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Title: ~ A Far, Fierce Sky ~ by Spiced Wine
Rated: Mature [Reviews - 377]
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Book II of of A Crucible Of Stars

Following on from events in A Light in the East, Legolas continues his journey south with Vanim
Category: Fiction
Characters: Glorfindel, Legolas, OFC, OMC, Sauron, Thranduil
Content: Action/Adventure, Angst, AU, BDSM, Drama, Dubcon, Erotica, Explicit Sex, Hurt/Comfort, Mpreg, Rape/Non-con, Slash
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Series: A Crucible Of Stars
Chapters: 51 | Completed: No | Word count: 255137 | Read count: 189615

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Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: October 29, 2014 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 ~ Upon A Dark Road ~

'Squeals!' You have no idea how excited I was when I saw the new chapter, I am obviously still reading and loving every word! One of the things I admire most about your fics is that I can see how much thought you put into them, for me, the longer and more complex a story gets the better. :)

There are so many things I want to say about your stories but the past month has been a bit rough for me and I'm having a hard time keeping my head above water, so when I do get a break I have a hard time organizing my thoughts. But I'm still here and I'll do my best to make time to review some of the things I've already read. (If I had made an account sooner I could have reviewed as I went :p)

I was relieved that Van was at least allowed to speak Legolas and his companions, they will all be needing some comfort in the near future. I liked reading from Imir's perspective in this chapter, he seems to have a good heart and I fear for what the future holds for him, all of them, now that they are immortal. And what is going to happen to Elvyr's soul!? It's too much to worry about! I don't want any of them hurt! :(
One last thing, I love how you write Sauron! I am sitting here wrestling with what to say because sometimes you make me hate him with a passion, and then I kind of like him, and then I don't know what to think anymore! There are whole pages of things I could say about him but I'll save that for a different review when I can spend more time on it and I'm not quite so tired.
(My mind wanders a bit when I'm sleepy.)

Thank you for another amazing chapter!!! :)

Author's Response: I am so sorry that you are having a rough time, PoppyMarie. {{{Hugs}}} Sending you good thoughts. Don't worry about trying to write a review when you're busy or tired, although I appreciate it very much, I would rather you use your spare time to rest and relax :)

I am glad you enjoy long stories; some people do, some don't. Obviously I do :D

Imir and the others - well, they're going to change, that is unavoidable. I honestly don't know what will happen to them with all that they will see and do. (I may even write them in to Magnificat at some point). As Sauron said the Mouth was already 'rotten' - he was a N



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: February 22, 2015 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 ~ Like Fire And Falling Leaves ~

Wow, I haven't been on in forever, I've missed two updates and I feel terrible because each time I review I say that I'll do it more often but then I don't. Part of it is that I do everything from my iPad and it's hard to type long review by tapping the screen a thousand time, but now I have a wireless key board so it won't take nearly as long to write each one.

It was so sad reading Bainalph like this, him being such a wild and passionate character now so empty, it's just tragic! I hope the Ithiledhil can help him, even Glorfindel, one of the most desirable and charismatic elves to ever draw breath can no longer affect him! I am also greatly looking forward to reading about his meeting with the Ithiledhil.
As for Thranduil, both here and in Magnificat III, I have some conflicting emotions. He is a character that I love but at times he can be so cruel towards Bainalph, and then he's sorry and then he's acting indifferent. I can understand more in this situation because he is so worried for his son, and he has good reason to be, I mean anyone would worry for their child if they were abducted by Sauron.

Oh Maglor's grief here is palpable, the depth of loneliness that he has felt is unimaginable. Even now that he has Tind



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: March 17, 2015 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 ~ Against The Dying Of The Light ~

I tried to post a review here and only part of it showed up, I keep trying and it won't let me post the whole thing, it just does the first few sentences. :( What should I do?

Author's Response: I wondered what was happening, PoppyMarie! I thought it was a glitch, so I am glad it's not.

Are you using HTML coding for line breaks in your reviews, or the Rich Text, (under your Edit Preferences on Account Info the 'Use tinyMCE WYSWYG editor' is Rich Text) because I use HTML when writing, and add the line break code manually. If I leave something out of the code by making a typo it won't take the rest of the text. (It took me ages to work that out) That's the only reason I can think of.



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: March 18, 2015 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 ~ Against The Dying Of The Light ~

I hope it works this time...


Oh my gosh! This chapter! Wow!


I loved this chapter I think it might be one of my favorites, it was just perfect. 

First, you gave us more Maglor <3 I really like his meeting with Fanari, she is an amazing character and I love reading her. There is so much emotion here, in how she reacts to seeing him and this whole piece of the chapter. I love the idea of Maglor being able to sing with power and I can't wait to read about it!


As I've said many times before I always find Mairon to be fascinating and this is no exception, just getting a peek into how he views other people is very interesting. Everything seems to be a project to him, Vanimòrë, Legolas, Imir and the others, they are all works in progress and he has plans for all of them. Even though I've come to expect it from him its scary how he can view other lives in such a detached way.

And then his thoughts turn to Celebrimbor... I never thought about it until I read your stories but it make perfect sense that they would be drawn too one another, given their interests and the fact that they both had a lot of charisma, Celebrimbor being a Fëanorion and Mairon being Ainur. 

I like the thought that he caused Mairon some regret about how things played out, it like a crack in the cold indifference that he usually wears. I hope to read more of their relationship in the future.


I love how you describe the Ithiledhil they are beautiful and heartbreaking, especially Edenel. 

I also like to see Glorfindel having to unbend his pride, its obviously not something he is used to and I think it will do him good.

I'm so glad there is hope for Bainalph, and I can't wait to read about the Earth Rites. 


This was an awesome chapter and it inspired me to go and push through the writers block I've had for a while now! Thank you!



Author's Response: First of all, I am so pleased that this helped with your writers block :) That's wonderful!

First, you gave us more Maglor <3 I really like his meeting with Fanari, she is an amazing character and I love reading her. There is so much emotion here, in how she reacts to seeing him and this whole piece of the chapter. I love the idea of Maglor being able to sing with power and I can't wait to read about it!

Fanari's okay - she's quite a 'together' person and a good mother :) And if you want to realy read Maglor singing with Power, I was inspired by Encairion



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: June 06, 2016 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37 ~ Being And Unbeing ~

This review will be short as I am away from home and feeling under the weather, but I will try to come back and say more at another time. This chapter was full of very heavy imagery, I particularly liked seeing Mairon's power, which is terrifying, and then Malkor's power which is incomprehensible. It was a very good way to show how vast Melkor is, and I think now I can understand why Mairon followed him in the beinging. I also can't wait to see what happens to what happens when Maglor, and the rest of the get to Tashon Narr. 

Thank you for your marvelous writing!!! 



Author's Response: Bless you for taking time to comment, when you're not well. I hope you feel better very soon! {{{Hugs}}}

Because I am going to have to write more of Melkor/Morgoth and Mairon/Sauron in Magnificat IV, I am trying to get to grips with them in the writing I'm doing now, so I am very glad that their individual powers came across well in this.

Thank you, and take care of yourself!



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: November 28, 2016 Title: Chapter 44: Chapter 44 ~ Fire To Burn Clean ~

It seems everyone is relieved that Van is alive, Maglor, Legolas, Sauron, ME! That was an epic battle, though I am glad it's over, the slaves are horrifying to picture. I loved Maglor's response to seeing Vanimórë after the battle, the tension just keeps on building there, I can't wait to see when everything is revealed how that all goes down.

I really get a sense of how deeply connected Van and Sauron are here, the kind of power that Sauron can call upon with Vanimórë to draw from is incredible and frightening. It is almost funny how Sauron seems semi dependent on Vanimórë, as a way to return to Middle Earth after being destroyed, and as a power source to draw from, at the same time, Vanimórë doesn't need Sauron's power to rule and command. All I can say is, the world is super lucky that Vanimórë didn't side with his father in the beginning, I doubt anything could have stood in their way. 

This was another fantastic chapter, that last image of Sauron standing before the burning city was so vivid! Thank you so much for writing!!! 



Author's Response: It seems everyone is relieved that Van is alive, Maglor, Legolas, Sauron, ME! That was an epic battle, though I am glad it's over, the slaves are horrifying to picture. I loved Maglor's response to seeing Vanimórë after the battle, the tension just keeps on building there, I can't wait to see when everything is revealed how that all goes down.

I think we're all glad it's over! Yes, what are we going to do about that tension when Maglor cannot reveal who he is?

I really get a sense of how deeply connected Van and Sauron are here, the kind of power that Sauron can call upon with Vanimórë to draw from is incredible and frightening. It is almost funny how Sauron seems semi dependent on Vanimórë, as a way to return to Middle Earth after being destroyed, and as a power source to draw from, at the same time, Vanimórë doesn't need Sauron's power to rule and command. All I can say is, the world is super lucky that Vanimórë didn't side with his father in the beginning, I doubt anything could have stood in their way.

I think that was one of the reasons Sauron wanted a son, but he wanted more than a son: he wanted not an ally exactly, but some-one he could depend on, and some-one incredibly strong – some-one who could help him (ultimately) stand against Melkor. The way he treated Van all through his life was to make him into a weapon; there was no real malice behind him, which perhaps makes it worse.
But Van is the same lineage here as he is in Magnificat; he has that fire of the Fëanorions within him, and a power that he does not channel. He turns away from all forms of 'power' and relies on his own earned skills. His mental blocks are so strong that even Sauron just can't 'tap' into him. Van either has to be passive or amenable; if he's not he will fight and there will be an impasse. Sauron couldn't use him at the siege of Barad-dûr because Van was a) not close to him and b) fighting with the Alliance at the end. Van is a great deal stronger and has much more power in him than he thinks, but Sauron knows it's there and will use it – when he can

  This was another fantastic chapter, that last image of Sauron standing before the burning city was so vivid! Thank you so much for writing!!! 

Oh thank you, Poppy Marie! Thank you very much. I am so glad you enjoyed it :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: August 14, 2016 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38 ~ Blood And Power ~

I didn't expect another update so soon! I was so thrilled to see one! 

 

This was a sublime chapter, I liked that we get to read the events from the last chapter in Maglor's perspective, his grief and pain at seeing his family again were killer. Tindomion seeing Gil-galad, the pain that it would be to have those scars ripped open again. At the same time it has to renew their hope, that somehow, no matter how difficult, there is a way to reach them. I also think that the way he was concerned for Van is very interesting, it seems even while hating him, Maglor is quick to jump to his defense. Their dynamic is always full of tension, I love it. 

 

I really enjoy reading about Sauron/Mairon, I love characters with his sort of dangerous intelligence and charm, there is something about them that fascinates me. I love the descriptions you give of him, comparisons to fire and steel, he is incredibly beautiful, and extremely dangerous. I think the way you write him always keeps me guessing, we have his cruelty, his power, and in Celebrimbor's case, a glimpse of something resembling emotion. I like that we never really know what he is thinking or feeling, I like getting really deep within a characters thoughts, and maybe that is why I'm so drawn to him, because even when we read from his perspective, we never quite figure it out. I kind of love to keep wondering. I'll stop rambling on now, but I just can't help it sometimes, you have done a superb job building Sauron up as a character. 

 

And last but not least, Van is just doing what he always does, caring for people. Comforting Kan-dai, standing guard, and the last sentence! telling Maglor that his blood can open the way to the void, and essentially that he would do it again for them, I wonder how Maglor will react, or what his thoughts will be there. 

 

Thank you, thank you, thank you! this was another amazing chapter!



Author's Response: At the same time it has to renew their hope, that somehow, no matter how difficult, there is a way to reach them. I also think that the way he was concerned for Van is very interesting, it seems even while hating him, Maglor is quick to jump to his defense. Their dynamic is always full of tension, I love it.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I tried to be quicker with this chapter as before we had the site down and I was on holiday so it took ages.

I think the feeling must be compounded of hope and terrible grief. So close, so far away - and yet there *is* some hope.

Maglor's feelings for Vanimórë are always going to be extremely complicated, but Maglor does realise how much pain Vanimórë goes through because he can feel it, and I think that makes him furious.

I really enjoy reading about Sauron/Mairon, I love characters with his sort of dangerous intelligence and charm, there is something about them that fascinates me. I love the descriptions you give of him, comparisons to fire and steel, he is incredibly beautiful, and extremely dangerous. I think the way you write him always keeps me guessing, we have his cruelty, his power, and in Celebrimbor's case, a glimpse of something resembling emotion. I like that we never really know what he is thinking or feeling, I like getting really deep within a characters thoughts, and maybe that is why I'm so drawn to him, because even when we read from his perspective, we never quite figure it out. I kind of love to keep wondering. I'll stop rambling on now, but I just can't help it sometimes, you have done a superb job building Sauron up as a character.

It's very interesting writing Sauron, because we're not supposed to see deeply into his thoughts - or not yet, anyhow. He will be in Magnificat IV, so it's good for me to explore him in this. But he's...alien really, unhuman, and any humanity he has has kind of been picked up along the way as he wears a human form and lives on Middle-earth. Yes, he's extremely clever, and beautiful and dangerous and anything he does that seems sympathetic is only for his own ends, not through genuine sympathy. He's also empathetic but unlike an empath, does not care. He would feel and understand what some-one thought, but it would never influence him. I'm glad you like reading about him.
And he's the main reason Van will always care for people, and try to help them, because he does not want to become his father - and yet he *is* quite like him. He can be completely ruthless and as ice-cold. He will go into Mordor and slaughter the orcs with no remorse at all.

We'll see in the next chapter what Maglor will say about Van's last words.

Thank you again for reviewing :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: August 16, 2016 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38 ~ Blood And Power ~

I was just rereading again, and I found more to say! I hope you don't mind...

 

I was hit with the feelings of grief again reading about Maglor, the sense of emptiness and wrongness that comes from being separate from his father and brothers is really impactful. The way you write the house of Fëanor, with such fierce love and loyalty to one another, it seems just wrong when they are  broken apart. Even when they were all alive and living in different parts of the world, they were still together in mind and spirit, but now they are just gone, and it's awful, and it makes me even more happy you fixed that in Magnificat. I also felt for Maglor as he probably feels as though he's grasping at straws, when he is wondering if there is a way to save them, even contemplating asking Sauron for help. But I can't imagine that he will ever let it go now that he knows that there is even the smallest chance to reach them, his Fëanorian determination will find a way, and with Vanimórë's offer, there are new possibilities. I'm excited to see what happens!

 

I really do see the alien side of Sauron like you said, and I find it quite interesting that he so different from the other Maiar, namely Coldagnir, in the way he thinks.We see emotions from Sauron like anger, possessiveness, lust, and ambition, but something entirely different from Coldagnir. Now I have to wonder is Sauron is like the Maia equivalent of a sociopath, having no regrets or morals except when it's useful. The only thing that comes close to regret for him is Celebrimbor's death, but beyond their relationship, I see very little "human" in him. 

 

I know this probably sounds like crazy rambling now, but your characters have a lot of interesting facets to examine. I am a psychology major with a focus in abnormal behavior and psychological disorders, so psychoanalyzing characters is a habit while reading, and all of your characters are quite fun to get inside the minds of.  

 

Thank you again for creating something so intricate and fascinating! 

 



Author's Response: I was hit with the feelings of grief again reading about Maglor, the sense of emptiness and wrongness that comes from being separate from his father and brothers is really impactful. The way you write the house of Fëanor, with such fierce love and loyalty to one another, it seems just wrong when they are broken apart. Even when they were all alive and living in different parts of the world, they were still together in mind and spirit, but now they are just gone, and it's awful, and it makes me even more happy you fixed that in Magnificat. I also felt for Maglor as he probably feels as though he's grasping at straws, when he is wondering if there is a way to save them, even contemplating asking Sauron for help. But I can't imagine that he will ever let it go now that he knows that there is even the smallest chance to reach them, his Fëanorian determination will find a way, and with Vanimórë's offer, there are new possibilities. I'm excited to see what happens!

I really do see the alien side of Sauron like you said, and I find it quite interesting that he so different from the other Maiar, namely Coldagnir, in the way he thinks.We see emotions from Sauron like anger, possessiveness, lust, and ambition, but something entirely different from Coldagnir. Now I have to wonder is Sauron is like the Maia equivalent of a sociopath, having no regrets or morals except when it's useful. The only thing that comes close to regret for him is Celebrimbor's death, but beyond their relationship, I see very little "human" in him.

Coldagnir's 'vision' was one of love. He was fascinated by the world and wanted to help Men and Elves (and live there) We don't know what Sauron's was (yet) only that he chose to follow Melkor, but it's obvious he had a mind-set very much different to COldagnir's even at the beginning. It's that which I'll explore more in Magnificat IV.

your characters have a lot of interesting facets to examine. I am a psychology major with a focus in abnormal behavior and psychological disorders, so psychoanalyzing characters is a habit while reading, and all of your characters are quite fun to get inside the minds of.

Oh, wow! I'm glad you find the characters so interesting to analyze :) And please don't apologise - I am always grateful for a nice review :) Thank you!

I wanted to write the rebirth of the Noldor for about 25 years before I began Dark Prince, because I was so furious at their fate in the Silmarillion. Whatever happens in this story, whether it melts into the main Dark Prince 'verse or not, they'll definitely come back.

I've always felt that the love between the Fëanorions was so profound, so fierce, that from the moment of Fëanor's death it damaged his sons beyond repair, and then they had to see their brothers die until Maglor alone was left. I cannot imagine his utter aloneness and grief.



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: January 10, 2016 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 ~ Windows Of The Mind ~

 

There is so much going on in this chapter, a ton to take in!

Oh Maglor and Van, it's really heartbreaking because Maglor doesn't want to hate him, he really did grow to like Vanimöré and now he can't help but feel the way he does in face of the truth. And Vanimöré is trying to act as if this isn't affecting him, as though he doesn't care if Maglor hates him or not, as always he is selfless, and tells Maglor to forget him. I'm proud of Maglor for at least speaking about it to someone, I think he needed to share the weight. Of course the only person he would open up to at this point would be Tindómion, who does a perfect job of just being there for his father. This first part is full of so many extremes of emotion, I can't wait to get more!

Mairon's POV on Melkor is a wonderful treat, I just love Mairon's POV in everything, but here we get to see a bit of the other side of Melkor. I've always wondered why he was so intriguing to Mairon if their natures were so different, but as I hear a little more of him before his fall, I can get a better sense of the kind of charisma he held. I can't wait to learn more on that topic! Legolas is becoming so much colder and more withdrawn, I can see the beginning of walls being built around his mind, he is trying not to look for strength from anyone but himself, and it makes me proud and very sad for him... :(

Elvyr, the poor thing, he can't seem to find rest anywhere. With everything else that is going on, he almost slipped my mind, but now I am concerned for him on top of everyone else. I can't really see where you are going with this part of the story (or the story as a whole to be completely honest) but I love that! Not knowing or being able to predict where you're going to take things makes it super exciting! 



Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, Poppy Marie:

Oh Maglor and Van, it's really heartbreaking because Maglor doesn't want to hate him, he really did grow to like Vanim



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: January 14, 2016 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 ~ Hope Is Too Bitter ~

So Malantur is just horrifying, way more disturbing than the movie version. He is one of the only antagonists in your writing that I find myself thinking, yep, totally evil, nothing redeeming at all. There are not many characters in any works that disturb me, but for some reason he does. His sick mind is so present in your description of him, I think that I would be much like Legolas in the fact that I would turn to Mairon, who is seemingly the only source of safety. I can see that over time Legolas is going to have some regard for Mairon in some way, he really can charm people when it suits him, and Legolas does not have the personal hatred for Mairon like Maglor or Van would. I truly wish that Malantur will have to face Vanimöré alone at some point, but unfortunately I don't think that will be the case, I dread what will happen to him when he arrives.

 

I know he did it only because he saw that Kan-dai would be useful, but I'm grateful that Mairon took him away from Malantur. Even though he is still technically a slave, anything is better than The Mouth.

 

I feel like Maglor and Tindómion are so close to so many secrets, the answers are just out of reach and they can feel it. I love how they can't help but feel the connection to Edenel, and the next chapter where they meet it put me on the edge of my seat. 

 

I hope it's ok with you that I'm reviewing older chapters, I know you've probably already written responses for other reviewers. I don't want to make you keep going back and doing the same thing, I just have to say how amazing they are! 




Author's Response: I think that I would be much like Legolas in the fact that I would turn to Mairon, who is seemingly the only source of safety. I can see that over time Legolas is going to have some regard for Mairon in some way, he really can charm people when it suits him, and Legolas does not have the personal hatred for Mairon like Maglor or Van would. I truly wish that Malantur will have to face Vanim



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: January 16, 2016 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 ~ Changed And Unchanging ~

Edenel backstory! I feel like its much more impactful to hear what happened from his thoughts directly, his remembrance of life before Utumno, and his feelings for Finwe hit me right in the heart. I want Maglor and Tindomion to recognize him, he feels as though they would reject him for what he is now but that would never be the case. I wonder if the Earth Rites will unveil anything?

 

I love/hate seeing Sauron and Vanimöré interact, I love it because it's so brilliantly done, but hate how powerless Van is. I really loved when Sauron was in Osulf's form and their interactions then, if it were a different world, and they didn't have the history they did, I think they would be very drawn to one another. But as it is there is no hope for any sort of positive relationship between them. I noticed in this part that you used Sauron instead of Mairon, is that because it is from Vanimöré's point of view? Sort of a reflection of how Vanimöré sees his father in a negative light? 

 

I'm a bit scared for Legolas and how he will come to see Mairon, who clearly wants Legolas to look to him with some kind of twisted affection, my worry is how far will that go? Will Legolas find himself in a place where the only person he feels he can rely on is Mairon? I can see whats coming for Van and I feel for him, he knows how unpleasant his time in Tashonn Nar will be but still tries to put it from his mind, I don't want to see Legolas's view of him changed, but I know that it will be different.

 

I truly like Celírel, and I hope we see more of him in the future! You have such interesting characters, and I find myself wanting to know more about all of them! 



Author's Response: Edenel backstory! I feel like its much more impactful to hear what happened from his thoughts directly, his remembrance of life before Utumno, and his feelings for Finwe hit me right in the heart. I want Maglor and Tindomion to recognize him, he feels as though they would reject him for what he is now but that would never be the case. I wonder if the Earth Rites will unveil anything?

Poor Edenel. Although he's been through the fire and come out of it. Of course his kin wouldn't ever reject him, but he feels he was so changed that he can't even call them 'kin' any-more.

I love/hate seeing Sauron and Vanim



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: March 15, 2016 Title: Chapter 34: Chapter 34 ~ Blood Cuts Blood ~

Another update!!!! This is so good! I love it! I've wanted to review before this but I made myself finish all of my projects first, but at last they're done! 

Once again I'm hit with Edenel feels, I can't wait to see what happens when he is close to them on the road, how long will it take for their blood to recognize each other? I was kind of hoping we would get to see the earth rites, but I'm sure whatever you have planned is just as good. This mission just seems so crazy and impossible, I can't believe it will work, but with Maglor's song of power and Edenel's sort of deflecting technique that Sauron himself taught him? Maybe? I want to believe it will work anyway. I was so happy that Bainalph went after them, for a moment I was afraid he would just be left with no one, but maybe he will find what he needs to recover somewhere along the journey? I guess I'll just have to find out. :)

Can't wait to see what happens from here! 



Author's Response: Congratulations on finishing your projects :) That must be a big relief!

Edenel feels :) Thank you. I love that you have feels for him. I think he is currently exerting himself not to be recognised and although he does have that power, he's also helped by the fact that the others thoughts are fixed in a different direction. So, we'll see what happens with that - it might depend on many things.

I was originally going to write the Earth Rites, but then this happened, it was like Edenel just took over my keyboard. It is *such* a crazy mission yes, although no different to others that happened in the Silm and LOTR, and that's why Edenel had to involve himself. I think he's quite prepared to sacrifice himself even to Sauron if it all goes pear-shaped.

Edenel obviously didn't include Bainalph because he cares for him, and it is such a mad 'mission-quest-thing' that I don't think he sees himself coming back and would never ask any-one else to join him (Glorfindel is a different matter, but Bainalph is a friend), but I think Bainalph's proved himself, and will do again. And he would think that to be doing this is better than doing nothing at all and feeling helpless.

Thank you so much, Poppy Marie :) I appropriate your taking the time to review :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: March 19, 2017 Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51 ~ Desert's Heart ~

I was so excited by this update, but how could you leave us with such a cliffhanger!?! 

It was interesting to hear what Glorfidel thinks of Legolas now, he seems a bit conflicted, and surprised by how Legolas acts, I can't wait for them to have another confrontation. I have spent much of this story with a lot of animosity towards Glorfidel, but that little bit where he remembered Ecthelion reminded me of the person he used to be, and just how far he has fallen from that. I do feel like he is realizing this as well, which I hope will help him in some way. 

I kind of love how impressed everyone is with Sud Sicanna, the descriptions are marvelous, something about the desert oasis city concept has always I've liked. 

Dana has really gone off the deep end here, what is she thinking? Does she have any idea what she is dealing with? Each time she makes an appearance she gets more infuriating, I can't wait to see her get taken down a few pegs. I am worried about what her plans could be for Gíl though, but I doubt she will get anywhere near him. 

Beautiful chapter, thank you very mcuh! 



Author's Response: Thank you so much, Poppy. Yes, re: Glorfindel - he was very different once and wants in his heart to return to that person. I don't think he will ever love anyone as he did Ecthelion. ;__;

Sud Sicanna is huge and ancient and a trade hub, not what some of them were expecting :)

I believe Dana wants to attract Melkor's presence, since she undoubtedly knows what happened in Tashon Narr when Sauron got too close. Now Melkor is aware -- it's like being on the other side of a wall from a monster who knows you are there but can't get to you -- nevertheless it's unnerving, and maybe she thinks Sauron won't come to a place where Melkor is 'close'. Thank you so much for reviewing :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: October 28, 2016 Title: Chapter 41: Chapter 41 ~ Night of Fire ~

I meant to review early this week but projects got in the way :/

 

This chapter had a lot of powerful imagery, Vanimórë's dance, and the way Sauron moves and acts, silk and fire. Maglor and Tindomion though, they stole the show here, Maglor finally see just how Fëanorian his son is! This was brilliant and powerful, whenever you write about the Fëanorians control breaking, the emotion and raw power behind it is so clear, I love it! 

 

I feel tense, like they are just barely keeping the facade up, at any moment they could be discovered. It certainly makes each moment more thrilling, but the situation seems almost hopeless, wherever Legolas is, Sauron is not far off. Hopefully the war with the orcs will provide a big enough problem that he will be sufficiently distracted. 

 

I hope that Glorfindel is now feeling the remorse for what he has caused, not just the desire for his son, but regret for putting Legolas in this situation, and everything he did to him. I've always liked Glorfindel as a character, though in this verse' you've done a fantastic job of making me furious with him. I do still hope he can grow and change, recognize what he did was wrong, and maybe try for some kind of redemption. I feel like he is slowly changing, but he has a long way to go.

 

I was also thinking of what you said in a response to my review for the least chapter, about how Sauron would love to have the Fëanorians serving him, and that all the worlds would be open to him if such a thing were possible,(which of course it isn't) As I was reading this chapter I have to agree though, with the awe and worship Sauron garners, and the same being true of the Fëanorians, they would be an unstoppable force, and with all those brilliant minds put together, nothing would be out of reach. But the Fëanorians obviously would never be controlled, and Sauron has their blood on his hands now, so I don't think the Fëanorians will stop until they've had their revenge. I also wondered, will we see more of Celebrimbor in either this story or Magnificat? He has been mentioned quite a bit in this story, and show up briefly in Magnificat, but will he show up again? 

 

Sorry if I ask to many questions, but I honestly love these stories, and I appreciate that you take the time to respond to all of the comments, thanks for another great chapter!!!!! :)



Author's Response: his was brilliant and powerful, whenever you write about the Fëanorians control breaking, the emotion and raw power behind it is so clear, I love it! 

Oooh, thank you! I feel that so very clearly with them – all that fire is just shut behind a very thin wall, and when the wall breaks...

Hopefully the war with the orcs will provide a big enough problem that he will be sufficiently distracted. 

I hope so, too, but it's going to be very close, very dangerous.

I hope that Glorfindel is now feeling the remorse for what he has caused, not just the desire for his son, but regret for putting Legolas in this situation, and everything he did to him. I've always liked Glorfindel as a character, though in this verse' you've done a fantastic job of making me furious with him. I do still hope he can grow and change, recognize what he did was wrong, and maybe try for some kind of redemption. I feel like he is slowly changing, but he has a long way to go.

I think he is feeling remorse and is changing, but there's very little he can do in recompense at the moment except try to rescue Legolas and Gìl. But he's had a long time to think about this now, and I do feel that he has come to hate what he did.

As I was reading this chapter I have to agree though, with the awe and worship Sauron garners, and the same being true of the Fëanorians, they would be an unstoppable force, and with all those brilliant minds put together, nothing would be out of reach. But the Fëanorians obviously would never be controlled, and Sauron has their blood on his hands now, so I don't think the Fëanorians will stop until they've had their revenge. I also wondered, will we see more of Celebrimbor in either this story or Magnificat? He has been mentioned quite a bit in this story, and show up briefly in Magnificat, but will he show up again? 

Yes, they all have great minds, but there is no way they would ever work with Sauron unless they were enslaved as Legolas' brother is. I think Sauron is thinking about that rather than their being rembodied. As for Celebrimbor, well it is approx 500 Third Age, so he is in the Everlasting Dark with the others at the moment, having died long ago. I've never really written his story, only alluded to it – I might, but it would be a flashback or gapfiller probably.

You're welcome to ask questions, Poppy Marie :) I will always answer them if I can, although sometimes I don't know what is going to happen :) Thank you so much for your review and I hope you have a lovely weekend :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: April 04, 2016 Title: Chapter 35: Chapter 35 ~ Spells Of Darkness, Spells Of Gold ~

This was such a good chapter!!!

I love Celírel and his beautiful, stupid bravery, I'm a bit afraid of where that will land him, but I can respect his desire to make something of himself. I think that maybe from an outsiders view, what he is doing is just incredibly dangerous, his ideas of wanting to achieve something heroic and amount to something in his father's eyes is unrealistic at best. But the fact that he is trying anyway, and in the most dangerous way possible, is a testament to how deeply this need runs, and what an obstacle it is for him to move past. I enjoy his perspective on Vanimórë, it's interesting to see a human view of him, his personality and charisma, it's a different feel than we usually get. 

 

Its painful to read the section in Bainalph's pov, from what his character was to what it is now, the difference is saddening. I gave it a lot of thought, and this is one of the most horrifying things to befall one of your characters, imagining something that meant so much to you bringing no emotion at all is truly frightening. That was the vibe I got from Bainalph in this chapter, the earth rites, where he used to feel all of the passion and joy and pain and pleasure, now just leave him empty. He wanted to get away and probably hates that, but now the apathy seems to be creeping in and he doesn't care that he doesn't want to be a part of the earth rites. I hurt for his plight, and I can't wait to see how you intend to resolve this certain issue, I miss the feisty, passionate, flirtatious Bainalph. 

 

This was a great chapter, I know I'll see how it all unfolds eventually, and I will try and wait patiently until that point. Thank you so much for another fabulous chapter! :)



Author's Response: Thank you, Poppy Marie. I also miss the old Bainalph, but he *must* return to that. And I entirely agree with you about Cel



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: April 30, 2016 Title: Chapter 36: Chapter 36 ~ In The Dark, My Mind Is Broken ~

This was about as dark and hopeless as I was imagining it was going to be for Vanimórë, but there were a few spots of hope. Little Gìl is so precious, and how he acted towards Van was a beautiful, shining moment in this chapter. He seems almost to old for his age when he speaks, like he knows more than he understands, but I loved the way he looked to Vanimórë as a kind of second father, it lifted my heart a bit. And to see Legolas take a little comfort in having Van there, I love the two of them together. 

And every time I see Vanimórë and Sauron interact, it's just a storms of emotion and tension, I'm always left with a lot to process. Sauron has a particular kind of cruelty where you can never really pin down what he will do from moment to moment, he can give Vanimórë pain or pleasure almost on a whim, but he also calculates everything. Their interactions are confusing because has no problem causing Vanimórë every kind of hurt imaginable, but as we've seen he doesn't want anyone else to have that power, except if he allows it. And Vanimórë always goes out of his way to show his hatred, but the true opposite of love would be more along the lines of indifference. And his hate seems to come to close to other emotions for his comfort sometimes. It really is an incredible dynamic you've built between the two characters, and I think that Van touched on how it's anything but healthy. 

And last I really hope Vanimórë kills Malantur at some point, he is just so replent, so sick. Your descriptions of him as something rotten are truly shudder-worthy. 

Thank you for another great chapter, it's approaching one fifteen in the morning right now, but this was totally worth staying up to read and review! I'm alway thrilled to see another chapter! 



Author's Response: Little G



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: September 13, 2016 Title: Chapter 39: Chapter 39 ~ Power Like Fire, Power Like Death ~

Wow, I don't check the site for a few days and surprise! An update! 

 

This was a difficult chapter to read as it is very painful for Van. I think in the other stories we know what happened to him, we get glimpses of his slavery, but usually it's flashbacks, here it's present and personal. I love that he still takes pride in his soldiers training though, and that they look up to him as a role model. The Mouth is just more and more repulsive with every chapter, I really cannot wait until someone kills him, and like Van said, I hope it's a very bad death. That scene between him and Vanimórë was awful, reading this I remember how Van said that Sauron's possessions felt more "clean" than the Mouth, he seems to ooze rottenness with every action. One thing that stood out was even in his usage, Vanimórë doesn't seem diminished, he still holds his regal demeanor, and none of his power or beauty is lost. even though it has to be tearing him up inside, he won't let it show for a second, so heartbreakingly strong.

 

I really hate that I enjoy Sauron as a character especially after reading this chapter, he is so cruel and purely unfeeling here. He cares nothing for what he does to Van, and yet feels it's his right to be possessive towards him. I am eternally confused by his motives as I have said before, and will probably remain so for a while, as I'm sure it will be revealed later. But I am interested in the idea you mentioned about different Maiar having "visions" about their place in the grand scheme of things, particularly for the Magnificat verse. 

 

Thought his chapter was rough, I'm still super happy about the hope for the rest of the Fëanorians, though it seems it may be a long road to get there. At least there is a glimpse of hope ahead. And that one little moment with Gíl, when he gave Vanimórë a hug and kiss, that was so sweet an beautiful, thank you for that. :')

 

As always, you made my day! Thank you!!! {{{Hugs}}}




Author's Response: That scene between him and Vanimórë was awful, reading this I remember how Van said that Sauron's possessions felt more "clean" than the Mouth, he seems to ooze rottenness with every action. One thing that stood out was even in his usage, Vanimórë doesn't seem diminished, he still holds his regal demeanor, and none of his power or beauty is lost. even though it has to be tearing him up inside, he won't let it show for a second, so heartbreakingly strong.

Van can't afford to break, and he vowed he would not, so long ago I am not sure it even means anything to him any more, it is just the way he is. At any rate, he would not let the Mouth break him, whom he considers complete filth. But it was very hard to write.

I really hate that I enjoy Sauron as a character especially after reading this chapter, he is so cruel and purely unfeeling here. He cares nothing for what he does to Van, and yet feels it's his right to be possessive towards him. I am eternally confused by his motives as I have said before, and will probably remain so for a while, as I'm sure it will be revealed later. But I am interested in the idea you mentioned about different Maiar having "visions" about their place in the grand scheme of things, particularly for the Magnificat verse.

I think Sauron still has the same motives towards Van in this story. He's still 'forging' him, making him into an unbreakable weapon - against Melkor - but he's not nearly finished yet, and their encounter with Melkor and the void has probably made him think quite a lot.

Thought his chapter was rough, I'm still super happy about the hope for the rest of the Fëanorians, though it seems it may be a long road to get there. At least there is a glimpse of hope ahead. And that one little moment with Gíl, when he gave Vanimórë a hug and kiss, that was so sweet an beautiful, thank you for that. :')

Yes, there is hope, but the price will be heavy, and cannot happen for a while yet! And little Gîl is such a poppet. He knows more than anyone guesses.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Poppy Marie I am glad you (sort-of) enjoyed the update :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: October 14, 2016 Title: Chapter 40: Chapter 40 ~ A Confluence Of Deception ~

now Vanimórë knows about Finwe's twin. And now I'm a little nervous about Sauron's thoughts straying in that direction, will he sense something different if he ever sees Edenel or the others? will he realize who they are if he senses something familiar? I guess I'll just have to find out, but now I'm nervous that he'll catch on to their plan.

I think Sauron was more giving Vanimórë a background that underscores his slavery than thinking deeply about the Ithiledhil; it's been a very long time, after all. Of course, he does probably think about them at times, but he has Vanimórë (who's more useful to him because he can't ignore Sauron's commands due to their blood-link) but of course if he were on the look-out for them, he would no doubt sense them. He's not though. He's powerful, but not omniscient, even Morgoth wasn't (or he wouldn't have had to tie Húrin to a seat for years when Húrin wouldn't tell him where Gondolin was – he would just have 'seen' it) Of course, Maglor and the others wouldn't want to risk a face-to-face meeting with Sauron unless they were willing to be discovered, but Sauron had to duel with Finrod to uncover who he was, he didn't just 'know'. So, he has limitations, which is what Maglor and the others are counting on, although Sauron at this time might be even stronger than he was back then having siphoned power from Vanimórë, but he's still not all-knowing.

I just love Maglor's emotion at the sight of Vanimórë, how it pulled him out of his horror at the sight of Sauron. All of the conflicting, visceral feelings, I cannot wait to them interact again, even if it can't be for a while realistically, it will be worth it. They are just to good together :)

Apart from his own family, who aren't here, ;__; if any-one could pull Maglor out of a whirl of horror, it's Van. I do want them to interact again, too, and of course they will, I am just not sure when, although they'll meet with Maglor disguised very shortly :) Yes, I like them too, despite everything, there is always going to be a bond between them.

It is interesting that even with Nakti's sight, she can't see through the disguise of Maglor or the others, she seems to be able to sense their intentions though, she also senses Sauron's blood in her son, I'm interested in her abilities, where do they come from and what is the extent of them?

I think these days, she would be referred to as a witch or shaman, even a priestess; she does have certain true gifts, but she wouldn't have the power to unweave an Eldar's veils. She can just see that although these men look rough, they mean her no harm. As it says, in Khand, such powers aren't seen as bad, probably more like a gift, and probably they run through the female line in her case, as Imir her son seems not to have inherited it. She uses scrying tools, but back in 'The Eastern Winds' although she sensed something was happening, i.e. Sauron's return, when she used her scrying mirror it shattered because she was trying to look on too powerful a force, so I imagine that her powers of sight and vision are quite extensive, but that she's fairly cautious about using them, now, except in day-to-day matters in her 'business'.

I also think it's interesting how everything seems to come back to the Fëanorians, even Melkor and Mairon, some of the most powerful beings to ever exist were both caught in an obsession with one of them. It seems that the course of the world revolves around them, their actions past and present shape the future, I love it and I love how everything comes back to them in the end, I really hope they all come back at the end of this story! What would Sauron do?

Everything does come back to them in my 'verse, lol. They are the axle-tree of fate itself, of the world. Sauron would...well obviously he would love to have the Fëanorions serving him; he's not Morgoth and would prefer to have them alive rather than dead (he regrets Celebrimor's death, not in a maudlin way, but because the loss of such brilliance was so wasteful, and Celebrimbor was one of the few who could match his mind). He thinks if that were possible, then all worlds across the universe would be open to him. He can't realistically see that happening, of course, not with Celebrimbor;s blood on his hands so to speak (Van killed him to spare his suffering, but it was Sauron who tortured him) but if there was a way, he would attempt it.

Thank you so much for commenting, Poppy Marie :) I am so happy you enjoyed the chapter.



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: November 10, 2016 Title: Chapter 42: Chapter 42 ~ Close To The Bone ~

This chapter was much needed after this weeks events, it helped me take my mind off the nightmare the election turned out to be. So thank you for posting at such a time.

 

I'm so happy for Bainalph, take that Mandos! Your curse is nothing compared to Fëanorians! And Glorfindel is finally realizing the scope of the damage he has caused, it must have been torture for him to be so close to Gíl and yet be powerless to do anything. He still has a long way to go, but at least he feels remorse now, where as before it was nonexistent. Part of me thinks he hasn't paid enough, but he does seem pretty torn up emotionally. I wonder how it will go when he and Legolas finally meet? How will both of them handle the encounter? Will Legolas ever be able to think of him as anything other than his rapist? I've read Esteliel's series that inspired this one, and it took forever for any kind of healthy feelings to build between the two of them, I wonder if your Legolas will ever reach a point where he can forgive Glorfindel. Obviously he can't ever fully forget what happened, and nothing can make it right, but will he ever reach a time where, like Fanari did with Maglor, he can move on from it? 

 

I continue to hurt for Vanimórë as always, this up close look at his life under Sauron adds a further degree of horror to his slavery. :( I was glad he convinced Sauron to let Legolas and Gil have some fun, that was a joy to read. I'm proud of Legolas for how he has grown, and happy he is exploring his sexuality without shame, in all the ways this has been horrible for him, it has brought about some good as well. And last but not least, Van is having vision-like dreams? I wonder if he will connect things? I can't wait to see what you have in store!

 

Great chapter, I really needed it after these past couple days. Thank you once again!!!! :D



Author's Response: Thank you so much, Poppy Marie. :) I'm glad I could take your mind of the situation a little bit.

Yes, Glorfindel is definitely now feeling acute remorse, and no he's not really begun to suffer yet, but sometimes emotional suffering can be as painful as physical. He was physically with his son, able to interact with him, but unable to be his 'father', or even begin to approach being it.

I think Legolas will eventually (like Fanari) be able to emotionally come to terms with his rape, but then Fanari had thousands of years; Legolas has had, like three? And he's not with Glorfindel, not his sex-slave, he's in an entirely different situation now, so it's not something he has to face day after day; he's learning to come into himself, learning *about* himself. Of course, you don't just forget rape, but the people he's around now on a daily basis, (and has been since he ran into Vanimórë) have taught him he's valued, he's worth something. Sauron sees him as a tool, but he's not hurting him, and some of his fears and self-doubts are being shored up.

It was good for him to get out. Vanimórë knows he needs some freedom, and it's very hard to think how this would be accomplished under Sauron, but Sauron's also not stupid and he's tending Legolas at the moment rather as one would a hothouse rose. He can be subtle when it suits him, and knows when not to break things.

Ah, well the dreams. It would be very dangerous for Van to connect anything at the moment. I'm sure Sauron dips in and out of his mind frequently. But if he just saw Vanimórë thinking of Maglor, that would not be too bad, as it would be quite normal. Anything more 'current' would be perilous!

Thank you so much for commenting, and take care :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: November 20, 2016 Title: Chapter 43: Chapter 43 ~ Horde ~

I meant to review sooner, but sadly work/school had other plans. That being said, wow this chapter was scary! I didn't think that much could be more frightening to battle than a horde of orcs, but the drugged slaves are terrifying. I'm nervous for everyone's safety, I really hope Sauron has everything under control. In a situation like this, there's really no one else that could stop them, so I guess I'll just have to see what his plan is. 

 

For a while I didn't see how Glorfindel and the others could even get close to Legolas in the first place, much less rescue him, but now the circumstances have worked in their favor. They are close enough, now what they need is the perfect opportunity, although I'm really nervous that with the upcoming battle, they could blow their cover. You've got me on the edge of my seat, but at least there is hope for them.

 

The way you write action scenes is quite thrilling, especially when it's Van fighting. He is magnificent, fierce, and oh so deadly. The battle chant to rally the troops is fantastic! It really shows the faith his troops have in him, and their pride and fearlessness. I was so sad for Seran though :( he was so faithful.

 

Great chapter, I can't wait to see what's next! Thanks a million :)



Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Poppy Marie, and I am sure Sauron does have a handle on this. He is a pretty cool customer, even if he didn't expect it. And for the time being Glorfindel and the others have managed to get close to Legolas and Gìl.

Van in battle is epic :) Well, he's been fighting since he was a teen practically. It would be something stunning to watch. His men love him, and that battle chant is probably hundreds of years old, since he's ruled Sud Sicanna for about 500 years now – he's lead them to war many times down the generations and they absolutely do trust him
Thank you so much for reviewing :) Have a wonderful week!



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: December 11, 2016 Title: Chapter 45: Chapter 45 ~ Power You Can Never Use ~

I so wanted to review this the day it was posted, but this past week was finals, so that never happend. :/ But now I'm all through with that, so here is a review a bit late. 

It was interesting to think about Sauron using Vanimórë's energy to create the fire, it didn't even occur to me until Maglor was reflecting on it, but who did the fire come from. Could that be the influence of Van's Fëanorian blood? Does Sauron even know he is Fëanorian in this story? This chapter also got me wondering how much little Gíl knows? He is supernaturally aware of things it seems, I'm interested to see where that leads, especially in his relationship with Glorfindel.

I can't believe Maglor risked speaking with Vanimórë so close, I know he could feel Sauron's mind was turned away, but what if Van suspected something? He is playing a dangerous game there, but I cannot wait until all this tension between them brakes, I just love the two of them! 

Great chapter! Sorry it took me so long to review, it's been a week from hell, but I'm back! Thank you for giving me something to brighten my day! :)



Author's Response: I'm so glad you get to have a rest now after your finals, Poppy Marie. Thank you so much for coming back to this and leaving a review :)

Van's heritage in this story (or any story) is exactly the same, so Sauron would know it, yes, and I have no doubt he is accessing that preternatural Fëanorion fire that Van knows nothing of. Anger, fire, loosing that has rarely done Van any good, when pitted against powers greater than he, so it's not ever really released; he holds it and it burns inside him. When allied to that Maia blood through Sauron, it makes him very powerful indeed, but he's always turned away from his Maia heritage and does not know his Noldor side, save that it is Noldo, so he does not know how to use it.

And as for little Gìl – he knows a great deal, and also knows to hide things. Well, he is a unique child in this story being Legolas', but what else that may nean we don't know yet...

Maglor was impulsive, yes. But I don't think he considered that Van might suspect anything, as he's hiding in such plain sight! (Of course, part of him wants Van to know him, but he does know that would be a disaster for all of them).



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: December 16, 2016 Title: Chapter 46: Chapter 46 ~ Through Clouded Glass We See ~

This was a really interesting chapter, I liked getting some Glorfindel POV, at last he is admitting what he did, and now he has to watch the consequences from a place where he can do nothing. I still feel like he hasn't really paid for his actions, but he can't ever really do that, and now he is going through forms of psychological pain, which can be just as bad, as we see with Van. :( As Glorfindel was watching Legolas, it got me thinking, what will happen to Legolas when he finds out? He is growing and changing so much, and I think at this point he would be able to handle it pretty well, even though he would probably be shocked, angry and scared. I was also thinking about how Glorfindel still desires Legolas, and his jealousy and wish that Legolas would look at him the same, but at this point in time, I don't see how that could ever be possible. Legolas is obviously still afraid of him on some level, and it would be nigh impossible to overcome those feelings and memories. However, both of them are connected to Gíl, and through him to each-other. Neither of them is willing to give up being close to Gíl either, which complicates matters even more. It's a very tangled and messy relationship, but I'm excited to see how you have it play out. 

 

I love Van dearly for his desire to help those around him, he is truly so good, and sees none of it. :( I liked that we got a little background for Enet, I was wondering where he came from when I read that chapter in Magnificat, (different universe I know, but I can imagine it went much the same). I'm saddened that even when Vanimórë feels something glorious like what he had with Maglor, it is tainted by the things Sauron has done to him. It made me wonder how many times those memories must have plagued him before, when he was intimate with others, it gives a sense on how deep his enslavement goes, he can never forget it, and he won't let anyone help. :( 

 

As each chapter goes by, I feel like Van is getting closer and closer to really seeing through Maglor's disguise. I want it to happen but I don't, I know it would spell doom for Legolas and the rest of them. I just hope that when all of this is over, Maglor finally gets the night Vanimórë promised him, the tension there is going to kill me!

 

Beautiful chapter, thank you!!! :)



Author's Response: Thank you so much, Poppy Marie :)

Yes, with Glorfindel and Legolas, well, it's difficult, not a simple solution there at all. I'd like for him to meet Glorfindel when he's on a much firmer footing, but we'll see what happens. I mean, Glorfindel remembers Legolas looking at him as if he was a sunrise in the forest, a Vala, and now all he is, is a very ordinary 'man', watching impotently. But you're right, neither of them will give up their son. It's a mess.

It made me wonder how many times those memories must have plagued him before, when he was intimate with others, it gives a sense on how deep his enslavement goes, he can never forget it, and he won't let anyone help.

A great deal of the time, they plague him, I am sure. Not even when he's in a sexual situation, either. :(

As I mentioned to Ebbingnight, this is a place of great power, and I am hoping that some-one (Maglor or one of the others) realises how dangerous it is, how 'thin' the veils here.



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: January 05, 2017 Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48 ~ The Uncovered Night ~

Legolas finally got to tell Glorfindel exactly what he deserved to hear! And Gíl greeting him in the black speech? That was probably a smack in the face! It's going to be a rocky road from here though, because they are both connected to Gíl and will probably be forced to confront one another again. I was glad to see Legolas so dismissive of Glorfindel, it's just what he deserves. I do hope that Bainalph will be able to help Legolas in some way, just having someone who understands his desires and knows how it feels might be good for him. 

There were so many interactions here, all brilliant, especially Maglor's greeting to Van! His refusal to leave him behind, and his almost protective thoughts when Glorfindel took a shot at Van, I love it! I can't wait to see what else will happen now that they will be traveling together. 

I'm excited to see how their plan unfolds, and what Sauron's reaction will be to Van's note! I was hysterically giggling as I thought about it! 

Great chapter, thank you so much! 




Author's Response: I think it did Legolas a great deal of good to be able to stand there and give Glorfindel that straight to his face, because it took a lot of guts. But he's proved he's got them and he can di it. That, after Gìl's Black Speech greeting, must have been a well-deserved shock for Glorfindel.

I think it will be a very good thing for Bainalph to talk to Legolas, and become friends with him as they journey. Not that this is a pleasure trip, but there will be opportunities, There were so many interactions here, all brilliant, especially Maglor's greeting to Van! His refusal to leave him behind, and his almost protective thoughts when Glorfindel took a shot at Van, I love it! I can't wait to see what else will happen now that they will be traveling together. 

Oh Thank you, I am so glad you enjoyed the interactions, and this one :) Maglor is terribly screwed up by Van, but he cannot help his protectiveness, knowing what he knows.

It wont make for a comfortable journey, but the Elves will have to go disguised at least, or else the whole plan will go down the toilet.

Lol, the note. That's so trite. Some-one leaving, and not wanting to talk to the person they're leaving so they leave a note. But Van cannot talk to Sauron anyhow, not about this, and thus...the note :)

Thank you so much for commenting, Poppy Marie :)



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: January 23, 2017 Title: Chapter 49: Chapter 49 ~ Outpacing The Shadow ~

This was a very vulnerable chapter for Vanimórë, I can think of maybe one or two times where he voluntarily let someone into his mind, but I can't think of anyone better than Maglor, despite what's between them. I think in this verse', Maglor may have an even better understanding of Vanimórë than in Magnificat, even though they have known eachother longer in those stories, here Maglor has truly seen from Vanimórë's point of view. There is obviously much he does not know about Van, but I hope that what he did see can help him stop resenting Vanimórë's actions as much as he has. There will always be some kind of tension between them, it's just built into their dynamic at this point, their relationship wouldn't be the same without it, but I hope they come to a slightly more stable place. 

There is a clear sense of foreboding here, Sauron's silence is actually more unnerving than any sort of reaction would be. Now they not only have him to worry about but Dana and her desire to have Gíl, I just despise her so much, and I can't wait to see her taken down at some point. 

It is also clear to me how little Vanimórë thinks of himself here, he has this great fear of the man Legolas will turn into under Sauron, but he himself has become a great man. Even though he does not see it in himself, Legolas sees it, the men in his army see it, Maglor has seen it, Glorfidel during the last alliance. They see the goodness he still posses even after living his whole life under evil, I think with Vanimórë to look too, Legolas would turn out alright. It would not be the ideal life for him or his son by any stretch of the imagination, but clearly Vanimórë doesn't give his influence enough credit. 

Great chapter! Thank you! 



Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, Poppy Marie :)

Yes, I think there is a great deal of vulnerability in Van in this chapter, and I do think Maglor understood more than he showed or let himself say. I think he went away to 'digest' what they had shared.

Yes, Sauron's silence says more than any lashing out of anger would, but I also think he does know Legolas won't go home, so he is still on a leash, as is Vanimórë. But then there is Dana. I don't think Sauron wants to weaken Van with Dana waiting in Sud Sicanna. He may even want to see what Vanimórë does when they inevitably clash.

It is also clear to me how little Vanimórë thinks of himself here, he has this great fear of the man Legolas will turn into under Sauron, but he himself has become a great man. Even though he does not see it in himself, Legolas sees it, the men in his army see it, Maglor has seen it, Glorfindel during the last alliance. They see the goodness he still posses even after living his whole life under evil, I think with Vanimórë to look too, Legolas would turn out alright. It would not be the ideal life for him or his son by any stretch of the imagination, but clearly Vanimórë doesn't give his influence enough credit.

This is a very good point actually; I think Legolas would grow into a great man and leader under Van's aegis, but Vanimórë of course, cannot see that at all.



Reviewer: PoppyMarie Signed
Date: February 20, 2017 Title: Chapter 50: Chapter 50 ~ A Jewell In The Storm~

Yes! Finally Van and Maglor get their night together! That was so beautifully written, the passion and fire is just so fantastic, I love it! It also shows the kind of trust Vanimórë has for Maglor, to willingly abdicate control is no small thing for him. I can't wait to see more of them as Maglor seems to want to ignore it again, I'm sure there is more amazing tension ahead for them! 

I do hope we get some flashbacks to Legolas's night, or maybe some reflection on it from his or Glorfindel's perspective, I'm interested to see how they view one another at this stage. I love that Legolas is becoming more assertive and getting what he wants, I really do enjoy him as a character because I see the potential he has to become one of your fantastic, predatory wood elves, I'm excited to see what the future holds. 

Little Gíl is rather intimidating, I have guesses about him, but I really want to know what he is! He seems to love Legolas, but there is something strangely adult in him, the fact that he understands so much is a touch unnerving. 

Fantastic as always, thanks so much! 



Author's Response: Tank yo so much, Popy :) I am so glad you enjoyed this -- and yes, Van really must trust Maglor almost implicitly to allow him to take control this night :) I am sure we shall have flashbacks of Legolas' night :)