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Naledi
05/21/18 08:16 pm
Aragorn can't join - by emotionally blackmailing Legolas to accompany him on the Paths of the Dead, he's firmly on my blacklist!
cheekybeak
05/21/18 08:03 pm
SPCL? Society for prevention of cruelty to Legolas? RSPCL if Aragorn joins!
Naledi
05/21/18 06:02 pm
Yay, Nelya! We can be founder members of SACL. I tried to think of something with a better acronym - I'm open to suggestions!
NelyafinweFeanorion
05/21/18 03:25 pm
Naledi I'm with you on the Society Against Cruelty to Legolas (SACL)!! ;-) but who are we kidding--we read it all and love it anyway, despite the misadventures of our dear Elf!
Spiced Wine
05/20/18 10:38 am
I think it’s a sensible choice. Aragorn has a large backstory going back many years, so it was always going to be one of their first choices.
NelyafinweFeanorion
05/20/18 05:43 am
It's an expensive gamble they have taken--they have to nail this first season. Also the TolkienEstate is far more involved in this one I hear.
Formegil
05/20/18 05:31 am
A quite big "if", I'd say. Just look what mess was made out of the Hobbit movie. Nowadays I tend to be a bit cynical. So I say the series is good if it will be at least not cringeworthy.
NelyafinweFeanorion
05/20/18 04:49 am
As well as Elladan and Elrohir and the Rangers of the North. It could be a hit if done right. Plus the Arwen love interest.
NelyafinweFeanorion
05/20/18 04:48 am
I am actually relieved the Amazon series is starting with young Aragorn. There is much canon content to work with, he's a familiar character and chance to see Glorfindel, Gilraen
NelyafinweFeanorion
05/20/18 04:47 am
And that's how they learn about the weaknesses of dragons! From the little guy Aegnor adopted.
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I have been obsessed since childhood with reading and writing stories.

Even went so far as to attempt to write a book at the tender age of eight.

Then the 'Lord of the Rings' movies were released and I was transported into the world of Tolkien.

Feanor, Fingolfin, Maglor and Gil galad are my favorite characters along with the rest of the House of Finwe and beyond.



Although I do dabble a bit in LOTR.


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Title: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its Own Light. by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 212]
Summary:
~ Lúthien was not the only offspring of Maia and Elf born in the Elder Days, but Vanimórë's tale was never to be sung in glittering halls.

His mother was Elven.
His father was Sauron.
His birth was accomplished by the blackest sorcery of Morgoth Bauglir.
He was forged as a double-edged sword is forged, as lethal and as beautiful.
And they tested him to breaking-point.


He would not break.

"Until the sky breaks and the mountains fall into the Great Sea, and the End cometh, there is no world for us." ~ Vanimórë Gorthaurion.

The first of the Dark Prince series, the story of Sauron's son, born to be a weapon, a warrior, and a servant of the Dark ~
First Age to the War of the Ring.


Category: Fiction
Characters: Gil-galad, Glorfindel, Legolas, Maglor, Melkor/Morgoth, Mouth of sauron, Nimrodel, OMC, Orc, Sauron
Content: Angst, AU, Character Death, Drama, Dubcon, Incest, Rape/Non-con, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Dark Prince ~ The Darkness Has Its own Light.
Chapters: 73 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 148170 | Read count: 325410

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Published: June 30, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011


Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 27, 2018 Title: Chapter 73: Chapter 73 ~ The Beginning ~

Oh! This is really NOT the Valar's day, is it! :)

Having Feanor reborn was a bit of a slap in the face, but with the rest of the Noldor following suit, well, I'd say the Valar's days are numbered.

Poor Maglor just couldn't believe it! His father, his brother's, all those he had known and loved materializing on the beach, its any wonder he wept. He had longed for this reunion for many an age.

If ever there was a time and place for father and son to meet, this would have been it. And wow! Could not have picked a better moment, surrounded by luminaries of legend.

I am so glad Elgalad was brought back. Who knows what Vanimore would have done if he had to live the rest of his life without him. He is probably right. He would have become something like his father without Elgalad's love. That's a heartbreaking and frightening thought.

Great chapter to end the Dark Prince with, Spiced! :)

Should I move onto Starfall or continue with Dark Lands?

Author's Response: Yes, the Valar’s days are numbered. They do retain some power, but it’s fading, as is shown in later stories, but their hate is as strong as ever!

Yes, it was lovely to write them all returning, ever since I first read the Silm in the 80’s I wanted to do that :)

If you wanted to read more, it’s really up to you. I think, to properly understand the rest of the stories, ‘Starfall’ is the best one to read, really. It is from the time Fingolfin comes to Endor, to the Last Alliance. Thank you so much, Gabriel :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 22, 2018 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 ~ Akallab

I still feel a bit strange Spiced Wine, reading many chapters and only reviewing one out of the many. But it makes sense, considering how long your series is and it has taken a bit of pressure off. :)

Your descriptions of Numenor's nobility and their immense wealth is so vivid and vibrant.

*Great houses lay behind marble walls, where birds sang and fountains played. Statues reared against the sky, and roofs were overlaid with gold and silver. Enormous litters carried by a score of burly slaves carried bejeweled noblewomen. The men rode fine horses and dressed as brilliantly as peacocks.*

Their wealth seemed almost sickening. And as you mentioned they became arrogant in their dealings with the Men of Middle earth and jaded and greedy with their wealth. No surprises there.

Everything about Numenor seemed corrupt except Tar-Miriel, Who I felt so much empathy for, kept a prisoner in her own palace with a man who favoured things a bit on the dark side.

It was only a matter of time before Numenor fell. All supposedly great empires do when they start down the road of amoral and as you said Sauron wanted Numenor to pay for coming to the aid of Gil galad and driving him back from his goal. Its just sad that the Numenorean people had to suffer for their Kings desires and actions. :(

Author's Response: Well, I’m glad you feel less pressure, Gabriel. I know when I’ve discovered long fics or series I just read like I am devouring it and don’t think to review every chapter, I just read too fast. :/

Númenor...it started off well, but in time it rotted from the core outward. They enslaved other nations, cut down most of the trees in Enedwaith for their huge fleets, and in the end grew jealous of the Elves where once they had been their allies. Not all, of course, those like Elendil and his people were different and spared in the end, but it must have been fairly easy for Sauron to corrupt the king and those who were ambitious. But as you say, I pity the ‘ordinary’ folk too. If Númenor wer truly so dreadful that nothing less than its destrcution was possible, then it was certainly worse than I’ve depicted it here.! Thank you so much for the comment :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 15, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ I Will Not Break ~

Oh my god! Spiced Wine.

Poor Vanimore!

Morgoth is abhorrent. I doubt Vanya would have survived the first rape let alone any after that. Unless Morgoth did the same to her as he did to her mother-kept her trapped in her own body alive, through his power. :(

And now Vanimore must deal with this on his own. So sad. How lonely is he.

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. It was upsetting writing this, and it’s the one reason, and the biggest reason, why Vanimórë (later) defies his father as much as he can. He begged Sauron to help him, and Sauron didn’t. The betrayal is almost the worse thing.

Not that I suppose Sauron could actually have done anything, really.

And he was forging a weapon, which, as he says long after, requires heat and hammer blows, not gentleness :/



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 16, 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ Tempering The Steel

Great chapter! Getting to see Vanimore outside of Angband and in his role as Captain/warrior :)

Reading about all the time that had passed since Vanya's death and Morgoth's rape. Nargothrond's downfall and then Gondolin's With Glorfindel's heroic end, only serves to remind me how tragic a people the Noldor were. Constantly battling against their ultimate doom. :(


And Earendil! Good to see Melkor worried about that. So he should be. :)


So Vanimore has not completely hardened himself against caring for anyone, as we see in the way he fed and clothed the child he found.

I think he just guards his heart vehemently, afraid of what his father and Morgoth would do to him or others if he showed that vulnerability.

He has told himself he does not care but I cannot imagine Vanimore ever being a cold calculating person. As a warrior, yes! But not the real Vanimore. It is something he uses to deal with the violations, which I can fully understand. :/

Author's Response: I remember how free it felt, to write Vanimórë feeling somewhat free for the first time, seeing part of the world. :)

There will always be a great tenderness in Vanimórë that nothing can really ever quash, which is a good thing, as he could have been something rather dreadful ! Thank you very much for your comments, Gabriel :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 17, 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 ~ They Would Take Everything ~

I loved the beginning as Sauron enters the camp.

*Silence descended upon the encampment. Through it, Vanimore heard the thin wails of children hastily hushed by their elders. He did not move, waiting until the tent flaps were drawn aside by the petrified guards, and Sauron entered. Only then, almost negligently, did he come to his feet and bow.*

What Sauron did to the child Vanimore cared for. Horrible! Crushing him!

But I loved Vanimore's response. *Blood...it hazed Vanimore's vision and pounded in his brain. He moved, one hand drawing the dagger at his belt. He felt it meet something which deflected it, heard the scrape of steel on steel, then a force flung him back as if he were struck in the midriff by a mace. It smashed the air from his lungs, the table splintered as his body impacted against it. A booted foot pressed against his throat.

'Slaves own nothing' Sauron chided.*


I know I've got a lot to read. But I can't wait to see where this goes. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. Yes, Sauron wanted to control Vanimórë in all the days he could; he knew Vanimórë caring for a child was both simply how he was (he had wanted to care for his sister too, and did so as well as he could) and an act of defiance. He did not think of the child at all except something in his long game of ‘forging’ his son.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 18, 2018 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 ~ The First Taste Of Freedom ~

It is so very easy to forget that Vanimore has never seen beyond Angband and the northern lands that surround it.

To have him in awe of the patterns of frost on grass blades, sunsets cinder red and ice yellow and the dance of yellowing Silver Birches. These are miracles in nature that most people take for granted, but from someone who has seen, smelt and tasted only darkness and the vileness of it, it is a wonder beyond imagining. He is so like a child in this respect. :)

It was just wonderful to see him discovering things for the first time and realizing there is beauty in the world. Beyond all the pain and horror he has endured.

This last part, the light show Vanimore's people woke to watch. Spiced Wine! It's got to be the Valar-the War of the Wrath, right? I love Vanimore's desperate hope that the Valar have come to save them all. Its a little sad. :/

Lovely chapter! Spiced Wine!

Author's Response: Yes, it was sad and amazing to write him seeing the beauty of the world (and ever after it was something that he deeply appreciated, acting like a balm on his soul).

And yes, that was the War of Wrath he saw, from a far distance. It was why Sauron sent Vanimórë away, not believing he would survive it or., if he did, would be taken by the Valar. Sauron had more foresight than Melkor.

At this stage, yes, Vanimórë is still hopeful, it took him a long time to lose hope that one day he might be rescued by the Valar. :(

I’m very grateful for your reviews, Gabriel, but you don’t have to review every chapter, which must be quite a boring task for you! If you see anything you like, I always love a comment, but please don’t feel you have to review every chapter :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ Son of Cruelty ~

Poor Moriel! Forced to watch her husband die and then left alone in a place of darkness where there are the worst kind of monsters that haunt the shadows.
I would think that there would not be many women as slaves in Angband and so when one is captured she is considered a prize above others. Especially since Sauron loves experimenting.

I would have begged for death, but I think Moriel probably would have tried that already, somewhere along the line. So horrible!

The only thing worse than Moriel's experience, would be for children to be taken and enslaved or as in Vanimore's and Vanya's case born into the dark Lord's realm.

And Vanimore is so sweet and still so very innocent. He seems quite protective of his sister and tries to be her pillar of strength even when he doesn't feel it himself.

Sauron is his usual self. No surprises there. I'm almost afraid to think what their lives will be like as they grow. I have already read of Sauron's fatherly affection towards them. :(

A real heartwrenching chapter, Spiced! :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel.

Móriel was mad by the end, and yes, she would have begged for death, but Sauron (And Morgoth kept her alive).

This wasn't, as we'll come to see, the first time Sauron had attempted this, but the other 'experiments' were failures.

Vanimórë adored his sister, which ended up being incredibly important. If he had not loved her, he would have grown into a very different person.

His relationship with Sauron is...complicated. Not now, of course, but when he becomes older. Sauron really never ceased (until much later) to mould his son, to 'test' him, working toward his own goal. Morgoth thought Vanimórë was being trained to be the ultimate warrior and commander, to lead Angband's legions - Sauron, however, had rather different plans....
Thank you again, and I hope you have a good weekend. :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 14, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ To See Death As A Gift ~

I love Vanimore's steel, now that he is more learned in the art of combat. He is going to need it, I fear.

What did they do to Valoron! Its almost as if they are giving Vanimore harsh lessons in hardening his heart and teaching him that he has no control over anything. I guess that's to condition him as Sauron's slave perhaps or maybe its just the way of things in that place.

If that's not enough for one so young to endure, now he has had no choice but to kill his sister, simply to save her from Morgoth's clutches. That is so heartbreaking! Poor Vanimore. Things just keep going from bad to worse, for him. To have to end the life of the very person you love above all else. The only light, the only beauty in that hellish place, that kept him going.

In a sense he is being initiated, by the very fire, the very darkness of Angband.

I'm really enjoying this, Spiced Wine. Sad and harsh, as it is, I find myself looking forward to the next chapter. I can see why people rave about it. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel :) Vanimórë...well, it is in his blood to be a warrior (on his mother’s side anyhow) and he never consciously uses his Ainu powers, because they are Sauron’s he rejects them and instead they show in his warrior skills.

After he killed his sister, he determined nothing and no-one would break him and determined to become virtually unkillable. And Sauron suspected he would, Sauron was playing a very delicate game with his son, and for a long, long time.

Vanimórë never forgave himself for his sister, although he would not have forgiven himself if she had been killed by Melkor, so he has to live with that all his life. It made him very kind, very tender towards women, which, later, is actually to his detriment, since not all are worth it.

I’m glad you’re liking it. Very early days yet. I started writing this in 2006 and still remember it well :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 20, 2018 Title: Chapter 66: Chapter 66 ~ The Enemy Of Mine Enemy Is My Friend ~

Oh! I love Maglor and Vanimore in these chapters.

I love their love hate relationship. Maglor infuriated by Vanimore's control over him and Vanimore fueling the fire by goading him, baiting him. :)

Although in saying that I do feel for Maglor as he is a little tortured by the whole situation. By what happened to him in Mordor. Loathes it but needs it.

I love the battle scenes in this chapter. I'm a bit of a sucker for battle scenes. Loved how surprised Elgalad was that Maglor was the one rescuing him and Maglor shoving the hilt of a dagger into Elgalad's palm, turns and is back in the action. Maglor is just gorgeous!

But what Vanimore does to Hagard! *shudders* I know Hagard had done some pretty foul things in his past and was planning to rape and kill Elgalad, but I can't help but be a bit squeamish reading it. It just reminds me of poor Celebrimbor. Not that I'm the least bit sad for Hagard, but, Vanimore in this, is truly his father's son.

I'm bursting at the seams for Maglor and Tindomion's meeting. Can't wait for that!

Super enjoyable chapter! Spiced Wine!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Gabriel :) Yes, I love Vanimórë and Maglor; there will always be some sort of thread, some burning connection between them, forged out of need and hate and pain.

Maglor is just gorgeous, yes, my favourite of the sons :)

And speaking of sons, and Vanimórë’s cruelty, yes he is is father’s son, and he knows it and hates it, and tries to fight it, but he is, and he can be completely without pity.
Thank you so much for commenting :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 23, 2018 Title: Chapter 72: Chapter 72 ~ The Chosen ~

This chapter was such an emotional ride, Spiced!

And I did not realize Vanimore could shape shift! Such a surprise! He's been keeping that one under wraps. But at the same time I can understand why he would want to. He loathes himself enough for being Sauron's son.

I think there is such a sense of poetic justice in Vanimore and Glorfindel becoming powers. Giving the Valar the proverbial finger, so to speak. I mean the Valar have only ever shown contempt and hubris toward the Noldor, leaving them to their fate as if in punishment for daring to leave the protection and sovereignty of Aman.

But this was the part of the chapter that brought tears to my eyes. I know it sounds silly.


*There was green, gold. There was light, after so long, when all he had been was a houseless flame which refused to go out, to be eaten by the Night.

The spirit was aware of weight, of flesh, of solidity forming around the soul. He felt air rush into lungs which began to inflate and deflate, felt his heart begin to beat. He staggered, regained his balance. Long hair fell like water against his back.

He went down on his knees again, just breathing, seeing each mote of sand below him, feeling its granular texture. The wild scent of brine was in the air. With a powerful surge and bunch of sinew, he forced this new body to its feet. For a moment the weight disoriented him, and then his soul forged with it as hand into glove.

Feanor raised his head.*

It still brings a tear just writing it. I really loved this!

Fantastic!

Oh! And love the artwork!

Author's Response: Vanim?r? had never shape shifted before. He deliberately tried to do nothing that Sauron could do, although the gift was always inherent in him.

Now the Valar will begin to lose power, as they should, the useless bastards lol.

But oh, I am glad you loved F?anor?s return. I had to write this (and all the other Dark Prince stories) and then all of Magnificat Book I before I could continue from this part. I was determined to bring back the Noldor who had died. So thank you, Gabriel!



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 52: Chapter 52 ~ And Night Falls Between Us ~

Wow! That Malthador really has become a nasty piece of work. Making Elgalad pay for rebuffing him then throw in antipathy for the Noldor-kinslayers knowing full well Elgalad's Lord is one-you've got one messed up Elf who believes his treatment of Elgalad is just and for the betterment amd protection of the realm. :/

I'm so relieved he's been dealt with.

I love how Tindomion, Glorfindel and Legolas are extremely protective of Elgalad and Tindomion's words to him when he apologised for setting foot in the santuary where Gil galad was buried.

*"He would not mind, Elgalad, he would welcome thee. Thou doth know how to love."*

It brought tears to my eyes. The High King sent into the everlasting dark for that very thing.


Then there's Vanimore who's this steely-eyed veteran warrior who you'd think would easily best the Mouth in anything, which he does to perfection, only to have his father humiliate him, demean him by giving him as some sort of consolation prize to the Mouth. His life is so full of horror of the highest order. I just cringed when he was chained and left for that abhorrent excuse of a Man to do with as he pleased. Poor Vanimore, its any wonder he's sane at all. Being used and abused like that. *Shivers*

Loved this chapter, though Spiced Wine! :)

Author's Response: Yes, Malthador was embittered and hated Elgalad, poor thing. But at least it’s been found out now and taken in hand.

Ah yes, the Mouth, he appears much later too. A ghastly individual. Sauron knows the Mouth could never been Vanimórë, but sometimes he ‘gives’ Vanimórë to the Mouth to keep Vanimórë reminded of who holds the real power :(
Thank you so much, Gabriel. I appreciate it :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 ~ He Walked Alone And Sorrowing ~

This chapter was both beautiful with the promise of everything Elgalad wanted and the most heartwrenching.

With Vanimore's continuing campaign to force Elgalad to hate him purely for his own safety. Well, I mean there really is no other way for Vanimore to keep him out of Sauron's reach. Elgalad will not listen to reason, so what else can he do but sever ties, no matter how harsh.

A very bittersweet reunion. :/

I liked the use of the Lay of Leithien, in part, and how the verses seem to pertain to Vanimore and Elgalad. Really lovely, Spiced. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel. It’s an impossible situation, really, Vanimórë loves Elgalad but he cannot have him (and does not think he deserves him, either) so there is little he can do but drive him away. Physically and emotionally. Ahhh! So long ago I wrote this and with what is happening now, and recently in the story, I am just shaking my head at how much has changed :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: February 01, 2018 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 ~ Child Of Light And Darkness ~

So sorry Spiced Wine for taking so long to review this week. :/

Such a sad story. Amroth and Nimrodel.

Ah! Vanimore! Ever the protector and such a kind soul, a gentlemen, always thinking of everyone else. No matter his feelings for Nimrodel.

I guess that comes from the love he had for his sister. A chance to show that quality again, this time to a stranger.

Ever wanting to love someone of his own or be loved himself. But is always thwarted, either by his father's desires and actions or by life itself.

I love how you have it that Nimrodel is with child when Vanimore finds her and passes away quietly upon the babes birth. Gone to finally join her beloved. Quite a fitting explanation and end to her life, I think.

This was lovely. :)

Author's Response: No worries, Gabriel. I am very grateful you take time to comment at all :)

I always found the story of Amroth and Nimrodel very sad when Legolas sang the song on Lothlórien.

Of course Vanimórë would have treated Nimrodel with kindness and compassion, poor woman, and yes, he stilll sees his sister in all women so he would be nothing but kind. He wouldn’t have wanted her to die, and maybe had she lived he might have been able to persuade her to go back to Lórien with her child, but as that was not to be...Elgalad. A child he had always wanted and could never have himself, and knows he will not be able to keep. But still loves...
Thank you so much for commenting.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 26, 2018 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 ~ The Last Star Is Fallen ~

As soon as I began reading these last few chapters and my eyes lit upon Gil galad I couldn't leave the story alone. :)

Gil is one of my favorites. I lap up anything and everything written about him.

Your OMC Tindomion, magnificent a character and he and Gil are just magic together. You can feel the love between them, in the little touches, the looks. I couldn't get enough of them. You have me hooked on these two, no question. They are like Feanor and Fingolfin together. Beautiful!

Then there's Tindomion's mad and desperate scrabble to reach Gil's side.



"Gil..." His voice was constricted; a blade wedged itself into his heart, taking his breath.

Gil galad's eyes opened, still fiercely bright against the white pallor of his face, the red and black of blood.

"Istelion...he is gone?"

"Yes, hush. Rest, I will get help..."
His mind, vibrating with pain, hurled a furious, mental cry for aid, but it was already there, light feet speeding toward them, halting.

"Istelion." The star-blue eyes fixed on Tindomion's and clung.

"Gil... do... not!"

The pain spasmed through Gil galad's body. Blood burst in a plume from his lips. Tindomion leaned over him, tear tracks washing a path through the spatters of blood and ash on his face. Gil galad wanted to reach out a hand to that anguished face and offer comfort.

So my father died, so did Morgoth break Fingolfin's body...


This brought tears to my eyes. So heartbreaking.

Then Gil is taken by memory; A time when he was a child horse riding with his father and meeting Maedhros and his brother's for the first time. This must have been the pinnacle of joy in his childhood. And the first time he set eyes on Tindomion was another.



"Gil. Gil!"

"Istelion..."

"Gil...please..." Tindomion's mind was a firesong of anguish.

No. Please. Oh, Eru, please.

Narya, Gil galad thought lovingly.
And died.



Oh my gosh! I really felt the loss. Poor Tindomion :( So beautifully written. :)

Author's Response: Oh, I love Gil-galas too, Gabriel. In fact there is much more about him and Tindómion in Magnificat of the Damned Book I - Starfall, the start of their relationship and the end. There is a ‘bit’ in this story, but Magnificat 1 mainly follows the Noldor from when they set foot on Endor to the Last Alliance.

I think Gil-galad lost his father so young and he loved Maedhros, too, and Tindómion coming into his life was like someone out of the past.

Aww, thank you for the comments, Gabriel, I really appreciate it. As I say, if you want to read any more about Gil-galad and Tindómion you might want to read Magnificat book 1 after this.



Title: ~ I Will Lead And Thou Shalt Follow ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 20]
Summary:

~ It was said that Fëanor had little love for his half-brothers, yet Fingolfin followed him to betrayal and, ultimately, to death in single combat against Morgoth.

There were many lies handed down through the ages, and this lie covered something so forbidden and irresistible that no law could forbid it, neither could death or doom destroy it.

The Arc of Fire, the blazing thread connecting the houses of Fëanor and Fingolfin encompassed three generations and thousands of years. It began in Valinor, in the Years of the Trees.

This is a prologue to Lords Of The Light, and set within the Dark Prince verse.


Fëanaro's aura was hard and as brilliant as forge-heated gems.

“And wilt thou indeed follow me?” he whispered.

 


Category: Fiction
Characters: Fëanor, Fingolfin, Glorfindel, Maglor
Content: AU, Drama, Dubcon, Erotica, Explicit Sex, Incest, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Magnificat Of The Damned
Chapters: 4 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 13469 | Read count: 32120

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Published: July 01, 2011 | Updated: July 01, 2011


Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 10, 2018 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 ~ Follow Me! ~

Awesome chapter! Spiced Wine.

You know, Nolofinwe must be made of Mithril or is made of the same steel as Feanaro. For he is such an immense pillar of strength, to be able to endure all that has transpired since his brother drew his sword on him. To lose his father and the one he loves and burns for to Formenos for twelve years while having to rule in his father's stead. That couldn't have been easy knowing his father chose Feanaro over him, their people and his station. {I know it was more about a statement of protest over the Valar's interference with Finwe's Kingship} but that had to hurt. Then to have his father murdered and the trees destroyed... I can see why Nolofinwe made an exceptional King and was seen as a preferred leader amongst their people.

In saying that I wonder what sort of King Feanaro might have been had he not been tipped over the edge with grief by his father's death and the stealing of the Silmarils. It would be interesting to explore.

My most favorite characters are Feanor and Fingolfin. I think their story is the most fantastic and yet heartbreaking of all the stories I have ever read. But that is what makes it such a thrilling story. :)


I'm moving onto the chapters you recommended in 'Fragments of Fate and Fire' I have loved and enjoyed what I have read so far. Looking forward to the next. Is there any story you would recommend after FOFF or should I delve into the Tome's of the epic Magnificat of the Damned 'Starfall?' :)

Author's Response: I do liked Fingolfin to silver-steel, yes. He is extremely strong and while just as passionate as Fëanor he conceals it; he's more careful.

I do explore a little of how Fëanor is as High King when the Noldor return, but that's in Magnificat II onward and in Dark Lands onwards. But Fingolfin must have been viewed as 'steadier' (which he was), and we know more people followed him. I think with Fëanor he was either loved or hated, no in-between!

I have always loved these two from the first time I read the Silmarillion. :)

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Gabriel :)

If you want to read the series, really the first book is Dark Prince as much is told there that is important to the rest of the series. The Dark Prince stories were written to form a kind of 'fence' around the other stories which are mostly written within its boundaries but more fleshed out.

Magnificat of the Damned Book I: Starfall, begins with Fingolfin coming to Endor and ends at the Last Alliance. Then Magnificat II: Resurrection begins where Dark Prince ends, with the return of the Noldor.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 ~ The Imprint Of Power ~

Oh! Feanaro! What have you done!

His actions and behaviour are frenetic. The first signs of the inevitable madness that eventually takes over.

I feel for Laurefinde, the recipient of a kind of rape. But I feel more heartbroken for Nolofinwe, who loves and trusts and burns for his brother. Who gives of himself one hundred percent. Something I don't feel Feanaro has quite grasped yet.

In a strange way I'm glad that this is not who Feanaro really is and in that he has an excuse.

Macalaure and Nolofinwe. There's something going on there, which I'm not quite sure either of them realise yet. Its rather lovely. :)

I've been meaning to read your stories for sometime now, Spiced Wine, but hadn't quite got round to it til now. :D

Author's Response: Thank you very much for commenting, Gabriel. This was the very first story I wrote in my 'verse, and there's a lot that is 'hidden' that only comes to light in other stories.
Fëanor's rape of Glorfindel is one of those things, and the slow twisting of his mind by both the Valar and Melkor. Except not at this point, really. What Fëanor is...is really almost too much for a 'human' body. Glorfindel will talk about this incident to Gil-galad in Magnificat I (when Glorfindel is reborn and returned to Middle-earth). And also in that story there is a little more about Fingolfin and Maglor.

I hope you enjoy, although there is an awful lot to read :) But thank you for considering it.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 08, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ A Jealous Burning ~

I love the artwork you have on your stories page, Spiced Wine. Very talented artist this Karrpriss.

I also like the style in which you write. Really different and lovely.

I understand what you meant when you said 'What Feanaro is is really almost too much for the Human body.' It really shows too, the way you've depicted him.

But Oh! Will things ever be the same again or remotely good again between them. I hope so. Because everything is just spiraling out of control. And they are just so magnificent together.

*"Thou art as tense as I," Feanaro murmured in his ear, fingers kneading at taut muscles. A flush swept over Nolofinwe's cheeks, his head tipped back, his lips parting. He was ashamed of this wanton, helpless need, so taboo that it should disgust him, cause him to flinch back in abhorrence. It did not. A moan grew in his chest, passed his lips.
"I can give thee all that thou doth need," he said on its heels. "Why Laurefinde?"

A husky laugh answered him, there was a whisper of a breath against his mouth. "I do not love Laurefinde. I need him, his loyalty, what he is. And I do desire him. And so thou wouldst refuse me?"

"I should."

"But thou wilt not."

Their lips met."*

Nolofinwe try as he may, just cannot deny Feanaro, no matter what he has done. So addicted is he to the bright star that is his brother he is willing to be burned. Its both beautiful and heartbreaking.

I hope what I have written is coherent and makes sense, Spiced Wine, as I have had many interruptions while writing this. Apologies if it isn't.

Looking forward to the next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gabriel, for commenting.

Actually, there are some one shots in Fragments of Fate and Fire, which shows, I hope, how very madly in love they were at the beginning, and Fëanor does explain, long, long after, that his hunger for freedom, really, to love as he wanted to love, did go to his head and make him want too much.

A Seduction Written In Stone. http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&chapter=1

Facade. http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&chapter=12

And The Fire of Blue Diamonds.
http://www.faerie-archive.com/viewstory.php?sid=120&textsize=0&chapter=13

Fëanor and Fingolfin's relationship is extremely complex, as it would be, but they do meet again when I bring the Noldor back after the War of the Ring. And although things are not easy, and never could be, thee love is there under everything, death and betrayal, and the horror of the Void where they were imprisoned by Námo.

Since you write a lovely and fascinating Finarfin, you may as well know that the poor sod gets 'had' by the Valar and is enslaved by them, but Fëanor determines to release him, which I am beginning to write about now in Magnificat IV.

And oh, Kaprriss is wonderful isn't she? She really 'feels' the characters, making them more than just pictures.

Thank you very much for your comments :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: January 06, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 ~ A Flame Too Bright ~

Spiced Wine! Your Feanaro and Nolofinwe are absolutely delectable!

*The rill of lashes swept down. The modeled mouth curved a little, and then Feanaro drew him nearer, long fingers slipping through his hair to the nape of his neck. "I always see beauty."*

*The magnetism impacted upon Nolofinwe brutally. He burned under the touch that lazily traced his jaw, outlined his parted mouth.*

*"And dost thou truly love thy brother, Nolofinwe?"*

*Nolofinwe managed a "Yes..." through lips suddenly, comprehensively covered by Feanaro's. His gasp of shock swallowed by the kiss. The world, his blood stopped. And then fire exploded through them.*

They truly do blaze in each other's company. 'Wildfire! Whitefire!' Beautiful! :)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you, Gabriel :) I'm always startled when I see a review for an older work, even though everything is the same 'verse \.

When I first read the Silm, so long ago, when I was about 16, I just felt that Fëanor and Fingolfin did indeed blaze ion one another's company (and in secret). I'm so glad you liked this :) Thank you again.



Title: ~ Magnificat of the Damned Book I: Starfall. ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 118]
Summary:

Tears unnumbered they would shed, yet still they would live, and love and defy Darkness.
And they would die. Yet as Fëanor prophesied, their deeds would "be a matter of song until the last days of Arda."

The Arc of Fire, the blazing thread of forbidden love and desire which began with Fëanor and Fingolfin spanned three generations and thousands of years. I Will Lead and Thou Shalt Follow told of the birth of that passion. This story continues the Arc, telling of the ultimately doomed love between Fingon and Maedhros, Fingon's son Gil-galad and Tindómion, son of Maglor, in an Arda where the love of one's own gender was seen as an offense in the eyes of the the Valar – and punished by banishment into the Everlasting Dark.

"I, Tindómion Maglorion do so swear, sire." His voice shook a little. "My fealty and all my service is thine, Gil-galad of House Fingolfin. From now until the day of my death."

"Or mine," said Gil-galad, quite softly.



Category: Fiction
Characters: Aredhel, Caranthir, Ecthelion, Elrond, Erestor, Fingolfin, Fingon, Gil-galad, Glorfindel, Gothmog, Maglor, Melkor/Morgoth, OFC, OMC, Orc, Sauron
Content: Angst, AU, Character Death, Drama, Erotica, Incest, Rape/Non-con, Slash
Challenge: None
Series: Magnificat Of The Damned
Chapters: 49 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 177801 | Read count: 137013

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Published: July 01, 2011 | Updated: July 04, 2011


Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: March 21, 2018 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 14 ~ That Moonless Night In Winter ~

Hi Spiced!

This has to be one of the most significant yet sorrowful parts to the story.

I love Fingolfin. One of my favorites.

Fingolfin was right! And Maedhros should have listened to his uncle and struck Morgoth first in an offensive manoeuvre.

But what's done is done. You can't go back and change it. Yet I do feel sorry for Maedhros, can only imagine how he must of felt. Bad error of judgement on his part. :(

I absolutely love Fingolfin's last moments;

*He raised his sword arm and as it came down, in the final stroke, he seemed to see and feel close at his side, his half-brother. And then Feanor's eyes were all he could see, diamonds in the last darkness.

Nolofinwe. Sorrow in the word, and love, and pride.

Fingolfin fell back, agony a vise about him. He tried to reach out to the one whom had never truly left him, who seemed so close now, at the end.

Feanor, he thought.

And died.*

Oh my gosh! Spiced! I loved that Feanor was there at the end. So sad and so beautiful!

Author's Response: I love Fingolfin too, and this was so sad to write; I still remember it :( It was such a long time until they met again, but at least Fëanor was there with him at the last ;__; Thank you so much for commenting, Gabriel.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: March 26, 2018 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15 ~ Dusk At The Rising Of The Sun ~

I just had to review this chapter as well, Spiced. :)


Oh My Gosh!

The whole chapter had me so teary-eyed, so emotional.

It has always bothered me that Turgon was gifted with Fingolfin's beautiful and ruined body and not brought to Fingon in Hithlum. The son who stood by his father's side instead of vanishing into a hidden city. But in saying that, I guess Gondolin was more fitting a place for the great Fingolfin, High King of the Noldor in Endor, to be buried. A place of beauty for his cairn to look out over, because, MY GOD! He deserved it!

I really love your inclusion of a solar eclipse at the moment of Fingolfin's death. Such a beautiful idea. :)

Then Fingon's anguished decision to send Gil galad to the Havens. What I loved about this was Fingon gifting his son with the spear, 'Aeglos' that Fingolfin was said to have crafted with his own hands. I have read many stories as to how Gil galad came to own 'Aeglos' I loved all of them. But I think yours is the most emotional and apt of them all.

Wonderful chapter, Spiced! Loved it! :D

Author's Response: I cried myself when I wrote this ;__;. I believe Gondolin was probably the closet place (as the Eagle flies) from Angband, although I feel Fingolfin would have preferred to be with Fingon, but then Barad Eithil did eventually become overrrun as did Hithlum. And this is where I prefer my own theory, because there should have been an eclipse.

Gil-galad, poor boy. Poor Fingon. There is so little happiness in the First Age. Thank you, Gabriel.



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: March 08, 2018 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 ~ The First Shadows ~

Hi Spiced!

Sorry its taken me a lot longer to review this week, I've had alot going on, including writing, myself, which has been a welcome change.

Dungortheb is an intriguing place and I haven't found a story yet that follows the Himlad Noldor on their precarious journey through it. So I decided to write my own, a oneshot. Hence the questions I asked about time and distance it would take to reach Nargothrond, weeks ago. Much to my surprise this oneshot has now turned into a series. lol. Its funny the way things happen.

Anyway, enough waffling.

Aredhel's quite a force. Headstrong, intelligent and fiery. Are we sure she's not Feanor's daughter? lol. She must drive her father and brothers up the wall with her inability to keep still, no matter how much they love her.

I loved how you used Glorfindel's memories of Feanor to explain how he managed to lose sight of Aredhel. His attention taken briefly but long enough for her to disappear without a trace. They must have been damn good memories for the Lord of the Golden Flower, a seasoned warrior and hero to lose his focus. ;)

And my god! Aredhel has balls! She seems totally unfazed by the strange goings on as they ride through it. But knowing Aredhel, once she sets her mind to something everything else becomes secondary. :)

Author's Response: Hiya, Gabriel and thank you for commenting. :) Hope the fic goes well, sometimes they just grow :)
Yes, it was something extremely ‘distracting’ to make Glorfindel forget his duties, and he will not forgive himself for it, although as is shown, Aredhel is very well able to take care of herself



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: March 16, 2018 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 ~ Ereinion ~

Poor Fingon having to marry that abhorrent woman for duty's sake. He is so terribly miserable.

And Ereinion, he is absolutely adorable. The one and only good thing that has come from this disaster of a marriage.

But her treatment of him is deplorable. How can anyone treat any child let alone a child such as Ereinion, who is so beautiful, I might add, the way she does. Its as if she is completely devoid and or incapable of feeling love of any kind. Its pretty sad really. But the fact that she denied her son of love, is even worse.

I loved the way you included Caranthir with his brothers. That he loves and cares for his uncle and cousins. He's such a lonely character normally its just so heartwarming to see him in this role.

It is so fitting to have Maedhros name Ereinion and the instant bond formed between Maedhros, his brothers and Gil galad was so beautiful, Spiced! Especially considering the lack of family unity Gil galad had endured so far. Its any wonder he wanted to spend as much time as possible with his father and his cousins.

Really beautiful chapter, Spiced. :)

Author's Response: There is a reason for Rosriel acting like this, but it won’t actually be explained until Magnificat II, I’m afraid. Suffice it to say, it’s not altogether her fault. But that makes no difference to howit affected poor little Gil-galad. He was only happy with his father (and, by extension, the Fëanorions he met) and for so short a time, really, until much later, in Lindon.

Thank you so much for reviewing, Gabriel :) So glad you liked it



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: May 15, 2018 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44 ~ Bonds Of Fire, Chains Of Darkness ~

Loved this chapter.

*Gil galad stepped back, lifted a fresh skin and poured it. Like his own, the Feanorion's white flesh was dappled with bruises, but there were none on his back. he had been at the forefront of the battles. His wounds had not been earned in retreat.

'The only thing thou hast ever fled from is what is between us.'

One dark blossom smudged the hip-bone. Gil galad ran his fingers across it softly, felt the stomach muscles tighten, saw the response jutting rigid.

'And that, my stubborn Feanorion, is all I need to know.'
He tilted the water-skin again and it drenched the bronze hair to black, painted silver lines down Tindomion's sinews. Slowly Gil galad drew his hands through the wet mass of hair, untangling the triple braids, massaging the scalp, the nape of the neck, the tense shoulders. He felt Tindomion's fingers in his own hair, on his own flesh, as their bodies closed the gap, fused together by heat and water.*

GOD! This is how it should have been from the beginning, when they began to feel the first stirrings of love and desire. This is how it should be between them always. But we know that's never going to happen. It's so heartbreaking. And Tindomion has no idea he's about to lose his love. I wonder if, had he known Gil galad's fate, would he have allowed himself and the king the freedom to be together, the Valar be damned, in every sense of the word?

Sorry about this Spiced. A bit of a long one this time. :)

Author's Response: I know, I know. THIS is how it should have been, and I loved writing it and I was so frustrated for them! I think, in fact, Tindómion does say, in later stories, what he would have done, had he known, They *do* meet again, after all when Gil-Galad is reborn, but it was a long, lonely, weary time for him, and worse for Gil-galad of course. Please don’t apologise, I am glad you’re reading and commenting :)



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: May 06, 2018 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40 ~ Storm Surge ~

You mentioned in your last response, Spiced, that you saw Gil galad as a very lonely person, a lonely King.

Well, I have never seen him more lonely as I did in this chapter. He and Tindomion, both. But him especially.

It was a very emotional chapter. No more so than when Tindomion removed to Imladris in the hope of sparing Gil galad's reputation and ultimately his kingship. Just when you thought things couldn't get any worse for them...Damn the Valar and their laws.

Will they ever be together?

Super sex scene, as well, Spiced. ;)

Author's Response: I know, he’s so lonely it breaks my heart; I think all king’s are but he more than any, and yet it breaks Tindómion’s too, it’s an impossible situation for them both :(



Reviewer: Gabriel Signed
Date: April 17, 2018 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 ~ The Testing Of Courage ~

Oh! Spiced. I love these two. Gil galad and Tindomion, Vanimore too.

Vanimore's story is so full of pain and anguish on so many levels. Just when he believes he has some sense of freedom albeit a little, Sauron reels him back in.

I found it so heartbreaking that Sauron uses his sons desperate need to be loved to his own ends. :/


Gil-galad and Tindomion, I just can't get enough of them. Beautiful characters.

The initiation to become a Knight-Companion. I liked the idea of a leap of courage. Showing the High King one has the ability to rise above fear.

*He glimpsed ahead of him the figure of the King running like a stag, a banner of black hair streaming behind him. The sight spiked a thrill of challenge through Tindomion. It was beautiful, like watching a stallion run upon the green fields.*

Ah! Tindomion is quite captivated isn't he. And your Gil, well I'm rather biased when it comes to Gil galad. :)

Author's Response: Awww, thank you, I am glad you like Gil-galad and Tindómion— it had to be a Fëanorion he fell in love with (in this series). Tindómion was initially so ready to take offence, and yes, he fell — from a great height! Thank you so much for commenting :)