A beautiful end to a beautiful story. And there was enough heat to warm up a freezing morning :-) It's good to know that even though there is tragedy to come, Legolas and Elwin do get some happiness. I like to think Legolas finds healing from the curse in Valinor and is reunited with Elwin there.
Thanks for posting this here.
It's nice to get the blood going, don't you think? I like to imagine that Legolas and Elwin are reunited in Valinor too. Thank you so much for your steady commentary, which kept me interested in continuing to post. Cheers!
I have thoroughly enjoyed rereading this tale, just as much as I did the first time, so many years ago. I hope you contiinue to post the rest of your work here, too.
Thank you for your kind words. I'll try to post more of my fics, as I have time
How exciting, sad. You write men so well. They can’t just sit down and have a talk, they have to be doing something else along with. I’ve noticed in your stories you often put a game or a fight between men when they have an issue to discuss. I am so glad you are posting here. I have never read this story beyond this point so I am especially looking forward to the next chapter.
Hi Lisse. I think it always works a little better when having a conversation to have the characters doing something in addition, it just helps add some action and interest to the scene. Thanks so much for commenting. The last chapter is up now.
The farewell between Legolas and Elwin was really powerful. As I think I've said before, you don't over-describe and less is more when it comes to writing such powerful emotion. Not for the first time you brought tears to my eyes.
But thank goodness for both Lindir and Glorfindel, doing their best to show Legolas the error of his ways - Glorfindel more successfully than Lindir, but I think Lindir deserves an award for bravery, taking on Legolas like that. And so Legolas will stay. I'm glad that even though it ultimately ends in tragedy, Legolas and Elwin do have good times together.
Hi Naledi. I'm pleased that this part brought tears to your eyes since it means I must have done something right. I think this chapter with Glorfindel giving Legolas a lesson in how to manage his heart is my favorite in this fic. Lindir does get kudos for bravery, but perhaps not so much for strategic thinking. LOL. I'm glad for his sake and everyone else's though, that he didn't succeed in killing Legolas. Thanks for the comment. Last chapter is up.
I was relieved that Thornan survived. Even though I knew Elwin and Glorfindel would make it, I couldn't remember what happened to Thornan. I was quite worried for him! At least now Lindir can welcome him back properly :-)
It was good to see Glorfindel and Elrond healing the rifts in their relationship. But it's painful that the event that brought them closer has pushed Legolas and Elwin apart. Poor Legolas and Elwin - you are cruel to your characters! But that's what makes your stories so entertaining :-)
I'm glad you've continued to post this here and I'm looking forward to the next installment.
Glad I am that you were worried about one of my OCs. I enjoyed exploring the contrast between the more mature relationship of Glorfindel and Elrond (think old married couple) and the young lovers, both of them having troubles. We writers are usually cruel to our characters, aren't we? We put them in all kinds of awful situations. Thanks for your comments. Next to last chapter is up.
That was a gripping chapter - I was tense all the way through. It was a great moment when Glorfindel did his shining act. Tolkien's decription of how Glorfindel drives off the wraiths at the Ford of Bruinen is one of my favourite bits and it was good to see Glorfindel behaving the same way here.
So Legolas and Elwin are back together and safe...for now.
When thinking about characterizing Glorfindel, I decided that more should be done with the way he looks on the other side and creating a duality that shows he's different from the other elves. I'm so pleased you liked it. And yes, they're safe for the moment. There's 3 more chapters to go. lol. Thanks for the comment Naledi. If it wasn't for you, I think I'd have given up on posting this.
Aaargh! Another evil cliffie!
This was such a gripping chapter. My heart was pounding all the way through. I love Legolas's determination and cunning in making the orcs believe there was more than one of him. I just hope Elrond can summon the twins to his aid before the others get even more hurt than they are now.
I'm glad it was holding your interest. I really liked the idea of Legolas swinging through the trees like that. It really seemed appropriate for a Mirkwood elf. Next chapter should resolve some of the fears. *g*. Thanks Naledi!
Thanks for the cliffhanger warning, I needed it! Poor Glorfindel, and poor Legolas, being forced to run when he wants to help.
I love your orcs. They match well with how Tolkien writes them - brutish and stupid, but with some sharper ones here and there to keep them in line. I also liked how the twins have become a sort of legend among them. That's how I imagine it to be.
Thanks for the fast updates - I hate to be kept in suspense!
There will be some more cliffhangers in this story before the end. So often orcs in our stories are merely cannon fodder or sword fodder as the case may be. It was interesting to actually create some personalities, just as Tolkien does, and have at least one of them be smart enough to present a real challenge. Of course it's possible Ergluk may outsmart himself. It makes sense, doesn't it, that they have become a legend among the orcs, who although nasty and brutish, do seem to want to live. Thanks for the feedback!
Aargh - what a cliffhanger to end on. And I really can't remember what happens next!
Glorfindel's tale of his death and rebirth was really powerful. I think it was because you didn't over-describe it, but instead put it in terms of Glorfindel's sensations and impressions at each point. For me, that gave it more impact than long descriptions.
I hope you'll update quickly and end the suspense!
I know that one's a bad cliff-hanger and the next chapter's no better. I enjoyed doing the research back then on Glorfindel's tale and then imagining how it could have happened. I'm happy you felt it had impact. Thanks as ever for the comments!
I can't say I blame Glorfindel for that moment of lust - Legolas truly is irresistible!
Another wonderful chapter. Will's passing was sad but at least it was peaceful. I liked the end where Elwin feels his presence and hears that single note from the violin. Beautiful!
That was certainly a moment of temptation for Glorfindel. But it wouldn't have been in character for him to act on it, even though that certainly broke the fanfic tradition of the time of having everyone fall in bed with everyone else. lol. I'm very glad you mentioned that part about Will's passing. It made me cry when I wrote it, so I'm happy that it comes across as beautiful and sad.
Such a beautiful, heartbreaking chapter. The deathbed scene was particularly moving - I loved Elwin's song, especially the way it fitted with both Elwin's farewell to Will and Legolas's future farewell to Elwin.
Legolas's reaction also brought tears to my eyes. Thank goodness Glorfindel is there and understands something of what he is feeling.
Thank you Naledi. I know this chapter is hard for some folks, but I've always liked the relationship between Elwin and Will. One of the fascinating things about writing about relationships with mortals and immortals is the fact that one will age while the other doesn't and the conflicts that creates. Legolas is having a hard time facing the whole concept, particularly with the recent news from Elrond. Next chapter is up.
I loved your description of Glorfindel here:
His fair face was expressionless. His hands appeared translucent in the firelight like parchment shielding a candle. Legolas noticed that occasionally a white light flickered over his face that was quickly shrouded. But when he looked up into Legolas's eyes, the prince saw it burning in the warrior's pupils.
I always imagine Glorfindel as being otherwordly, even to other elves and you've captured that feeling so well here.
Poor Legolas, Elronds foresight has placed a large burden upon him and the fact that he can't communicate any of this to Elwin is going to prove his undoing. You've sown the seeds for future tragedy perfectly. Great writing, even if it does make me sad!
I rather like that description of Glorfindel too. And yes, a tough burden for Legolas. Poor Elwin. Thank you, Naledi. I really appreciate that you're continuing to give feedback.
This chapter made me laugh just as much as it did the first time I read it. The picture of Legolas and Elwin arriving at Elrond's door in that state just cracked me up. And it's nice to think that Elrond got a laugh out of it too. Not to mention some highly effective oil :-)
Great chapter! Looking forward to more, as always!
Good to know it still made you laugh. *g* Thanks so much Naledi.
Thanks for posting again so soon! I loved your description of the music. By the end I felt as though I heard it all! Of course, the bit I liked best was the effect it was having on Legolas.
There's still the foreboding running through the scene and now Elrond has caught a glimpse. Actually I wouldn't mind being gifted with foresight if it allowed me to see the same thing he did! That's a definite perk of the job!
My character Elwin indulges my own secret desire to play Celtic fiddle. I feel like I heard that concert too and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Obviously Legolas did. And yes Elrond's foresight apparently has a voyeuristic side-effect. Not too bad if you can do that. Thanks, as ever, for the comments!
This is a wonderful chapter, full of the joys of reunion but with ominous signs of things to come. I like the way you have Legolas putting his hand to his chest every now and again - literally suffering from heartache. It serves as a reminder of his inability to give himself fully to Elwin and a reminder that ultimately this story is a tragedy.
But at least you've given them a respite here. I loved the welcome Elwin gave to Legolas. I laughed out loud when Glorfindel walked in on them. Thank goodness he's got a sense of humour!
I look forward to the next chapter :-)
It was great to be able to give them a joyful time together, even if there is still a shadow there from the dragon's curse. Glad you liked Glorfindel's interruption there. This story was the first time I'd written Glorfindel and I discovered I liked him, or my version of him anyway. Thanks for commenting. Just for you, the next chapter is up now.
I'm glad you're posting this, too. It will be fun to read about Legolas and Elwin's antics in Imladris. I remember Elrohir's potion v well! *eg*
Oh yes THAT potion. LOL. So nice of you to remember this fic kindly. Thanks for commenting!