sang the song on Lothlórien.

Of course Vanimórë would have treated Nimrodel with kindness and compassion, poor woman, and yes, he stilll sees his sister in all women so he would be nothing but kind. He wouldn’t have wanted her to die, and maybe had she lived he might have been able to persuade her to go back to Lórien with her child, but as that was not to be...Elgalad. A child he had always wanted and could never have himself, and knows he will not be able to keep. But still loves...
Thank you so much for commenting.

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 26, 2018 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 ~ The Last Star Is Fallen ~

As soon as I began reading these last few chapters and my eyes lit upon Gil galad I couldn't leave the story alone. :)

Gil is one of my favorites. I lap up anything and everything written about him.

Your OMC Tindomion, magnificent a character and he and Gil are just magic together. You can feel the love between them, in the little touches, the looks. I couldn't get enough of them. You have me hooked on these two, no question. They are like Feanor and Fingolfin together. Beautiful!

Then there's Tindomion's mad and desperate scrabble to reach Gil's side.

"Gil..." His voice was constricted; a blade wedged itself into his heart, taking his breath.

Gil galad's eyes opened, still fiercely bright against the white pallor of his face, the red and black of blood.

"Istelion...he is gone?"

"Yes, hush. Rest, I will get help..."
His mind, vibrating with pain, hurled a furious, mental cry for aid, but it was already there, light feet speeding toward them, halting.

"Istelion." The star-blue eyes fixed on Tindomion's and clung.

"Gil... do... not!"

The pain spasmed through Gil galad's body. Blood burst in a plume from his lips. Tindomion leaned over him, tear tracks washing a path through the spatters of blood and ash on his face. Gil galad wanted to reach out a hand to that anguished face and offer comfort.

So my father died, so did Morgoth break Fingolfin's body...

This brought tears to my eyes. So heartbreaking.

Then Gil is taken by memory; A time when he was a child horse riding with his father and meeting Maedhros and his brother's for the first time. This must have been the pinnacle of joy in his childhood. And the first time he set eyes on Tindomion was another.

"Gil. Gil!"


"Gil...please..." Tindomion's mind was a firesong of anguish.

No. Please. Oh, Eru, please.

Narya, Gil galad thought lovingly.
And died.

Oh my gosh! I really felt the loss. Poor Tindomion :( So beautifully written. :)

Author's Response: Oh, I love Gil-galas too, Gabriel. In fact there is much more about him and Tindómion in Magnificat of the Damned Book I - Starfall, the start of their relationship and the end. There is a ‘bit’ in this story, but Magnificat 1 mainly follows the Noldor from when they set foot on Endor to the Last Alliance.

I think Gil-galad lost his father so young and he loved Maedhros, too, and Tindómion coming into his life was like someone out of the past.

Aww, thank you for the comments, Gabriel, I really appreciate it. As I say, if you want to read any more about Gil-galad and Tindómion you might want to read Magnificat book 1 after this.

Title: ~ I Will Lead And Thou Shalt Follow ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 23]

~ It was said that Fëanor had little love for his half-brothers, yet Fingolfin followed him to betrayal and, ultimately, to death in single combat against Morgoth.

There were many lies handed down through the ages, and this lie covered something so forbidden and irresistible that no law could forbid it, neither could death or doom destroy it.

The Arc of Fire, the blazing thread connecting the houses of Fëanor and Fingolfin encompassed three generations and thousands of years. It began in Valinor, in the Years of the Trees.

This is a prologue to Magnificat of the Damned. Book I, and set within the Dark Prince verse.

Fëanaro's aura was hard and as brilliant as forge-heated gems.

“And wilt thou indeed follow me?” he whispered.


Category: Fiction
Characters: Fëanor, Fingolfin, Glorfindel, Maglor
Content: AU, Drama, Dubcon, Erotica, Explicit Sex, Incest, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Magnificat Of The Damned
Chapters: 4 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 13235 | Read count: 34930

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Published: July 01, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 10, 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ Follow Me! ~

Awesome chapter! Spiced Wine.

You know, Nolofinwe must be made of Mithril or is made of the same steel as Feanaro. For he is such an immense pillar of strength, to be able to endure all that has transpired since his brother drew his sword on him. To lose his father and the one he loves and burns for to Formenos for twelve years while having to rule in his father's stead. That couldn't have been easy knowing his father chose Feanaro over him, their people and his station. {I know it was more about a statement of protest over the Valar's interference with Finwe's Kingship} but that had to hurt. Then to have his father murdered and the trees destroyed... I can see why Nolofinwe made an exceptional King and was seen as a preferred leader amongst their people.

In saying that I wonder what sort of King Feanaro might have been had he not been tipped over the edge with grief by his father's death and the stealing of the Silmarils. It would be interesting to explore.

My most favorite characters are Feanor and Fingolfin. I think their story is the most fantastic and yet heartbreaking of all the stories I have ever read. But that is what makes it such a thrilling story. :)

I'm moving onto the chapters you recommended in 'Fragments of Fate and Fire' I have loved and enjoyed what I have read so far. Looking forward to the next. Is there any story you would recommend after FOFF or should I delve into the Tome's of the epic Magnificat of the Damned 'Starfall?' :)

Author's Response: I do liked Fingolfin to silver-steel, yes. He is extremely strong and while just as passionate as Fëanor he conceals it; he's more careful.

I do explore a little of how Fëanor is as High King when the Noldor return, but that's in Magnificat II onward and in Dark Lands onwards. But Fingolfin must have been viewed as 'steadier' (which he was), and we know more people followed him. I think with Fëanor he was either loved or hated, no in-between!

I have always loved these two from the first time I read the Silmarillion. :)

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Gabriel :)

If you want to read the series, really the first book is Dark Prince as much is told there that is important to the rest of the series. The Dark Prince stories were written to form a kind of 'fence' around the other stories which are mostly written within its boundaries but more fleshed out.

Magnificat of the Damned Book I: Starfall, begins with Fingolfin coming to Endor and ends at the Last Alliance. Then Magnificat II: Resurrection begins where Dark Prince ends, with the return of the Noldor.

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ The Imprint Of Power ~

Oh! Feanaro! What have you done!

His actions and behaviour are frenetic. The first signs of the inevitable madness that eventually takes over.

I feel for Laurefinde, the recipient of a kind of rape. But I feel more heartbroken for Nolofinwe, who loves and trusts and burns for his brother. Who gives of himself one hundred percent. Something I don't feel Feanaro has quite grasped yet.

In a strange way I'm glad that this is not who Feanaro really is and in that he has an excuse.

Macalaure and Nolofinwe. There's something going on there, which I'm not quite sure either of them realise yet. Its rather lovely. :)

I've been meaning to read your stories for sometime now, Spiced Wine, but hadn't quite got round to it til now. :D

Author's Response: Thank you very much for commenting, Gabriel. This was the very first story I wrote in my 'verse, and there's a lot that is 'hidden' that only comes to light in other stories.
Fëanor's rape of Glorfindel is one of those things, and the slow twisting of his mind by both the Valar and Melkor. Except not at this point, really. What Fëanor is...is really almost too much for a 'human' body. Glorfindel will talk about this incident to Gil-galad in Magnificat I (when Glorfindel is reborn and returned to Middle-earth). And also in that story there is a little more about Fingolfin and Maglor.

I hope you enjoy, although there is an awful lot to read :) But thank you for considering it.

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 08, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ A Jealous Burning ~

I love the artwork you have on your stories page, Spiced Wine. Very talented artist this Karrpriss.

I also like the style in which you write. Really different and lovely.

I understand what you meant when you said 'What Feanaro is is really almost too much for the Human body.' It really shows too, the way you've depicted him.

But Oh! Will things ever be the same again or remotely good again between them. I hope so. Because everything is just spiraling out of control. And they are just so magnificent together.

*"Thou art as tense as I," Feanaro murmured in his ear, fingers kneading at taut muscles. A flush swept over Nolofinwe's cheeks, his head tipped back, his lips parting. He was ashamed of this wanton, helpless need, so taboo that it should disgust him, cause him to flinch back in abhorrence. It did not. A moan grew in his chest, passed his lips.
"I can give thee all that thou doth need," he said on its heels. "Why Laurefinde?"

A husky laugh answered him, there was a whisper of a breath against his mouth. "I do not love Laurefinde. I need him, his loyalty, what he is. And I do desire him. And so thou wouldst refuse me?"

"I should."

"But thou wilt not."

Their lips met."*

Nolofinwe try as he may, just cannot deny Feanaro, no matter what he has done. So addicted is he to the bright star that is his brother he is willing to be burned. Its both beautiful and heartbreaking.

I hope what I have written is coherent and makes sense, Spiced Wine, as I have had many interruptions while writing this. Apologies if it isn't.

Looking forward to the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel, for commenting.

Actually, there are some one shots in Fragments of Fate and Fire, which shows, I hope, how very madly in love they were at the beginning, and Fëanor does explain, long, long after, that his hunger for freedom, really, to love as he wanted to love, did go to his head and make him want too much.

A Seduction Written In Stone. http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&chapter=1

Facade. http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&chapter=12

And The Fire of Blue Diamonds.

Fëanor and Fingolfin's relationship is extremely complex, as it would be, but they do meet again when I bring the Noldor back after the War of the Ring. And although things are not easy, and never could be, thee love is there under everything, death and betrayal, and the horror of the Void where they were imprisoned by Námo.

Since you write a lovely and fascinating Finarfin, you may as well know that the poor sod gets 'had' by the Valar and is enslaved by them, but Fëanor determines to release him, which I am beginning to write about now in Magnificat IV.

And oh, Kaprriss is wonderful isn't she? She really 'feels' the characters, making them more than just pictures.

Thank you very much for your comments :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 06, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ A Flame Too Bright ~

Spiced Wine! Your Feanaro and Nolofinwe are absolutely delectable!

*The rill of lashes swept down. The modeled mouth curved a little, and then Feanaro drew him nearer, long fingers slipping through his hair to the nape of his neck. "I always see beauty."*

*The magnetism impacted upon Nolofinwe brutally. He burned under the touch that lazily traced his jaw, outlined his parted mouth.*

*"And dost thou truly love thy brother, Nolofinwe?"*

*Nolofinwe managed a "Yes..." through lips suddenly, comprehensively covered by Feanaro's. His gasp of shock swallowed by the kiss. The world, his blood stopped. And then fire exploded through them.*

They truly do blaze in each other's company. 'Wildfire! Whitefire!' Beautiful! :)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you, Gabriel :) I'm always startled when I see a review for an older work, even though everything is the same 'verse \.

When I first read the Silm, so long ago, when I was about 16, I just felt that Fëanor and Fingolfin did indeed blaze ion one another's company (and in secret). I'm so glad you liked this :) Thank you again.

Title: ~ Magnificat of the Damned. Book II. Resurrection ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 96]

At the end of the Third Age, Glorfindel and Vanimórë, son of Sauron, are the supreme Powers on Arda, having passed through Fos Almir, the Bath of Flame.

The mighty dead have returned, and Glorfindel leads the Noldor to a haven in the east of Middle-earth, which they call their New Cuiviénen. Fëanor, released from the Void, will rule there as High King.

But the ancient loves, hates and feuds of the Noldor have not dimmed or been forgotten with the ages, and their new life becomes a tinder-box of passion, pride and power. Ancient dooms and betrayals arise, and both new and ancient notes of the Great Music are played across the Fourth Age of Arda.

Category: Fiction
Characters: Aredhel, Balrog, Beleg, Caranthir, Celegorm, Daeron, Ecthelion, Eluréd, Elurín, Erestor, Fingolfin, Fingon, Finrod, Gil-galad, Glorfindel, Ingwë, Legolas, Maedhros, Maeglin, Maglor, Mandos/Námo, Manwë, Mouth of sauron, OFC, OMC, Orodreth, Oromë, Penlod, Túrin
Content: Angst, AU, Drama, Dubcon, Erotica, Explicit Sex, Incest, Kink, Rape/Non-con, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Magnificat Of The Damned
Chapters: 58 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 235914 | Read count: 213290

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Published: July 01, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: July 04, 2018 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 ~ Heritage ~

*Maeglin found himself facing a snapping whirl of twin blades that toyed with his returning strokes. He had been a superb and courageous warrior, but Vanimore had been made into a weapon thousands of years before and had never rested, never died. The two slender blades locked against the straight one and Maeglin stared into the eyes the color of the spring violets that had once bloomed in the gardens of Gondolin. Vanimore smiled sensual and brilliant and drove up with one knee.*

I loved this! Made me chuckle. Vanimore was so awesome in this scene. I especially like the part of Maeglin staring 'into the eyes the color of spring violets.' Vanimore's eyes contrast and belie the honed and deadly weapon he is. As if Vanimore was almost suckering Maeglin into a false sense of security only to burst his bubble so to speak.

Does this make sense? Hope so.

Loved the humor, Spiced! :)

Author's Response: Poor Maeglin, I like him a lot and we shall see more of him, but Vanimórë did toy with him a little, here. Yes, it makes sense :) Thank you so much, Gabriel :) You’re a treasure

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: July 22, 2018 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 ~ An Unsheathing Of Swords ~

*"Take thyself out of my sight, Feanorion!" The last word held the edge of a scream.

Gil galad spread his fingers, Tindomion laced his own through them, both of them forming a living barrier. None of them spoke. Tindomion drew the hand he clasped to his mouth, pressed a kiss on the lean flesh.

Rosriel's blows, one after the other, swift as a serpent striking, sounded shockingly loud. One of her jeweled rings cut the corner of Gil galad's mouth.

"That is enough!" Fingon cried.*

Loved this scene. But then I absolutely adore Gil galad and Tindomion.

*Fingolfin knelt, his hands glided over ridged muscle, flat belly, rediscovering the most beautiful architecture in all Arda. He tasted the drops of liquid already welling from the engorged shaft, as he took it into his mouth, and his body throbbed with memories, with need. So powerful, taut to hugeness with blood...but there was no limit to what he wanted to touch, to have. This had always been a way of possessing Feanor, of devouring him.*

OMG! Spiced! You have such a way with words! It reads like a form of poetry. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel, I am so glad you liked that scene with Gil-Galad and Tindómion. And thank you for your kind words of praise :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: August 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 ~ Necessities of Fate ~

Hi Spiced!

Apologies for not keeping up the reviews on a more regular basis. :/

Tindomion makes me a little sad. He's still so tortured with Gil galad's death and what ran between them and so forth. He is such a beautiful character in every way shape and form. There's just this loneliness that follows him around, Even when he is surrounded by family and friends.

Author's Response: No worries, Gabriel :)
yes, of course Tindómion is still tortured; the Void is worse of course, but living with grief and regret is also a kind of hell. And he is lonely, always, yes, I am glad you see that about him. Thank you :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: August 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 ~ And the Tale Shall Begin Anew ~

OMG! I love how truly irresistible you have made Gil. Many seem to want him or are in love with him, and by rights this is the way it should be with him. (fangirl talk) But, Oh my! Gil! What is he doing with Vorimoro!? I totally understand his reasons for 'release' etc. But Oh! Tindomion's going to spit chips when he finds out. I know its a challenge thrown down, but I feel rather sorry for Tindomion, because he has remained monogamous and truly faithful to Gil throughout everything.

I love how Maglor is the go to man for everyone's problems or an ear when others just want to talk. It really suits him. :)

Author's Response: Gil-galad is such a beautiful character, yes, :) With Vorimoro, they are very good friends, although Gil-galad shouldn;t really She him, except Vorimor does not care!
In fact, Tindómion wasn’t exactly faithful, he did, on occasion, be with Glorfindel, although it was more of a passion/comfort/warrior thing, not a relationship, although that isn’t mentioned in the story, until much later.

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: June 19, 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 ~ The Dance Of Love And Lust ~

Its so great to have everyone reborn.

I love your Feanor.

*He ran his hand down his chest, all of him hard, all erect and he burned with a desire to sate his needs within hot, tight warmth, to dominate, as he always had.* Oh my god! He is absolutely glorious.

And, Feanor had Melkor! No wonder he hated him.

As always Spiced, wonderful chapter. :)

Author's Response: I loved writing them reborn :) It was so wonderful after the last story ;__;

And Fëanor, yes, magnificent, gorgeous, always :) Impossible to think of him dead.

Ah, yes, Fëanor having Melkor, well, he asked for it in a way, at least Fëanor would say so! Than you so much Gabriel :)

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: September 27, 2018 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 ~ How would it feel to lose him? ~

Celegorm appears rather bitter over Finrod and his choice to help Beren. Not that he really had a choice. An Oath is an Oath. Celegorm of all people should understand this.

I think poor Finrod was caught between a rock and a hard place, if you ask me. On the one hand he has the Oath he took and on the other family whom he loves, who would give anything to hold a Silmaril again. God! You've got to love Finrod - so honorable.

I adore that you've given these two a bit of a history together. :)

Author's Response:

Bitter is a mild word, lol! 


Celegorm understands oaths, but of course, with pure, sublime Fëanorion arrogance considers the Oath he wore trumps every other. 


There’s more than a ‘bit’ of history between these two :) 


Thank you, Gabriel :) 

Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: September 30, 2018 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 ~ Circles of Fate and Fire ~

I have to apologise here. I am sorry if I go on a bit about certain characters in this wonderful series, its just I have such a soft spot for, or a love, if you will for Fingolfin and Gil galad. They are my favorites in Tolkien's world and so when ever a chapter is written with one or the other or both I jump on it like someone in a desert who's come upon water.

What I have to say here and I've probably mentioned it before somewhere, is that you write Feanor and Fingolfin as equals which I absolutely love. No matter Feanor's fire, which is immense and creates this intimidating air about him, (there's other things about him too which for the life of me I can't quite think of right at this moment, but I'm hoping you understand what I mean).

I love how Fingolfin in this story is his own person. He has this stand alone strength about him in your fic that says, (I don't need to be like my brother, or need his acceptance to be whole, but I do want him to love me for me, as an equal and unique individual).

I really hope this makes sense. I find it a constant struggle to put into words what's on my mind. So if my comments come across a little disjointed or don't make sense, that's the reason.:)

I do love when these two are together. Feanor's teasing and innuendo; yet behind it all the love the passion, oh! A love so strong it could create worlds.

You are a wonderful author Spiced!

More comments on the way. :)

Author's Response:

Aww, thank you, Gabriel. Yes, I know what you mean. Fingolfin is very much his own person. He loves Fëanor but he is not defined by him, or dependant on him. He had to rule as a High King for hundreds of years alone after Fëanor’s death. He has more ‘reserve’ than Fëanor, but as much passion, save that it is hidden, rather as the power of a nuclear reactor is hidden. Fëanor knows that, so yes, he constantly teases ;) 

Fëanor himself thinks they are equals. Not that he is superior in any way. 


You’re so kind, Gabriel, I’m so glad you like Fingolfin in this as he seems to get overlooked sometimes and yet he’s a stupendous character I think.