Real name: Chiara Cadrich
Membership status: Member
Member since: November 06, 2014
Chiara is nostalgic about the works of Pr. Tolkien, who tirelessly travels the road that goes ever on ... In her cozy smial, she reads her comrades' tales, and sometimes ventures into the wilderness to bring back her own treasures ...
Rated: General Audiences [Reviews - 7]
B2MeM Day Twenty-Eight: Gondor. Today's Challenge: There was no avoiding it; the letter had to be composed...
Characters: Legolas, Thranduil
Chapters: 1 | Completed: No | Word count: 966 | Read count: 2708
Published: July 02, 2011 | Updated: July 02, 2011
Date: May 06, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
What a lovely story !
So it seems in middle earth, premonitions journey through dreams and children.
Since proper writing is the mark of adulthood, it is not surprising that writing intrinsically lacks the spontaneous innocence and foresight.
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 9]
Journeying ever farther into the south, Aragorn gets wind of a mysterious buyer of slaves deep in the jungles near the Girdle of Arda. He proceeds to investigate the matter, in hopes of finding his friend and learning what the persons in question are up to. However, he soon finds that he has plunged into trouble that is easier to get into than to get out of. A deadly struggle follows, in which Aragorn is hard put to it to survive.
Rated Mature for violence and some horror themes.
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Black Numenorean, Elboron, Eldarion, Éowyn, Faramir, Gimli, Legolas, OMC, Peregrin "Pippin" Took
Content: Action/Adventure, Gen
Chapters: 6 | Completed: No | Word count: 18456 | Read count: 10579
Published: October 07, 2011 | Updated: April 07, 2012
Date: May 06, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
I can feel the thrill of adventure running down my spine.
Like this fair company, I am preparing for a pleasant journey afar, confortably sat in peace time!
Date: May 07, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
These characters are finely set in place.
One detail : I think complaining about her husband neglecting her, was somehow rude on behalf of Princess Eowyn, since Faramir had to attend at the host's duties. It may be heard as "my husband should not go a-hunting with you all..." !
Date: May 09, 2015 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: Lieutenant Thorongil
I am thrilled !
How do corsairs guide themselves at night ? May be you could mention if there are any lights ashore such as a lighthouse ?
Suggestion : lateen sail is an expression from the historical middle-age. Triangular shape wouldn't be sufficient ?
Date: May 09, 2015 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3: Too Late
This battle is superb !
I see some military practice in the author's words.
The heel-clicking is of prussian origin and has spread throughout european armies since. Maybe it is out of scope in Middle-earth ?
Date: May 09, 2015 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5: Farewell To Th
A well-told story with good rythme an endearing characters !
How old exactly is Aragorn ?
Rated: Teen [Reviews - 5]
Characters: Faramir, Orc
Content: Action/Adventure, Character Death, Drama
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 2593 | Read count: 2043
Published: December 22, 2011 | Updated: December 22, 2011
Date: February 17, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: The Lucky Arrow
Well-built war-story ! But I guess they do not end so well in real life...
In Tolkien's writings arrows carry special significations. The red Arrow is a signal of war and deman of help. Bard's Arrow is of special smithing and bears its wielder's bane to the target.
Now I notice your arrow bears Faramir's token. So it might become a heirloom of Pocosin's family, unabling to keep woodlore wisdom in the family.
And one more thing from a frenchman to his american friend : you used tomahawk. Here in France we would probably use "francisque", the so-called one-hand axe of the franc barbarians.
Author's Response: Part of this story is based on the fact that, regardless of the war or in what time in history it occurred, soldiers frequently claim battlefield artifacts as souvenir's. I saw some rather grisly trophies collected by infantrymen when I was in Vietnam. Thank you for your review and informative comments.
Rated: Teen [Reviews - 4]
Content: Action/Adventure, Angst, Character Death
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 4596 | Read count: 1512
Published: January 05, 2012 | Updated: January 05, 2012
Date: February 17, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Green Fletchings
Excellent! A very realistic slice of ranger's life.
Author's Response: It was realistic in more ways than one. This was adapted from one of my own Vietnam experiences. Thanks again for your continuing interest and support.
Rated: General Audiences [Reviews - 5]
Characters: Elladan, Elrohir
Content: Action/Adventure, Character Death
Chapters: 1 | Completed: Yes | Word count: 1594 | Read count: 2007
Published: February 05, 2012 | Updated: February 05, 2012
Date: April 01, 2016 Title: Chapter 1: Queen's Brothers Bag Record-Breaking Warg!
This clever journalistic report was much entertaining !
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. This story was in response to a challenge on another website. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Rated: Explicit [Reviews - 19]
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Beregond, Celeborn, Elfwine, Éomer, Éowyn, Faramir, Gandalf, Gimli, Legolas, Lothiriel, OFC, OMC, Orc, Samwise "Sam" Gamgee, Uruk-Hai
Content: Action/Adventure, Angst, Character Death, Erotica, Explicit Sex, Femmeslash, Het
Chapters: 36 | Completed: No | Word count: 255684 | Read count: 19920
Published: July 29, 2014 | Updated: November 26, 2017
Date: December 04, 2017 Title: Chapter 36: The Gathering Storm
I am glad Arwen has a collection of fine swords at hand, but I'm afraid these teas make her dizzy when the time comes to defend herself.
The sub-chapters are carefully placed so that the plot advances smoothly to the climax. (!)
On veut la suite, Karlmir ! (;))
Author's Response: I hope the subplots are not too confusing. Thanks for your review and support. The next chapter should be ready to post shortly after Christmas.
Date: September 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 11: The Seeing Stones
Hello Karlmir !
Learning to use a palantir seems so easy ! Too easy if you ask me... Maybe his medallion helps Linner in some way ?
I would have expected the stone to defend against someone holding no legitimate claim.
Something else : I can think of two origins for the seeing-stone : the palantir of Osgiliath, supposed to have sunk in the Anduin and then the ocean ? Or maybe the Northern master-stone, sunk in the iced waters of Forochel. In both cases their presence here is worth a complete story.
Author's Response: As you may have noticed, Wormwood's palant
Date: September 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 12: An Evil in Dunland
Cromwell is definitely an odd uruk -likes washing up and the company of friendly men. He must have a fair share of human blood. Did you get his name from the "Lord protector" ?
Author's Response: Actually, at one point in the story Cromwell reveals that he was once an Elf of high social status, but can recall no more. As for his name, I'm American and know very little about Oliver Cromwell. I simply thought it was a cool name for a villain.
Date: July 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 4: The Hidden Path
That's it ! I'm in the story and wish to read all along !
This is much entertaining so far !
Author's Response: Thank you for your support, Chiara. I'm trying to post a new chapter each week.
Date: September 21, 2015 Title: Chapter 14: The Corsair's Townhouse
So the plot is somehow unveiling.
I am surprised at 3 things :
-so few orcs (200?) could endanger a proud kingdom like Gondor, (you gave sensible arguments about that , but still, I guess they have not the slightest chance against two elite companies such as the guards of the citadel or the rangers of Ithilien, unless those are caught by surprise.
- the corsairs posess such a trustworthy might in a gondorian town
- that these men, though thugs, should admit an orc amidst them.
Thus the magic Linner is now wielding will probably be a bigger part of the future equation, which Cromwell has minimized for now.
So lets's see how it goes...
Author's Response: At this point in the story, most of Cromwell's Orcs are still asleep in the caves of the Ered Nimrais. He has approximately 4,800 Orkish troops at his disposal.
Skyrmir is able to maintain one of his headquarters in Linhir above the suspicion of the locals simply because he is spending money freely. You have to remember that, although King Elessar has instituted economic reforms, most of the kingdom is experiencing a post-war depression. Skyrmir's neighbors simply regard him, not as a pirate, but as a wealthy merchant who is pumping money into the local economy. Additionally, his activities there are low key.
Skyrmir and his cronies were already allied with the Orcs during the War of the Ring. They have no problem admitting another Orc into their company if it will suit their purposes.
Yes, Linner Wormwood's magical abilities will continue to grow as the story progresses, but never forget one important part of the equation---he is insane.
Date: October 07, 2015 Title: Chapter 18: The Enchanter's Scheme
Having Aragorn and his captain discuss the political and symbolic importance of Imladris was quite elegant.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed that aspect of the chapter. Arwen's brothers occasionally stayed at Imladris during the 4th Age, but I don't now if they stayed in their father's mansion or in another dwelling, visiting friends. Celeborn occasionally spent some time there too after East Lorien had been established.
Date: October 05, 2015 Title: Chapter 17: Spying and Scrying
What a lovely idea - a fell beast...
Two tiny comments this time :
- May I suggest Faramir and Eowyn be called "princely couple" ? Ithilien has been raised to a princedom "only".
- maple trees are found in modern northern America only. It is not a tree from the "ancient continent". So maybe it is an opportunity to find a tolkienish new tree name ? Maybe a kind brought there by Elendil himself ?
Author's Response: You are correct. The term "royal couple" should be reserved for the king and queen.
Europe does indeed have ancient native maples, The Norway Maple(Acer platanoides), for one. Thank you for the suggestion, however. I may use it later in this story and others.
Date: October 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 15: Skyrmir's Tale
Hopefully these allies might still have divergent priorities...
Author's Response: Like his fellow villain Cromwell, Skyrmir wants wealth and territory of his own to rule. He also wants revenge against Elessar for what happened to the Corsairs during and after the War of the Ring.
Date: October 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 16: Return to Darkwood
The overall castle scenery and staging seems very likely and familiar. I think it is a great success.
I am not sure visiting Imladris is of great use for the king or Arnor, which people is probably concentrated along the gwathlo basin (former Cardolan), the Greenway, the area between nenuial, Fornost and Bree, apart from the Shire of course. Maybe it is a personal youth remember travel.
Author's Response: For now, King Elessar treasures Imladris as his former home. But he also considers it as an historical landmark worth preserving for future generations. The population in that region would grow during the 4th Age as veterans of the War of the Ring received tracts of land along the Great East Road.
Date: January 10, 2016 Title: Chapter 21: Skullduggery
Hello Karlmir !
This is getting pleasantly tougher !
Author's Response: As you can see, there are several subplots and many twists in this story. I hope you're taking notes.
Date: January 10, 2016 Title: Chapter 22: The Mountain Chief's Tale
These population displacements recall sad memories of our modern world !
You have patiently built deep causes of political unrest.
Author's Response: It was surely inevitable that King Elessar's political and economic reforms would not benefit everyone in the Reunited Kingdom. Some shortsightedness, as well as dishonesty, by certain officials was bound to occur--with dire consequences.
Date: May 28, 2016 Title: Chapter 32: Black Magic and Spies
The half-tone picture you drew, ambiguously mixing dream with magic, sensuality with love, is a masterpiece.
Of course the second part is harsher, but its violence has been patiently prepared.
Author's Response: This incident will be an important element in the next few chapters. Thanks for reviewing.
The posting of the next chapter might be a bit delayed as I am taking a break to work on a short story about a spell of wretched winter weather across the Reunited Kingdom.
Date: March 26, 2016 Title: Chapter 30: The Shield-Maiden's Welcome
Here is a nicely inventive chapter ! The elvish eye-sight connexion underlines the unique elven mindset. I guess the elves, as first awakened kind after the Great Music, may also have other ways of communing, such as music and poetry, (cf. the uttermost importance of elvish words, able to summon the images of what is told about)
I am a bit surprised at an elf who does not know she is not an elf. I would have deemed a half-elf, educated as an elf, would feel her inner nature. May be being revealed as not-fully elf, the maiden could feel the opportunity to embrance the latent destiny of hers ?
Author's Response: "I am a bit surprised at an elf who does not know she is not an elf. I would have deemed a half-elf, educated as an elf, would feel her inner nature. May be being revealed as not-fully elf, the maiden could feel the opportunity to embrace the latent destiny of hers?"
I am assuming that you are referring to Elweena. In this and later stories it will be revealed that Elweena is originally from the vicinity of Dol Amroth or Edhellon. Although she is mostly Mannish, she is a genetic throwback whose Elven genes have predominated. She was bought to Lothl
Date: January 29, 2016 Title: Chapter 24: The Celos Vale Gambit
Now I'm back in my Roleplying game years. Sorcerers and treachery ! Delightful !
One small remark : Thorwolf and "by Odin's balls" are not exactly middle-earth corsairs features, rather earthen norse.
Author's Response: You'll have to pardon me for likening the Corsairs to Vikings, but I occasionally indulge in some artistic license to enliven the plot. Thanks again for your interest and support.
Date: February 07, 2016 Title: Chapter 27: The Adventure Begins
The ambiance in riding camp is wonderfully pictured. Great Job !
One tiny remark : "Okay" is an americanism which appeared during 19th century. Though the origin is unclear (many urban legends around it : OK for "0 Killed" during secession war, than WW1, or greeck Ola Kalla= All good,...), it pulls me out of the lands and time of middle-earth.
Author's Response: Sorry that I haven't gotten back to you for several days. I've just returned from the hospital and probably won't be doing any writing for a while. Thank you for your review and continuing support.
Date: September 25, 2016 Title: Chapter 33: Blood on the Grass
You allow a tenuous hope, that Wormwood's signing on the warrant, may lead the Queen's friends, to understand her peril, before she is assigned to the houses of healing. The suspense is great !
Author's Response: Do not forget about the forged document. It will disappear for a while, but will become material evidence later in the story.
Thanks again for your reviews.