Reviews For Negotiations
Name: ziggy (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2018 22:04 · For: Chapter 1
Lovely piece of writing and glad you are back and writing some more! Yes please:)
Name: NelyafinweFeanorion (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 16:17 · For: Chapter 1
I really like this. Haleth and Caranthir have a fascinating dynamic and you have brought out some of those details here.
I have always appreciated his offer to her and though I understand her reasoning I do wish she had taken him up on it. For her own sake and for the Haladin.
This offer really is one detail about Caranthir that tells us something of his character. I am glad Tolkien included this incident.
You had Haleth raise such valid points and her bravery and questioning of him regarding the broad issue of land ownership in general and the philosophy that leads to such ideas in a society was excellent. That you made him laugh made the exchange even better. Many would expect anger from this fourth son of Feanor but I'm glad you took this route.
Name: Gabriel (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 12:26 · For: Chapter 1
Oh my! I think Caranthir has met his match.
I so adore Caranthir and like reading different scenario's of he and Haleth's first meeting, which some have written. But I think this one is the best so far.
The land belongs to no one,” she claims, her eyes hard and unyielding, “The earth has been here before we walked it and it will be here when we are gone. To stake a claim on it is foolish.”
“And why would that be?”
“Nature is volatile, to claim something means you can control it, can bend its will and make it your own. Can you control the land you claim then, Lord? Is there some elf-magic I am unaware of that allows you to bend nature to your whims? Or is your ego merely so large that it thinks it can tame the very thing that allows it to live?”
Caranthir, to her surprise, laughs then. Loud and harsh and it causes the gaze of others to turn their way.
“There is much you are unaware of I wager,” Caranthir says, amusement lacing his words
What stands out the most about this is that Caranthir shows her so much respect and honor as a woman and as a leader of her people even though she refuses his aid etc.
Name: Narya (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 9:57 · For: Chapter 1
ETA - just seen it says complete - I would happily have read a novel of these two, but it works perfectly as a one shot too. And if you were ever so inclined I would eat up anything more you produced starring this pair :D
I hope you're doing better now. Health Things suck.
Author's Response: Thank you! And while this is marked as complete I do plan on writing more about these two because I love them dearly. I might even write a sequel to this later when I have the time. And yeah, Health Things do suck but I am doing much better now, thanks for your kind wishes! In regards to your other review, thank you! I tried to get into Haleth's head and figure why she wouldn't want to bow to Caranthir and I'm glad that that came across. And gosh, with their characterization I had a terribly rough time with that because I wanted them to feel realistic you know? But anyway, thanks for your kind words!
Name: Narya (Signed) · Date: December 08, 2018 9:55 · For: Chapter 1
This is great! I have a lot of love for Haleth and Caranthir, either as friends or as more, and you write them beautifully. I love that you give us a sense of the history and traditions of Haleth's people under the surface of her dialogue with Caranthir, and you bring their characters to life perfectly. This is exactly how I see them both - proud, stubborn, intelligent.
I especially loved this:
Haleth stares at the elf-lord and wonders what he knows of death.
Oh, Haleth. More than you think.
Very, very nice stuff. I hope there'll be more?
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