As always, a masterly piece of writing- the closeness of the action makes it so there is no real sense of the assailant until he sees his 'macrbre grimace'' of death. You get the action very focused in this and that succinctness is perfect. As always.
Thanks Ziggy. Glad it worked for you. I always try to make a drabble be a mini-story with hints at something larger.
You've done it perfectly: every word counts to paint the scene, and the fight is vivid and desperate. Poor Legolas, all his dreams of glory replaced by the memory of an unwelcome touch... and that ugly death grimace.
Thank you Russa! And already we're seriously behind schedule. Good thing I didn't tell everyone I was going to try Nanowrimo. Epic fail if so. Hugs!
Oh, this shows the brutal swiftness of Legolas' first battle, not what he was expecting, but Legolas reacted without thinking. And then found that there was nothing noble in death. Very good, Elfscribe. Amazes me how you work so much into a drabble - I have said it before, I know.
Thanks Spice. Drabbles are good exercises. I'm really impressed with your literary output. Wish I was a lot more prolific.
I have such admiration for people who can write a drabble. I've tried. I can't. I'm just too long winded. You know, we all think of Legolas as being the expert archer. I like the idea that his first kill was hand to hand combat. It makes it more personal, I think, rather than hitting a target at a distance. I like this. Good job.
Thanks L8. It's been good to start writing again, even if just a drabble.