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Title: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its Own Light. by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 208]
Summary:
~ Lúthien was not the only offspring of Maia and Elf born in the Elder Days, but Vanimórë's tale was never to be sung in glittering halls.

His mother was Elven.
His father was Sauron.
His birth was accomplished by the blackest sorcery of Morgoth Bauglir.
He was forged as a double-edged sword is forged, as lethal and as beautiful.
And they tested him to breaking-point.


He would not break.

"Until the sky breaks and the mountains fall into the Great Sea, and the End cometh, there is no world for us." ~ Vanimórë Gorthaurion.

The first of the Dark Prince series, the story of Sauron's son, born to be a weapon, a warrior, and a servant of the Dark ~
First Age to the War of the Ring.


Category: Fiction
Characters: Gil-galad, Glorfindel, Legolas, Maglor, Melkor/Morgoth, Mouth of sauron, Nimrodel, OMC, Orc, Sauron
Content: Angst, AU, Character Death, Drama, Dubcon, Incest, Rape/Non-con, Slash
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Series: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its own Light.
Chapters: 73 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 148170 | Read count: 319321

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Published: June 30, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011


Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 22, 2018 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 ~ Akallab

I still feel a bit strange Spiced Wine, reading many chapters and only reviewing one out of the many. But it makes sense, considering how long your series is and it has taken a bit of pressure off. :)

Your descriptions of Numenor's nobility and their immense wealth is so vivid and vibrant.

*Great houses lay behind marble walls, where birds sang and fountains played. Statues reared against the sky, and roofs were overlaid with gold and silver. Enormous litters carried by a score of burly slaves carried bejeweled noblewomen. The men rode fine horses and dressed as brilliantly as peacocks.*

Their wealth seemed almost sickening. And as you mentioned they became arrogant in their dealings with the Men of Middle earth and jaded and greedy with their wealth. No surprises there.

Everything about Numenor seemed corrupt except Tar-Miriel, Who I felt so much empathy for, kept a prisoner in her own palace with a man who favoured things a bit on the dark side.

It was only a matter of time before Numenor fell. All supposedly great empires do when they start down the road of amoral and as you said Sauron wanted Numenor to pay for coming to the aid of Gil galad and driving him back from his goal. Its just sad that the Numenorean people had to suffer for their Kings desires and actions. :(

Author's Response: Well, I’m glad you feel less pressure, Gabriel. I know when I’ve discovered long fics or series I just read like I am devouring it and don’t think to review every chapter, I just read too fast. :/

Númenor...it started off well, but in time it rotted from the core outward. They enslaved other nations, cut down most of the trees in Enedwaith for their huge fleets, and in the end grew jealous of the Elves where once they had been their allies. Not all, of course, those like Elendil and his people were different and spared in the end, but it must have been fairly easy for Sauron to corrupt the king and those who were ambitious. But as you say, I pity the ‘ordinary’ folk too. If Númenor wer truly so dreadful that nothing less than its destrcution was possible, then it was certainly worse than I’ve depicted it here.! Thank you so much for the comment :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 15, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ I Will Not Break ~

Oh my god! Spiced Wine.

Poor Vanimore!

Morgoth is abhorrent. I doubt Vanya would have survived the first rape let alone any after that. Unless Morgoth did the same to her as he did to her mother-kept her trapped in her own body alive, through his power. :(

And now Vanimore must deal with this on his own. So sad. How lonely is he.

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. It was upsetting writing this, and it’s the one reason, and the biggest reason, why Vanimórë (later) defies his father as much as he can. He begged Sauron to help him, and Sauron didn’t. The betrayal is almost the worse thing.

Not that I suppose Sauron could actually have done anything, really.

And he was forging a weapon, which, as he says long after, requires heat and hammer blows, not gentleness :/



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 16, 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ Tempering The Steel

Great chapter! Getting to see Vanimore outside of Angband and in his role as Captain/warrior :)

Reading about all the time that had passed since Vanya's death and Morgoth's rape. Nargothrond's downfall and then Gondolin's With Glorfindel's heroic end, only serves to remind me how tragic a people the Noldor were. Constantly battling against their ultimate doom. :(


And Earendil! Good to see Melkor worried about that. So he should be. :)


So Vanimore has not completely hardened himself against caring for anyone, as we see in the way he fed and clothed the child he found.

I think he just guards his heart vehemently, afraid of what his father and Morgoth would do to him or others if he showed that vulnerability.

He has told himself he does not care but I cannot imagine Vanimore ever being a cold calculating person. As a warrior, yes! But not the real Vanimore. It is something he uses to deal with the violations, which I can fully understand. :/

Author's Response: I remember how free it felt, to write Vanimórë feeling somewhat free for the first time, seeing part of the world. :)

There will always be a great tenderness in Vanimórë that nothing can really ever quash, which is a good thing, as he could have been something rather dreadful ! Thank you very much for your comments, Gabriel :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 17, 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 ~ They Would Take Everything ~

I loved the beginning as Sauron enters the camp.

*Silence descended upon the encampment. Through it, Vanimore heard the thin wails of children hastily hushed by their elders. He did not move, waiting until the tent flaps were drawn aside by the petrified guards, and Sauron entered. Only then, almost negligently, did he come to his feet and bow.*

What Sauron did to the child Vanimore cared for. Horrible! Crushing him!

But I loved Vanimore's response. *Blood...it hazed Vanimore's vision and pounded in his brain. He moved, one hand drawing the dagger at his belt. He felt it meet something which deflected it, heard the scrape of steel on steel, then a force flung him back as if he were struck in the midriff by a mace. It smashed the air from his lungs, the table splintered as his body impacted against it. A booted foot pressed against his throat.

'Slaves own nothing' Sauron chided.*


I know I've got a lot to read. But I can't wait to see where this goes. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. Yes, Sauron wanted to control Vanimórë in all the days he could; he knew Vanimórë caring for a child was both simply how he was (he had wanted to care for his sister too, and did so as well as he could) and an act of defiance. He did not think of the child at all except something in his long game of ‘forging’ his son.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 18, 2018 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 ~ The First Taste Of Freedom ~

It is so very easy to forget that Vanimore has never seen beyond Angband and the northern lands that surround it.

To have him in awe of the patterns of frost on grass blades, sunsets cinder red and ice yellow and the dance of yellowing Silver Birches. These are miracles in nature that most people take for granted, but from someone who has seen, smelt and tasted only darkness and the vileness of it, it is a wonder beyond imagining. He is so like a child in this respect. :)

It was just wonderful to see him discovering things for the first time and realizing there is beauty in the world. Beyond all the pain and horror he has endured.

This last part, the light show Vanimore's people woke to watch. Spiced Wine! It's got to be the Valar-the War of the Wrath, right? I love Vanimore's desperate hope that the Valar have come to save them all. Its a little sad. :/

Lovely chapter! Spiced Wine!

Author's Response: Yes, it was sad and amazing to write him seeing the beauty of the world (and ever after it was something that he deeply appreciated, acting like a balm on his soul).

And yes, that was the War of Wrath he saw, from a far distance. It was why Sauron sent Vanimórë away, not believing he would survive it or., if he did, would be taken by the Valar. Sauron had more foresight than Melkor.

At this stage, yes, Vanimórë is still hopeful, it took him a long time to lose hope that one day he might be rescued by the Valar. :(

I’m very grateful for your reviews, Gabriel, but you don’t have to review every chapter, which must be quite a boring task for you! If you see anything you like, I always love a comment, but please don’t feel you have to review every chapter :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ Son of Cruelty ~

Poor Moriel! Forced to watch her husband die and then left alone in a place of darkness where there are the worst kind of monsters that haunt the shadows.
I would think that there would not be many women as slaves in Angband and so when one is captured she is considered a prize above others. Especially since Sauron loves experimenting.

I would have begged for death, but I think Moriel probably would have tried that already, somewhere along the line. So horrible!

The only thing worse than Moriel's experience, would be for children to be taken and enslaved or as in Vanimore's and Vanya's case born into the dark Lord's realm.

And Vanimore is so sweet and still so very innocent. He seems quite protective of his sister and tries to be her pillar of strength even when he doesn't feel it himself.

Sauron is his usual self. No surprises there. I'm almost afraid to think what their lives will be like as they grow. I have already read of Sauron's fatherly affection towards them. :(

A real heartwrenching chapter, Spiced! :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel.

Móriel was mad by the end, and yes, she would have begged for death, but Sauron (And Morgoth kept her alive).

This wasn't, as we'll come to see, the first time Sauron had attempted this, but the other 'experiments' were failures.

Vanimórë adored his sister, which ended up being incredibly important. If he had not loved her, he would have grown into a very different person.

His relationship with Sauron is...complicated. Not now, of course, but when he becomes older. Sauron really never ceased (until much later) to mould his son, to 'test' him, working toward his own goal. Morgoth thought Vanimórë was being trained to be the ultimate warrior and commander, to lead Angband's legions - Sauron, however, had rather different plans....
Thank you again, and I hope you have a good weekend. :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 14, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ To See Death As A Gift ~

I love Vanimore's steel, now that he is more learned in the art of combat. He is going to need it, I fear.

What did they do to Valoron! Its almost as if they are giving Vanimore harsh lessons in hardening his heart and teaching him that he has no control over anything. I guess that's to condition him as Sauron's slave perhaps or maybe its just the way of things in that place.

If that's not enough for one so young to endure, now he has had no choice but to kill his sister, simply to save her from Morgoth's clutches. That is so heartbreaking! Poor Vanimore. Things just keep going from bad to worse, for him. To have to end the life of the very person you love above all else. The only light, the only beauty in that hellish place, that kept him going.

In a sense he is being initiated, by the very fire, the very darkness of Angband.

I'm really enjoying this, Spiced Wine. Sad and harsh, as it is, I find myself looking forward to the next chapter. I can see why people rave about it. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel :) Vanimórë...well, it is in his blood to be a warrior (on his mother’s side anyhow) and he never consciously uses his Ainu powers, because they are Sauron’s he rejects them and instead they show in his warrior skills.

After he killed his sister, he determined nothing and no-one would break him and determined to become virtually unkillable. And Sauron suspected he would, Sauron was playing a very delicate game with his son, and for a long, long time.

Vanimórë never forgave himself for his sister, although he would not have forgiven himself if she had been killed by Melkor, so he has to live with that all his life. It made him very kind, very tender towards women, which, later, is actually to his detriment, since not all are worth it.

I’m glad you’re liking it. Very early days yet. I started writing this in 2006 and still remember it well :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52 ~ And Night Falls Between Us ~

Wow! That Malthador really has become a nasty piece of work. Making Elgalad pay for rebuffing him then throw in antipathy for the Noldor-kinslayers knowing full well Elgalad's Lord is one-you've got one messed up Elf who believes his treatment of Elgalad is just and for the betterment amd protection of the realm. :/

I'm so relieved he's been dealt with.

I love how Tindomion, Glorfindel and Legolas are extremely protective of Elgalad and Tindomion's words to him when he apologised for setting foot in the santuary where Gil galad was buried.

*"He would not mind, Elgalad, he would welcome thee. Thou doth know how to love."*

It brought tears to my eyes. The High King sent into the everlasting dark for that very thing.


Then there's Vanimore who's this steely-eyed veteran warrior who you'd think would easily best the Mouth in anything, which he does to perfection, only to have his father humiliate him, demean him by giving him as some sort of consolation prize to the Mouth. His life is so full of horror of the highest order. I just cringed when he was chained and left for that abhorrent excuse of a Man to do with as he pleased. Poor Vanimore, its any wonder he's sane at all. Being used and abused like that. *Shivers*

Loved this chapter, though Spiced Wine! :)

Author's Response: Yes, Malthador was embittered and hated Elgalad, poor thing. But at least it’s been found out now and taken in hand.

Ah yes, the Mouth, he appears much later too. A ghastly individual. Sauron knows the Mouth could never been Vanimórë, but sometimes he ‘gives’ Vanimórë to the Mouth to keep Vanimórë reminded of who holds the real power :(
Thank you so much, Gabriel. I appreciate it :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 ~ He Walked Alone And Sorrowing ~

This chapter was both beautiful with the promise of everything Elgalad wanted and the most heartwrenching.

With Vanimore's continuing campaign to force Elgalad to hate him purely for his own safety. Well, I mean there really is no other way for Vanimore to keep him out of Sauron's reach. Elgalad will not listen to reason, so what else can he do but sever ties, no matter how harsh.

A very bittersweet reunion. :/

I liked the use of the Lay of Leithien, in part, and how the verses seem to pertain to Vanimore and Elgalad. Really lovely, Spiced. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. It’s an impossible situation, really, Vanimórë loves Elgalad but he cannot have him (and does not think he deserves him, either) so there is little he can do but drive him away. Physically and emotionally. Ahhh! So long ago I wrote this and with what is happening now, and recently in the story, I am just shaking my head at how much has changed :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 01, 2018 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 ~ Child Of Light And Darkness ~

So sorry Spiced Wine for taking so long to review this week. :/

Such a sad story. Amroth and Nimrodel.

Ah! Vanimore! Ever the protector and such a kind soul, a gentlemen, always thinking of everyone else. No matter his feelings for Nimrodel.

I guess that comes from the love he had for his sister. A chance to show that quality again, this time to a stranger.

Ever wanting to love someone of his own or be loved himself. But is always thwarted, either by his father's desires and actions or by life itself.

I love how you have it that Nimrodel is with child when Vanimore finds her and passes away quietly upon the babes birth. Gone to finally join her beloved. Quite a fitting explanation and end to her life, I think.

This was lovely. :)

Author's Response: No worries, Gabriel. I am very grateful you take time to comment at all :)

I always found the story of Amroth and Nimrodel very sad when Legolas sang the song on Lothlórien.

Of course Vanimórë would have treated Nimrodel with kindness and compassion, poor woman, and yes, he stilll sees his sister in all women so he would be nothing but kind. He wouldn’t have wanted her to die, and maybe had she lived he might have been able to persuade her to go back to Lórien with her child, but as that was not to be...Elgalad. A child he had always wanted and could never have himself, and knows he will not be able to keep. But still loves...
Thank you so much for commenting.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 26, 2018 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 ~ The Last Star Is Fallen ~

As soon as I began reading these last few chapters and my eyes lit upon Gil galad I couldn't leave the story alone. :)

Gil is one of my favorites. I lap up anything and everything written about him.

Your OMC Tindomion, magnificent a character and he and Gil are just magic together. You can feel the love between them, in the little touches, the looks. I couldn't get enough of them. You have me hooked on these two, no question. They are like Feanor and Fingolfin together. Beautiful!

Then there's Tindomion's mad and desperate scrabble to reach Gil's side.



"Gil..." His voice was constricted; a blade wedged itself into his heart, taking his breath.

Gil galad's eyes opened, still fiercely bright against the white pallor of his face, the red and black of blood.

"Istelion...he is gone?"

"Yes, hush. Rest, I will get help..."
His mind, vibrating with pain, hurled a furious, mental cry for aid, but it was already there, light feet speeding toward them, halting.

"Istelion." The star-blue eyes fixed on Tindomion's and clung.

"Gil... do... not!"

The pain spasmed through Gil galad's body. Blood burst in a plume from his lips. Tindomion leaned over him, tear tracks washing a path through the spatters of blood and ash on his face. Gil galad wanted to reach out a hand to that anguished face and offer comfort.

So my father died, so did Morgoth break Fingolfin's body...


This brought tears to my eyes. So heartbreaking.

Then Gil is taken by memory; A time when he was a child horse riding with his father and meeting Maedhros and his brother's for the first time. This must have been the pinnacle of joy in his childhood. And the first time he set eyes on Tindomion was another.



"Gil. Gil!"

"Istelion..."

"Gil...please..." Tindomion's mind was a firesong of anguish.

No. Please. Oh, Eru, please.

Narya, Gil galad thought lovingly.
And died.



Oh my gosh! I really felt the loss. Poor Tindomion :( So beautifully written. :)

Author's Response: Oh, I love Gil-galas too, Gabriel. In fact there is much more about him and Tindómion in Magnificat of the Damned Book I - Starfall, the start of their relationship and the end. There is a ‘bit’ in this story, but Magnificat 1 mainly follows the Noldor from when they set foot on Endor to the Last Alliance.

I think Gil-galad lost his father so young and he loved Maedhros, too, and Tindómion coming into his life was like someone out of the past.

Aww, thank you for the comments, Gabriel, I really appreciate it. As I say, if you want to read any more about Gil-galad and Tindómion you might want to read Magnificat book 1 after this.



Title: ~ I Will Lead And Thou Shalt Follow ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 20]
Summary:

~ It was said that Fëanor had little love for his half-brothers, yet Fingolfin followed him to betrayal and, ultimately, to death in single combat against Morgoth.

There were many lies handed down through the ages, and this lie covered something so forbidden and irresistible that no law could forbid it, neither could death or doom destroy it.

The Arc of Fire, the blazing thread connecting the houses of Fëanor and Fingolfin encompassed three generations and thousands of years. It began in Valinor, in the Years of the Trees.

This is a prologue to Lords Of The Light, and set within the Dark Prince verse.


Fëanaro's aura was hard and as brilliant as forge-heated gems.

“And wilt thou indeed follow me?” he whispered.

 


Category: Fiction
Characters: Fëanor, Fingolfin, Glorfindel, Maglor
Content: AU, Drama, Dubcon, Erotica, Explicit Sex, Incest, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Magnificat Of The Damned
Chapters: 4 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 13469 | Read count: 31716

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Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 10, 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ Follow Me! ~

Awesome chapter! Spiced Wine.

You know, Nolofinwe must be made of Mithril or is made of the same steel as Feanaro. For he is such an immense pillar of strength, to be able to endure all that has transpired since his brother drew his sword on him. To lose his father and the one he loves and burns for to Formenos for twelve years while having to rule in his father's stead. That couldn't have been easy knowing his father chose Feanaro over him, their people and his station. {I know it was more about a statement of protest over the Valar's interference with Finwe's Kingship} but that had to hurt. Then to have his father murdered and the trees destroyed... I can see why Nolofinwe made an exceptional King and was seen as a preferred leader amongst their people.

In saying that I wonder what sort of King Feanaro might have been had he not been tipped over the edge with grief by his father's death and the stealing of the Silmarils. It would be interesting to explore.

My most favorite characters are Feanor and Fingolfin. I think their story is the most fantastic and yet heartbreaking of all the stories I have ever read. But that is what makes it such a thrilling story. :)


I'm moving onto the chapters you recommended in 'Fragments of Fate and Fire' I have loved and enjoyed what I have read so far. Looking forward to the next. Is there any story you would recommend after FOFF or should I delve into the Tome's of the epic Magnificat of the Damned 'Starfall?' :)

Author's Response: I do liked Fingolfin to silver-steel, yes. He is extremely strong and while just as passionate as Fëanor he conceals it; he's more careful.

I do explore a little of how Fëanor is as High King when the Noldor return, but that's in Magnificat II onward and in Dark Lands onwards. But Fingolfin must have been viewed as 'steadier' (which he was), and we know more people followed him. I think with Fëanor he was either loved or hated, no in-between!

I have always loved these two from the first time I read the Silmarillion. :)

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Gabriel :)

If you want to read the series, really the first book is Dark Prince as much is told there that is important to the rest of the series. The Dark Prince stories were written to form a kind of 'fence' around the other stories which are mostly written within its boundaries but more fleshed out.

Magnificat of the Damned Book I: Starfall, begins with Fingolfin coming to Endor and ends at the Last Alliance. Then Magnificat II: Resurrection begins where Dark Prince ends, with the return of the Noldor.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ The Imprint Of Power ~

Oh! Feanaro! What have you done!

His actions and behaviour are frenetic. The first signs of the inevitable madness that eventually takes over.

I feel for Laurefinde, the recipient of a kind of rape. But I feel more heartbroken for Nolofinwe, who loves and trusts and burns for his brother. Who gives of himself one hundred percent. Something I don't feel Feanaro has quite grasped yet.

In a strange way I'm glad that this is not who Feanaro really is and in that he has an excuse.

Macalaure and Nolofinwe. There's something going on there, which I'm not quite sure either of them realise yet. Its rather lovely. :)

I've been meaning to read your stories for sometime now, Spiced Wine, but hadn't quite got round to it til now. :D

Author's Response: Thank you very much for commenting, Gabriel. This was the very first story I wrote in my 'verse, and there's a lot that is 'hidden' that only comes to light in other stories.
Fëanor's rape of Glorfindel is one of those things, and the slow twisting of his mind by both the Valar and Melkor. Except not at this point, really. What Fëanor is...is really almost too much for a 'human' body. Glorfindel will talk about this incident to Gil-galad in Magnificat I (when Glorfindel is reborn and returned to Middle-earth). And also in that story there is a little more about Fingolfin and Maglor.

I hope you enjoy, although there is an awful lot to read :) But thank you for considering it.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 08, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ A Jealous Burning ~

I love the artwork you have on your stories page, Spiced Wine. Very talented artist this Karrpriss.

I also like the style in which you write. Really different and lovely.

I understand what you meant when you said 'What Feanaro is is really almost too much for the Human body.' It really shows too, the way you've depicted him.

But Oh! Will things ever be the same again or remotely good again between them. I hope so. Because everything is just spiraling out of control. And they are just so magnificent together.

*"Thou art as tense as I," Feanaro murmured in his ear, fingers kneading at taut muscles. A flush swept over Nolofinwe's cheeks, his head tipped back, his lips parting. He was ashamed of this wanton, helpless need, so taboo that it should disgust him, cause him to flinch back in abhorrence. It did not. A moan grew in his chest, passed his lips.
"I can give thee all that thou doth need," he said on its heels. "Why Laurefinde?"

A husky laugh answered him, there was a whisper of a breath against his mouth. "I do not love Laurefinde. I need him, his loyalty, what he is. And I do desire him. And so thou wouldst refuse me?"

"I should."

"But thou wilt not."

Their lips met."*

Nolofinwe try as he may, just cannot deny Feanaro, no matter what he has done. So addicted is he to the bright star that is his brother he is willing to be burned. Its both beautiful and heartbreaking.

I hope what I have written is coherent and makes sense, Spiced Wine, as I have had many interruptions while writing this. Apologies if it isn't.

Looking forward to the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel, for commenting.

Actually, there are some one shots in Fragments of Fate and Fire, which shows, I hope, how very madly in love they were at the beginning, and Fëanor does explain, long, long after, that his hunger for freedom, really, to love as he wanted to love, did go to his head and make him want too much.

A Seduction Written In Stone. http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&chapter=1

Facade. http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&chapter=12

And The Fire of Blue Diamonds.
http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&textsize=0&chapter=13

Fëanor and Fingolfin's relationship is extremely complex, as it would be, but they do meet again when I bring the Noldor back after the War of the Ring. And although things are not easy, and never could be, thee love is there under everything, death and betrayal, and the horror of the Void where they were imprisoned by Námo.

Since you write a lovely and fascinating Finarfin, you may as well know that the poor sod gets 'had' by the Valar and is enslaved by them, but Fëanor determines to release him, which I am beginning to write about now in Magnificat IV.

And oh, Kaprriss is wonderful isn't she? She really 'feels' the characters, making them more than just pictures.

Thank you very much for your comments :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 06, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ A Flame Too Bright ~

Spiced Wine! Your Feanaro and Nolofinwe are absolutely delectable!

*The rill of lashes swept down. The modeled mouth curved a little, and then Feanaro drew him nearer, long fingers slipping through his hair to the nape of his neck. "I always see beauty."*

*The magnetism impacted upon Nolofinwe brutally. He burned under the touch that lazily traced his jaw, outlined his parted mouth.*

*"And dost thou truly love thy brother, Nolofinwe?"*

*Nolofinwe managed a "Yes..." through lips suddenly, comprehensively covered by Feanaro's. His gasp of shock swallowed by the kiss. The world, his blood stopped. And then fire exploded through them.*

They truly do blaze in each other's company. 'Wildfire! Whitefire!' Beautiful! :)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you, Gabriel :) I'm always startled when I see a review for an older work, even though everything is the same 'verse \.

When I first read the Silm, so long ago, when I was about 16, I just felt that Fëanor and Fingolfin did indeed blaze ion one another's company (and in secret). I'm so glad you liked this :) Thank you again.



Title: The Letter by Alquien
Rated: General Audiences [Reviews - 7]
Summary: A thank you note provides unexpected insight.

B2MeM Day Twenty-Eight: Gondor. Today's Challenge: There was no avoiding it; the letter had to be composed...
Category: Fiction
Characters: Legolas, Thranduil
Content: Gen
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 | Completed: No | Word count: 966 | Read count: 2565

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Published: July 02, 2011 | Updated: July 02, 2011


Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: August 06, 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This was beautifully written.

I especially love little Legolas, so adorable and Thranduil's exceptional love and patience with his son. Who wouldn't have, with such a cute Elfling.

A great read! :)



Title: The Sons of Thunder by ziggy
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 240]
Summary:

The Sons of Thunder meet a storm in the son of Thranduil, one of violence and desire. Warning for this chapter. Explicit sex and undercurrent of violence


Category: Fiction
Characters: Legolas
Content: Slash
Challenge: None
Series: None
Chapters: 46 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 315298 | Read count: 105792

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Published: July 02, 2011 | Updated: January 20, 2013


Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: December 30, 2017 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45 Of Pipeweed and Tall Tales

This was such an emotional chapter, ziggy!

Everyone having to face and consider the future now that the war is over. The quest to destroy the Ring has changed them all, no longer the people that met at the Council of Elrond that now seems so long ago. The inevitable separation weighing heavily on them as they consider returning to their homes and a 'normal' life.

Gandalf's longing to go home; for his time in Ennor has come to a close. Though tinged with sadness for the great and once beautiful Mairon his brother Maiar and also for leaving the many friends he has made behind knowing once he reaches Aman he will never see those beloved faces again.

Then there's Legolas' sea-longing. Poor Legolas still recovering from the venom yet he feels so restless and does not even want to think upon the eventual and inevitable loss of his friends. And certainly does not want to entertain the idea of leaving Elrohir behind, his beloved Raveyon.

I really loved the banter between Gimli and Legolas in this chapter.

*'Now, let me see how much you can work out for yourself. Deep cast silver mine, in the Blue Mountains. Can you work out why I was buried alive? Gimli asked, eyes fastened on his slow-witted pupil.*

*'You were very irritating to your fellows?' Legolas asked innocently.*

*'Oh?' the Dwarf said loudly, intending others outside the tent to hear him now, 'You are feeling wobbly, Legolas, and would like some big burly man to sling you like a sack of coal over one shoulder and carry you to the wagon? Why, I am sure one of the Guards of the Tower will help you. Or maybe one of...ow!' A small tin cup had hit the Dwarf on his round, hard head.* Such a laugh!

There were others too that I loved. Especially when Legolas goes to sing the song of Gil galad one of his and Anglach's sordid songs no doubt and Gimli clouts him for a second time upside his head. Lol

It was quite a heart-wrenching chapter, ziggy! Everyone trying to come to terms with the fact that the war has ended and Sauron has been defeated. Really great chapter! :)

And ziggy! Thank you for encouraging me not give up and to keep writing and posting. That meant a lot! Hugs! :D



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: May 16, 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I thoroughly enjoy reading about Legolas and Gimli, their banter back and forth and their ongoing competitive Orc kill count always draws a laugh.
I do like a good battle scene, so I can't wait to see all these characters in action.
Great reading. :)

Author's Response:

So gald you are enjopying this one too, Gabriel! You might notice sometimes it doesn't quite follow everything in earlier fics because this was the second story I wrote after Songs of Rohan/Deeper than breathing. So there are things that I hadn't realised- so the orc that Legolas shoots and deprives Elrohir of his revenge isn't in this. 

 

Anyway- I think there are some good battle scenes in this too!

Thank you:)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: May 17, 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really do like the Silvan's ability, {Legolas in particular}, to connect to the land and the thread 'Song'that binds all life together.
I like how Legolas can read a person {Or in this case} a collective energy,'the dead' by feeling or connecting to the song'.
Love it. :)

Author's Response:

Yes- Legolas has a particular abilty to hear the Song- I like to think that this is why Gandalf chooses him actually, as well as his quietness and skills. He is able to hear the dissonance then unless other magic suppresses it- I must get something into the current fic about Sauron deliberating working something into the rings to disguise their dissonance! I like that idea of 'collective energy'.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: May 22, 2017 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow! Great fight scene Ziggy.
Poor Elrohir, all fire and fury, I wish someone would hurry up and figure out what's going on with him-he's so tortured and of course everything he feels and does stems from this. {Damn Nazgul, planting images and beliefs that aren't his.}
Great scene between them though. I was a little afraid that Legolas would leave Elrohir in a mess; knowing how fast and how deadly Legolas is with those knives and how much slower Elrohir would be with a sword to wield, not that he's not a great swordsman or anything.
I was secretly hoping neither of them would win, just come away bruised and bleeding both in ego and body, only because I like both of them.
Great stuff! :D

Author's Response:

Thank you Gabriel- this must have gone into my junk box because I have only discovered it by accident:( But what a lovely surprise!! I'm not sure which chapter this is as they are all cimg up for chapter 1 but I'm guessing it's the scene where Elrohir jumps Legolas on the pier on the way to minas tirith? I admit I am rather pleased with that one. I didn't know until that scene that Elrohir really wanted Legolas.Glad you enjoyed it:)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: December 03, 2017 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44 Distant Shores

Oh! Gimli! His wonderful mannerisms. Even in serious circumstances he draws a chuckle from me.

I really love the way you included Olorin's grief at losing one of his own. Grief at losing the beauty and light of a brother lost to discord and evil.

And last but definitely not the least, Elrohir. The sacrifice. OMG! It brought a tear to my eyes, ziggy.

He believes he doesn't deserve to live. That the world would be a better safer place without him. That everyone in it would be better off without his presence. Oh! How wrong he is!

Great chapter! :)

Author's Response:

Thank you Gabriel- I love Elrohir in this one. He just reveals all his misery and despair- but at least he feels that he is doing something useful, that he - who is so unworthy- can save Legolas. I admit I really enjoyed writing this chapter- I love Elrohir throwing himself over Legolas to save him, that nobility and self sacrifice because he is so full of self-hatred too. He hasn't changed- even in the next fic he's still all too keen to sacrifice himself:)LOve him.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: September 16, 2017 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 Old Friends

Oh my god! Not Gimli too! lol.

I had to laugh at Gimli's attempts to re-write several parts to the Fellowship, in which he killed or defeated key enemies, including the Oliphaunt at Pelennor Fields. He and Pippin, very sly. lol.

It should be widely known by now that no-one can pull the wool over Legolas' eyes, especially amongst his friends. And when it comes to deciding whether to stay in Minas Tirith and regain his health or go to war against the enemy, to fight beside and watch the backs of his brother's in arms, even while incapacitated he would rather die a hundred deaths before abandoning his brother's. I love how completely and stubbornly honorable Legolas is. :)

I also want to apologize Ziggy, for I think I may have unintentionally missed out one or possibly two or more of you smaller stories that fill in the gaps and give back story to the larger series. It was after I read the end of this chapter, you mentioned *Deeper than Breathing* as a prequel?. I will have to do something about that. :)

Author's Response:

Haha! Told you! (I hadn't read this review when I replied to your last one) I so enjoyed writing those bits- giggled as I did.

I love how completely and stubbornly honorable Legolas is.

That is EXACTLY how I hoped he would come across- he really is- you can see his face, can't you- NO WAY is anyone going ANYWHERE with out me!!

Goodness- you don't have to apologise, Gabriel!! There's a lot to read and I wrote them all out of sync- the order though is this:

Black Arrow (based on The Hobbit- a very different, light hearted Legolas, pre-Angalch's death)

More Dangerous

Through a Glass

Deeper than Breathing

Sons of Thunder

Where the shadows lie

 

It's lovely of you to read and review every chpater- certainly don't feel you have to read everyt hnig ever wirtten but it;s lovely that you do. I do that if I find a writer I really enjoy- it's a bit like reading a series of books of course- you want to have the whole story in your head so you can immerse yourself when you read. Not that this is anything as crafted as a novel although I do my best- professional writers spend all their time and not just cram in a bit at the end of a day's work! 



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: November 26, 2017 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43 The Black Web

You know ziggy, I can't help but think Elladan feels his brother is slowly slipping away from him. I know Elrohir can be aloof and frightening at the best of times, but something feels different, doesn't feel right with him. I may be totally missing the point here, but that's the sense I get.

Now I can understand Elrohir's need to help Legolas, save his life etc, who wouldn't, for someone they love, but he has this side of him this compulsion to sacrifice himself, punish himself and so therefore puts himself in harms way almost unconsciously and without hesitation, as if to say, 'Here I am, darkness personified, come get me, do your worst.'

War changes people, no discounting that. But all that Elrohir has experienced with the Nazgul seems to have taken him so far beyond the boundaries of light and dark, and of pain and suffering that he doesn't know how to return from such things, seems to be lost to it. I hope you can see what I'm trying to explain here, ziggy. I'd hate for you to be sitting there scratching your head wondering what on earth I'm going on about.

And what has happened to Pippin? This is not looking good.

I guess I'll have to hurry up and read the next chapter then won't I. :D

Author's Response:

No, you have ABSOLUTELY nailed it, Gabriel! That is EXACTLY what Elrohir is like- look at me, I am so bad, I am so wicked, how can anyone possilby love me...oh you say you do , but you can't really. You're too good for me so here, look, I'm going to throw myself in the path of Evil so you can live and I will die horribly as I desrve.

 

It's not going to change anytime soon either!

 

Pippin is found by Gimli in LOTR so he has just gone to find him- Pippin will be fine. Not really a spoiler as that's canon:)

 

Oh Elrohir- so devoted and adoring and loving (sniff)- why do I heap these terrible things upon Legolas so you have to come along and take the terrible things off him and take them to yourself;)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: November 19, 2017 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42 A

Once again ziggy, great battle scenes, wonderfully graphic imagery. It must have been painstaking to get the words to match your ideas.

Legolas poisoned again! Whatever will we do with him. lol and he keeps on fighting! Made of Mithril, this one.

I like how Elladan is having a few problems coming to terms with the idea of wielding Aicanaro; it's dark past. It's lust for blood, the dark energy surrounding it. Yet it is an unlikely shield against the Nazgul.

The Nazgul almost had him and Elladan both. Could you imagine Middle Earth with a half Elven Nazgul Lord with Maian blood running through his veins. He would be a force to reckon with and Sauron would indeed have dominion no doubt.

And was that Olorin and Mairon throwing their power about, back and forth. Ooh! I like that idea!

So many parts to like in this chapter!

Almost there, ziggy, and I'll be onto Shadows and up to date. Can't wait! :)

Author's Response:

Thank you again, Gabriel- it is just such a treat to get your thoughts as you read this. The battle scenes are often quite easy to write to be honest- I see them like a cinematic storyboard so describe those images but then try hard to get rid of adjectives and stick to verbs, then keep the sounds and senses it- colour, movement. But I don't agonise over every word- I know these scenes are often ones readers skim because they want to get to the 'good bit'! 

Yes- Legolas is just hopelessly unlucky:) Every now and again he gets some horrid injury that means Elrohir has to put his hands all over him and hela him;) But this is a bit nastier than your average poison- you'll see what I mean when you get there and no spoilers, but guess who has to heal him;D

 

I'm really happy you picked up about Elladan not wanting to touch Aícanaro- although it is only that right now, in the sequel, that is going to be important at some point (and I am squealing with delight because that has just come to me!!) The Nazgul hate Aícanaro- dunno why. (yes I do but I'm not telling just yet:)

Haha- Elrohir as Dark Lord- again, no spoliers:)

 

So happy as well you got that bit about Olorin and Sauron chucking things at each other!! Yes- it would have had to be like that, don't you think?

Happy that you've enjoyed this one and looking forward to you catching up the new one!!

xx



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: November 12, 2017 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41 The Last Battle

Wow! This was one heck of a chapter, Ziggy!

*Ahead was a pile of rocks like an island, beyond the ranks of Men, and high upon it a tall figure, golden hair lifted by the sudden wind, sighted along a bow, firing arrow after arrow at the pursuing Nazgul. The plunging, galloping horses, surged around and then past the island. Elrohir pulled at Elladan as they passed but he did not stop. He turned and stared even as Legolas sighted and followed one huge beast speeding towards him, almost skimming him as it fled past, towards the hilltop.*

I love reading Legolas in action, in his element. When I was reading this I could hear the music from the 'Two Towers' the part where Aragorn, Legolas and Gimli are helping escort the women and children of Rohan to Helms Deep. They are assailed along the way by Warg Riders. There's a part where Legolas is firing arrows at them from a hilltop. Great scene! Just made Legolas look so heroic.

Legolas was simply awesome in this chapter. You really wrote him at his best and someone needs to give the Archers a pay rise!

*Elrohir looked around, searching for Legolas for he had leaped down from the rocks and disappeared amongst the soldiers. Suddenly Elrohir saw him. He felt his breath catch. Legolas had not seen him and though all around him was chaos, in that moment the Elf was utterly still. Legolas' head was bowed, his shoulders slumped slightly and he had covered his eyes with his hand. Elrohir's heart clenched with an almost physical pain; he could not see his beloved in despair.

Elrohir strode swiftly up the slopes, pushing through the panicked soldiers, and as if he felt Elrohir's coming, Legolas lifted his head. His eyes widened, lips parted and before he could speak, Elrohir was before him, had cupped the back of Legolas' head and brought him close. Elrohir stared for a moment into those green-gold eyes and pulled Legolas toward him, pressing his mouth against his.* This part brought a tear to my eyes, that Legolas thought Elrohir lost to him, had fallen. This whole chapter was such an emotional ride!

Then just when you think everything is going to be okay, that Elrohir has escaped from the Black Gate and 'The Mouth' to see his beloved once again, only to have the Nazgul finally get their wish. Elrohir on his knees before them, in a horrible reenactment of Legolas' time on the mountain. OMG! NOOOOOOO! Somebody do something!

I want to mention, Ziggy, that your battle scenes between everyone; Men, Orcs, Uruks and Trolls, an Elf and two Half Elves, oh, can't forget Pippin, were really vivid and wonderfully choreographed. Fantastic!

Thoroughly enjoyed it!

Author's Response:

I think this is one of my favourite chapters actually, Gabriel, and you are at the best part of the story. I really really love that moment where Legolas thinks Elrohir is dead and then he strides up and snogs him! I do keep pulling it out and using it in other fics- just love it. 

Thank you for appreciating the battle scenes- I do spend time on those trying to make sur ethey aren't boring. and thank you for being kind enough to review so much- it is so very much appreciated, Gabriel. I love reading your reactions and it reminds me what has happened so I don't lose those moments in the new fics.

xx